Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，明确表达规则内容，并使用连接词使回答更自然流畅。

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear uniforms to promote unity. Also, the use of smartphones is strictly controlled to prevent distractions during class.

提案: 回答中重复和犹豫较多，表达不够清晰，建议练习简洁表达观点，避免重复，并用更准确的词汇表达情感和观点。

例: I believe that having some rules is necessary, but too many rules can make students feel depressed and stressed, which is not beneficial for their learning.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，提供具体例子来支持观点。

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated English teacher in primary school. He helped me improve my writing and speaking skills by giving extra lessons after school.

提案: 回答未完成且表达不流畅，建议完整表达观点，使用连接词使句子连贯，并注意语法准确。

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because a sense of freedom helps students develop self-discipline. However, too many rules can make students feel controlled and unhappy.

提案: 回答内容混乱且语法错误严重，建议理清思路，简洁表达经历，避免无关信息，使用正确的语法和词汇。

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher at university. She did not allow us to use phones or computers during her classes because she believed it would distract us from learning.

提案: 回答表达不清晰且有语法错误，建议简化句子，明确表达观点，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I would not like to work in a school without rules because students might become disorderly. Also, teachers would have to take on more responsibility to manage the students, which is not ideal.

× Yes, of course, when I was in high school, the students were required to wear uniform when you are in class to show a sense of unity and what more smartphones will exhibit.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was in high school, the students were required to wear uniforms when they were in class to show a sense of unity and to prevent distractions caused by smartphones.

句中“wear uniform”应为复数形式“wear uniforms”，因为指的是所有学生的制服，属于复数。且“when you are in class”应改为“when they were in class”，保持时态一致且主语一致。最后部分表达不清，改为“to prevent distractions caused by smartphones”更符合语境。

× Endure strictly activated when you are in school to avoid the destruction by the phones.

✓ Strict rules were strictly enforced when you were in school to avoid distractions caused by phones.

原句结构混乱，动词“Endure strictly activated”不合语法，应改为“Strict rules were strictly enforced”，且“you are”改为“you were”保持时态一致。

× We're actually, we're actually, I think, uh, rules should be made, but it need a suitable numbers to be made.

✓ Actually, I think rules should be made, but they need to be a suitable number.

“it need”应为“they need”，因为“rules”是复数，且“a suitable numbers”应为“a suitable number”，数词和名词单复数不匹配。

× Uh, more rules may lead to a very depression.

✓ More rules may lead to severe depression.

“a very depression”错误，depression是不可数名词，不能用冠词“a”，且“very”修饰形容词，改为“severe”更合适。

× that's making them feel that their life will be desperated, I don't think.

✓ that makes them feel that their lives will be desperate, I don't think so.

“that's making”应为“that makes”，时态和语态错误；“their life”应为“their lives”，life应复数；“desperated”拼写错误，应为“desperate”。

× When I was in the primary high school I made AI met a English teacher, he helped me a lot when I was writing message or just learning my English oral English.

✓ When I was in primary and high school, I met an English teacher who helped me a lot when I was writing messages or just learning my spoken English.

“made AI met”语法错误，应为“met”；“a English teacher”应为“an English teacher”，冠词使用错误；“writing message”应为“writing messages”，复数形式；“oral English”应为“spoken English”，表达更自然。

× He helped me a lot to to improve my English and after school he often teach me a lot.

✓ He helped me a lot to improve my English, and after school he often taught me a lot.

“teach”应为过去式“taught”，与前文时态保持一致。

× I think sense of freedom is what we need to foster our discipline of every students.

✓ I think a sense of freedom is what we need to foster the discipline of every student.

“sense of freedom”前应加冠词“a”；“discipline of every students”中“students”应为单数“student”，且“the discipline”更合适。

× But once you make the more rule, the students will feel controlled and.

✓ But once you make more rules, the students will feel controlled.

“the more rule”应为“more rules”，冠词和单复数错误；句尾“and”多余，应去掉。

× That's when I have a cooperative strategy in lesson lessons.

✓ That's when I had a cooperative strategy in lessons.

“lesson lessons”重复且错误，应为复数“lessons”；时态应与上下文一致，改为过去式“had”。

× When I was in the university is a very strict teacher that you can use phone or your computer at all with having her class because hitting is very harmful to your class work.

✓ When I was at university, there was a very strict teacher who did not allow us to use phones or computers during her class because texting is very harmful to your classwork.

“When I was in the university is a very strict teacher”语法错误，应分为两句；“you can use phone or your computer at all with having her class”表达错误，应为“did not allow us to use phones or computers during her class”；“hitting”应为“texting”；“class work”合成词“classwork”。

× Well, I don't like to work as a teacher in a rule free school because once the rule there's no rule in the school, the students will film will not be older ordered and the teacher should be take more responsibility of the students.

✓ Well, I don't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because if there are no rules in the school, the students will not be well ordered and the teacher should take more responsibility for the students.

“once the rule there's no rule”表达混乱，应为“if there are no rules”；“film will not be older ordered”拼写和表达错误，应为“will not be well ordered”；“should be take”应为“should take”；“responsibility of”应为“responsibility for”。

× I don't think the teacher should take so many responsibility to restrict the students.

✓ I don't think the teacher should take so much responsibility to restrict the students.

“responsibility”是不可数名词，应使用“much”而非“many”。