Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure grammatical accuracy.

例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For example, we must be punctual and respect our teachers. These rules help maintain discipline and teach us important social values.

提案: Try to organise your answer with clear linking words and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think more rules can benefit students because they promote discipline and punctuality. For instance, rules about attendance encourage students to be on time, which prepares them for future challenges.

提案: Your answer should be more grammatically correct and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and filler words.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher who taught me personal grooming. She gave me useful tips to improve my communication skills during early morning classes from 6 to 9 AM.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your opinion clearly. Avoid vague phrases and filler words.

例: I prefer schools to have a balanced approach. Too many rules can be stressful, but too much freedom may lead to indiscipline. Therefore, a balanced environment helps students develop well.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and grammar. Avoid confusing phrases and provide clear, specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, my primary school math teacher was very strict. He would shout at me for small mistakes and sometimes punished me in front of the class. Because of this, I was scared and tried to complete every assignment carefully.

提案: Your answer should be more organised and grammatically correct. Clearly express your opinion and support it with reasons using linking words.

例: Yes, I would like to work as a teacher, but I believe schools should have rules. Without rules, students may become undisciplined, which can affect their learning and development.

× Yes, in my school there's certain rules to be followed by the student and it was required for keep them disciplined and uh teach them the Murad values uh of the society.

✓ Yes, in my school there are certain rules to be followed by the students and it is required to keep them disciplined and teach them the moral values of the society.

The phrase 'there's certain rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural, so 'there are' should be used instead of 'there's' (there is). Also, 'the student' should be plural 'the students' to match 'rules'. 'It was required for keep' is incorrect; it should be 'it is required to keep'. 'Murad values' seems to be a typo for 'moral values'. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms.

× Yes, I believe uh, following the rules and regulation, student became more disciplined and it teaches them the ethical values and to be punctual and uh, to be competing in, in his life to face any uh, adverse condition.

✓ Yes, I believe that following the rules and regulations, students become more disciplined and it teaches them ethical values, to be punctual, and to compete in their life to face any adverse conditions.

'Rules and regulation' should be plural 'rules and regulations'. 'Student became' should be 'students become' to agree in number and tense. 'To be competing' should be 'to compete' to match the infinitive form. 'His life' should be 'their life' to agree with plural 'students'. These corrections fix pluralization, subject-verb agreement, and verb form errors.

× Yes, I had a teacher who taking care of my personal grooming classes where I was given tips and tricks how to improve your communication skill.

✓ Yes, I had a teacher who took care of my personal grooming classes where I was given tips and tricks on how to improve my communication skills.

'Who taking care' is incorrect; it should be 'who took care' to use the past tense verb. 'Your communication skill' should be 'my communication skills' to maintain consistent pronouns and plural form. These corrections address verb tense and pronoun usage.

× Uh, timing from morning 6:00 to 9:00 AM where I was studying under.

✓ The timing was from 6:00 to 9:00 AM in the morning where I was studying.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb and misuses 'under'. Adding 'The timing was' clarifies the sentence structure. 'In the morning' is the correct prepositional phrase for time of day. 'Studying under' is incomplete without specifying under whom; it is better omitted here. This correction improves sentence structure and preposition use.

× I prefer uh the schools should have a balance through neither should have stressed roles or nor given stro student more freedom.

✓ I prefer that schools should have a balance; neither should have strict rules nor give students more freedom.

The original sentence misuses conjunctions 'through', 'or', and 'nor'. The correct correlative conjunction pair is 'neither... nor'. 'Stressed roles' should be 'strict rules'. 'Stro student' is a typo for 'strict rules' and 'students'. The correction fixes conjunction use, word choice, and sentence clarity.

× A balance uh life in school help to enrich the life of people studying there and make them discipline and develop.

✓ A balanced life in school helps to enrich the lives of the students studying there and makes them disciplined and helps them develop.

'A balance uh life' should be 'A balanced life'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject. 'Life of people' is better as 'lives of the students' for clarity. 'Make them discipline' should be 'makes them disciplined'. The sentence also needs parallel structure and clarity, which the correction provides.

× He in my primary school 1 teacher math teacher was very strict.

✓ In my primary school, my math teacher was very strict.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'He in my primary school 1 teacher math teacher' is incorrect word order and redundancy. The correction simplifies and corrects the sentence structure and tense.

× I in small mistake he shouted at me and sometimes also give him uh beating me in front of whole class.

✓ If I made a small mistake, he shouted at me and sometimes also beat me in front of the whole class.

'I in small mistake' is incorrect; it should be 'If I made a small mistake'. 'Give him uh beating me' is incorrect; it should be 'beat me'. 'Whole class' needs the definite article 'the'. The correction fixes conditional sentence structure and past tense verb forms.

× I scared him and I tried to do every tax assignment.

✓ I was scared of him and I tried to do every task assignment.

'I scared him' means 'I frightened him', but the intended meaning is 'I was scared of him'. 'Tax assignment' is a typo for 'task assignment'. The correction fixes pronoun use and word choice.

× Yes Sir, if I get a chance to tease I definitely do that because I feel teaching profession is respectful profession I but teaching should be combined with rules.

✓ Yes Sir, if I get a chance to teach, I will definitely do that because I feel teaching is a respectful profession, but teaching should be combined with rules.

'Tease' is a typo for 'teach'. The modal verb 'will' is needed to express future intention. 'Teaching profession is respectful profession' needs an article 'a' before 'respectful profession'. The sentence also needs proper punctuation and conjunction use. The correction addresses modal verb use and sentence clarity.

× That rule is indiscipline cannot make a good student so.

✓ That rule is that indiscipline cannot make a good student, so...

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper conjunctions. 'That rule is indiscipline cannot make a good student' should be 'That rule is that indiscipline cannot make a good student'. The correction adds the missing conjunction 'that' to clarify the meaning.