Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clearer explanations. Also, correct grammar mistakes and complete your sentences for better clarity.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must be respectful to teachers and classmates. These rules help create a positive learning environment and encourage good behavior.

提案: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear comparisons like 'more benefits than robots.' Use specific examples and complete your sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I think students can benefit from certain rules, such as wearing uniforms. For instance, uniforms promote equality among students and reduce distractions in class.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Provide clear and complete answers with supporting details. Avoid filler words and make your points more specific and organized.

例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher in high school about 10 years ago. She was always smiling and supportive, which made learning enjoyable compared to other stricter teachers.

提案: Make sure to pronounce words clearly and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rules' instead of 'wolf'). Give a direct answer and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

例: I prefer having some rules at school, like wearing uniforms, because they help maintain discipline and create a sense of unity among students.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid pronoun confusion. Use linking words to explain why the teacher was strict and how it affected you. Speak clearly and organize your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher in high school. She always expected us to answer her questions correctly, which motivated me to study harder.

提案: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Avoid vague statements and explain your opinion clearly with reasons. Use linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: I don't plan to become a teacher, but I think a rule-free school might not be effective because every student is unique and needs some guidance to learn properly.

× I think most schools have their own rules and regulations to follow because that's also the way to to teach the children to be more respectful.

✓ I think most schools have their own rules and regulations to follow because that's also the way to teach the children to be more respectful.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'to' which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'to' corrects the sentence structure and improves clarity.

× Also be a good at school.

✓ Also be good at school.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the adjective 'good'. In English, 'good' as an adjective does not require an article when used predicatively. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× Well, it depends on what kind of rules that the schools wants.

✓ Well, it depends on what kind of rules the school wants.

The phrase 'the schools wants' is incorrect because 'schools' is plural but 'wants' is singular. Also, 'that' is unnecessary here. Changing 'schools' to singular 'school' and removing 'that' corrects subject-verb agreement and sentence flow.

× But for me maybe it has more benefits than robots.

✓ But for me, maybe it has more benefits than rules.

The word 'robots' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'rules'. Replacing 'robots' with 'rules' makes the sentence meaningful and contextually appropriate.

× It is nice to see the students that they wear uniform as.

✓ It is nice to see the students wearing uniforms.

The phrase 'students that they wear uniform as' is ungrammatical. Using the present participle 'wearing' and plural 'uniforms' corrects the sentence and makes it natural.

× I think that's already way 10 years ago when I was in high school.

✓ I think that was already way 10 years ago when I was in high school.

The phrase 'that's' (that is) is present tense and incorrect when referring to a past time. Changing 'that's' to 'that was' aligns the tense with the past time reference.

× Uh, my teacher is always smiling and they just very well unlike the others that they are more strict that.

✓ Uh, my teacher was always smiling and very kind, unlike the others who were stricter.

The sentence has pronoun inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'My teacher' is singular, so 'they' is incorrect. Changing to past tense 'was' and using 'who' for relative clause improves clarity and grammar.

× Honestly, it depends on what kind of wolf, maybe if wearing of uniform or something like that, we can, uh, we can move forward with our rules at school.

✓ Honestly, it depends on what kind of rule, maybe if it's about wearing a uniform or something like that, we can move forward with our rules at school.

The word 'wolf' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'rule'. Also, 'wearing of uniform' is awkward; 'wearing a uniform' is correct. Adding 'it's about' clarifies the sentence.

× Yes, when I was in high school. I have a teacher in math.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, I had a teacher in math.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'when I was in high school' with present tense 'I have'. Changing 'have' to past tense 'had' maintains tense consistency.

× She's so very strict that he wants us to answer her question correctly.

✓ She was so very strict that she wanted us to answer her questions correctly.

The pronouns 'she' and 'he' are inconsistent referring to the same teacher. Also, tense should be past to match the time frame. Changing 'she's' to 'she was' and 'he' to 'she' corrects pronoun and tense errors.

× Every time she has she has questions so in my.

✓ Every time she had questions, so in my experience...

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Changing 'has' to past tense 'had' aligns with past context. Completing the sentence would improve clarity.

× Well it honestly it's not on my bucket list to work as a teacher but I for me the rule free school is not that effective because every woman is a unique so it depends.

✓ Well, honestly, it's not on my bucket list to work as a teacher, but for me, a rule-free school is not that effective because every woman is unique, so it depends.

The sentence has missing commas and awkward phrasing. Adding commas improves readability. 'Rule free' should be hyphenated as 'rule-free'. 'Every woman is a unique' is incorrect; 'unique' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.