Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('Every student is'). Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear uniforms to promote unity and discipline. Additionally, attendance and punctuality are strictly enforced to maintain order.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Use clearer linking words to explain cause and effect. Also, correct word choice ('roles' should be 'rules').

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because these encourage punctuality and help develop good character, which prepares them to be responsible citizens in the future.

提案: Complete your sentences fully and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of how the teacher helped you.

例: Yes, I had a dedicated math teacher in 5th grade who noticed I was struggling. She went above and beyond by giving me extra lessons after class, which greatly improved my understanding.

提案: Correct grammar errors ('roles' should be 'rules', 'students is' should be 'students are'). Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and avoid filler words.

例: I definitely prefer more rules at school because they help keep students disciplined and shape their character, which is important for becoming good citizens.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure. Use appropriate vocabulary to describe experiences clearly and avoid ambiguity.

例: Yes, I had a very strict Hindi teacher in 5th grade. If I didn't do my homework, she would punish me severely, which made school a stressful experience for me.

提案: Improve grammar ('have' should be 'has', 'role' should be 'rules'). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid sentence fragments.

例: Definitely not. I prefer to work in a school that has proper discipline and rules because they help shape students' character. Without rules, it would be difficult to maintain order.

× Every students are supposed to wear the uniform when they come to the school to show the unity and discipline of the school.

✓ Every student is supposed to wear the uniform when they come to the school to show the unity and discipline of the school.

The word 'Every' is followed by a singular noun, so 'students' should be singular 'student'. Also, 'are' should be 'is' to agree with the singular subject 'Every student'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Also, the attendance and the punctuality is important role for the school.

✓ Also, attendance and punctuality are important roles for the school.

'Attendance' and 'punctuality' are two separate nouns joined by 'and', so the verb should be plural 'are'. Also, 'important role' should be plural 'important roles' to match the two subjects. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Definitely the students, uh, would benefit more for, benefit more from more roles because, uh, they will have a punctuality and there is a character transformation when they, uh, obey the roles.

✓ Definitely the students would benefit more from more rules because they will have punctuality and there is a character transformation when they obey the rules.

The correct preposition after 'benefit more' is 'from', not 'for'. Also, 'roles' should be 'rules' as per context. 'A punctuality' is incorrect; 'punctuality' is uncountable and does not need an article. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and word choice issue.

× She was teaching me math, uh, mathematics and I was not good in mathematics and she uh, went above and beyond and helped me to understand the.

✓ She was teaching me math, mathematics, and I was not good at mathematics, and she went above and beyond to help me understand it.

The correct preposition is 'good at' not 'good in'. Also, 'helped me to understand the' is incomplete; it should be 'helped me understand it'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.

× I definitely prefer more roles for the school to keep all the students in line and make sure the students is uh, shaping their character and helping to be a good citizen for the country.

✓ I definitely prefer more rules for the school to keep all the students in line and make sure the students are shaping their character and becoming good citizens for the country.

'Roles' should be 'rules' as per context. 'Students is' is incorrect; it should be 'students are' to agree in number. Also, 'helping to be a good citizen' is awkward; 'becoming good citizens' is better. This is a singular and plural issue and sentence structure improvement.

× She if I didn't do my homework and all she used to beat me.

✓ If I didn't do my homework and all, she used to beat me.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'She if' is wrong. The correct conditional structure is 'If I didn't do my homework, she used to beat me.' This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.

× So it was so traumatized here of school.

✓ So it was so traumatic here at school.

'Traumatized' is a past participle describing a person, not a situation. The correct adjective to describe the experience is 'traumatic'. Also, 'here of school' should be 'here at school'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives and prepositions issue.

× I like to work in a school which have proper discipline and proper role.

✓ I like to work in a school which has proper discipline and proper rules.

'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'school'. Also, 'proper role' should be 'proper rules' as per context. This is a subject-verb agreement and word choice issue.

× If the school have role.

✓ If the school has rules.

'School' is singular, so the verb should be 'has'. Also, 'role' should be plural 'rules' to fit context. This is a singular and plural and subject-verb agreement issue.