Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. Cümle yapınızı basit ve net tutarak, kuralların ne olduğunu ve neden önemli olduklarını açıkça belirtmelisiniz. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must attend classes on time and respect teachers. These rules help maintain order and create a good learning environment.

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir. Ayrıca, fikirlerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla desteklemelisiniz. Örneğin, 'however' veya 'but' gibi bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz.

例: I think it depends on the type of rules. Some rules can help students focus and learn better, but too many strict rules might cause stress. Therefore, teachers should carefully decide which rules are necessary.

提案: Cümlenizde anlatım bozuklukları ve tekrarlar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, öğretmenin neden özverili olduğunu ve bu durumun size etkisini daha spesifik açıklamalısınız.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in primary school. She was very disciplined and made us study from early morning until evening. Although it was tiring, I learned a lot from her commitment.

提案: Cevabınızda çok fazla dolgu kelimesi var ve cümleleriniz net değil. Daha açık ve doğrudan ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden daha az kural istediğinizi daha iyi açıklamalısınız.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because some rules, like strict uniform policies, do not help with learning. I believe students should have more freedom to focus on their studies.

提案: Cümlelerinizde dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. Daha açık ve düzgün cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, öğretmenin katı olmasının neden kötü olduğunu ve bunun öğrencilere etkisini daha net anlatmalısınız.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in primary school. He was often aggressive, which made students feel uncomfortable and sometimes caused problems in class.

提案: Cevabınızda çok fazla dolgu kelimesi ve anlamsal karışıklık var. Daha net ve akıcı cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden kural olmayan bir okulda çalışmak istemediğinizi açıkça belirtmelisiniz.

例: I would not like to work in a school without rules because without rules, students might misbehave and it would be difficult to manage the class effectively.

× There are many rules for implemented to, to call.

✓ There are many rules implemented.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'for implemented to, to call' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'There are many rules implemented.' because 'There are' correctly introduces plural 'rules' and 'implemented' acts as a past participle adjective here.

× This is really important rules for the regulatory, uh, regulation of the school.

✓ These are really important rules for the regulation of the school.

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the demonstrative adjective should be 'These' not 'This'. Also, 'regulatory regulation' is redundant and awkward; 'regulation' alone suffices.

× Uh, and most of the students have to do, have to do these rules, uh, to complain to their years.

✓ And most of the students have to follow these rules and cannot complain to their peers.

The phrase 'have to do these rules' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'follow'. Also, 'complain to their years' is incorrect; it should be 'complain to their peers' or 'teachers' depending on meaning.

× Actually, it depends on the what kind of rules implemented.

✓ Actually, it depends on what kind of rules are implemented.

The phrase 'depends on the what kind of rules implemented' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'depends on what kind of rules are implemented' with the verb 'are' to complete the clause.

× These rules is useful for the learning process, otherwise is harmful for the psychological effects.

✓ These rules are useful for the learning process; otherwise, they are harmful to psychological health.

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'harmful for the psychological effects' is awkward; 'harmful to psychological health' is better.

× For that reasons, teachers must must choose the rules according to their demand.

✓ For those reasons, teachers must choose the rules according to their needs.

The phrase 'For that reasons' is incorrect; it should be 'For those reasons' to agree in number. Also, 'their demand' is awkward; 'their needs' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I have.

The question is in present perfect 'Have you ever had', so the answer should be 'Yes, I have' not 'Yes, I had'.

× When I was in primary school my my teacher had very disciplined for that reasons.

✓ When I was in primary school, my teacher was very disciplined for that reason.

'Had very disciplined' is incorrect; the correct form is 'was very disciplined'. Also, 'for that reasons' should be 'for that reason'.

× We started to school at 7:00 and finished at 8:00 PM.

✓ We started school at 7:00 and finished at 8:00 PM.

The verb 'start' does not require the preposition 'to' before 'school'. The correct phrase is 'started school'.

× It is really hard.

✓ It was really hard.

The context is past ('When I was in primary school'), so the tense should be past 'was' not present 'is'.

× It was really hard time for me because I felt exhausted after school.

✓ It was a really hard time for me because I felt exhausted after school.

The phrase 'really hard time' needs the article 'a' before 'really' to be grammatically correct.

× Uh, I prefer, uh, fewer rules.

✓ I prefer fewer rules.

The sentence is correct but removing unnecessary fillers improves clarity.

× I think, uh, because some kind of rules, uh, are not necessary, uh, for the learning process.

✓ I think some kinds of rules are not necessary for the learning process.

'Some kind of rules' is incorrect; it should be 'some kinds of rules' or 'some kinds of rules' to agree in number.

× Uh, for example, many teachers say that these uniform, uh, not, is not suitable for the school.

✓ For example, many teachers say that this uniform is not suitable for the school.

'These uniform' is incorrect because 'uniform' is singular; it should be 'this uniform'. Also, 'not, is not' is redundant; only 'is not' is needed.

× Yes, I had as I mentioned before when I was in primary school, it was in five years I had very strict teacher.

✓ Yes, I have. As I mentioned before, when I was in primary school for five years, I had a very strict teacher.

The answer to 'Have you ever had' should be 'Yes, I have'. Also, 'it was in five years' is awkward; 'for five years' is correct. 'Very strict teacher' needs the article 'a'.

× He was really bad. He has he had aggression and he reflect this aggression to students as well sometimes become harmful activities.

✓ He was really bad. He had aggression and reflected this aggression onto students, which sometimes led to harmful activities.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'He has he had' is incorrect; 'He had' is correct. 'He reflect' should be 'he reflected'. 'Become harmful activities' is unclear; 'led to harmful activities' is better.

× Uh, I don't think so, uh, because, uh, nowadays many uh, teachers, uh, face to some challenges to, to do, uh, lack of, uh, rules, uh, minister students tend to, uh, get umm, umm, naughty things, uh, for that reasons now.

✓ I don't think so because nowadays many teachers face challenges due to lack of rules; students tend to behave badly for that reason.

The original sentence has many grammatical errors including incorrect prepositions ('face to'), awkward phrasing ('to do, lack of rules'), and unclear expressions ('get naughty things'). The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning with correct grammar.