Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to provide a more complete and natural answer by including linking words and additional details. For example, explain why these rules exist or how they affect students.

例: Yes, we have rules about dress code and haircuts because the school wants to maintain a neat and professional environment for all students.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons and use correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I think more rules could help students behave better because they provide clear guidelines and prevent problems.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and natural by using linking words and clearer sentences. Express your feelings and opinions more smoothly.

例: I don't remember having a dedicated teacher, but I sincerely hope that every student can have one because dedicated teachers inspire us to learn.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to state your preference clearly and explain your reasons with linking words.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules can make students feel uncomfortable and restricted.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and providing more details about the strict teacher and how it affected you.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher during my first semester who helped me focus on my studies and improve my discipline.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to express your opinion clearly and provide reasons using simple and correct language.

例: No, I would not like to work in a school without rules because rules help maintain order and make teaching easier.

× Yes, we have a rule for a dress code and a haircut.

✓ Yes, we have rules for dress code and haircut.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'a rule' when referring to multiple rules ('dress code' and 'haircut'). The quantifier should be plural 'rules' to match the plural items. Use plural form when referring to more than one item.

× I believe yes because they stopped the crazy student and maybe help him to director the right Rd.

✓ I believe so because they stopped the crazy student and maybe helped him to direct the right road.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'I believe yes' should be 'I believe so' for correct expression; 'help him to director' is incorrect, should be 'helped him to direct'; 'Rd' should be spelled out as 'road' for clarity. Also, verb tenses need to be consistent.

× I don't remember if I had a one, but I wish in my full heart and my feelings. Too. All students get to 1 dedicated teacher.

✓ I don't remember if I had one, but I wish with all my heart and feelings that all students get a dedicated teacher.

The phrase 'had a one' is incorrect; 'one' alone suffices without 'a'. 'In my full heart and my feelings' is awkward; 'with all my heart and feelings' is correct. 'Get to 1 dedicated teacher' should be 'get a dedicated teacher' for proper quantifier and article use.

× Usually no, because I have a rule. More rules mean uncomfortable students.

✓ Usually no, because I have rules. More rules mean students are uncomfortable.

'I have a rule' is incorrect if referring generally; it should be 'I have rules'. Also, 'mean uncomfortable students' is awkward; better to say 'mean students are uncomfortable' to clarify meaning.

× Yes, I have one direct teacher in first semester for my career in the school.

✓ Yes, I had one strict teacher in the first semester of my school career.

'Direct teacher' is incorrect; the intended adjective is likely 'strict'. Also, 'in first semester for my career in the school' is awkward; 'in the first semester of my school career' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Not really, because I can't explain myself how to explain that books are the medications.

✓ Not really, because I can't explain how to say that books are like medicine.

'Explain myself how to explain' is incorrect; 'explain how to say' is clearer. 'Books are the medications' is awkward; 'books are like medicine' conveys the intended metaphor better.