Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, provide specific details about the rules and their effects. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, when I was at school, students were not allowed to bring smartphones. I think this rule was effective because it helped us focus better in class. Additionally, students were required to complete their homework on time, which encouraged discipline.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains filler words. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your reasoning. Avoid hesitation and be concise.

例: I believe that some rules are necessary to maintain order, but they should be flexible. Students also need some freedom to express themselves and enjoy school life, so too many rules might be counterproductive.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is somewhat confusing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Provide specific examples of the teacher's dedication to make your answer more effective.

例: Yes, my English teacher was very dedicated. He knew the subject well and always helped students who struggled. For example, he organized extra classes to improve our speaking skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many filler words. Try to state your preference clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer having some general rules at school because students are young and need guidance. However, I think the rules should not be too strict to allow students some freedom.

提案: Your answer is understandable but repetitive and slightly awkward. Avoid repeating phrases and use more precise vocabulary. Provide specific examples to support your statements.

例: Yes, my math teacher was very strict and serious about discipline. For instance, he would give extra assignments or punish us if we failed to complete our homework.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and provide reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I would not like to work in a rule-free school because children and teenagers need some rules to guide their behavior. Strict rules can help maintain discipline and create a good learning environment.

× When I was at school, yes, my students banned from taking smartphones.

✓ When I was at school, yes, students were banned from taking smartphones.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'were' to form the passive voice correctly. 'Students banned' is incomplete; it should be 'students were banned' to indicate the action in the past.

× Today school and it it was great.

✓ The school was strict, and it was great.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. It seems to try to express that the school was strict or had rules, so it is corrected to a clear, complete sentence.

× And well students was forced to do their homework.

✓ And well, students were forced to do their homework.

The subject 'students' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in number.

× some rules are necessary for a students, but they should be flu flexible and umm, while students should have some uh, freedom to uh, live their lives in a school.

✓ Some rules are necessary for students, but they should be flexible, and students should have some freedom to live their lives at school.

The article 'a' before 'students' is incorrect because 'students' is plural. Also, 'flu flexible' seems to be a typo and is corrected to 'flexible'. The preposition 'in a school' is better as 'at school' to indicate being present in the school environment.

× Yes, my English teacher is a strong person and in English and he know what it's doing and he is dedicated to learn students what they want and he also a is a very great person.

✓ Yes, my English teacher is a strong person in English, and he knows what he's doing. He is dedicated to teaching students what they want, and he is also a very great person.

The verb 'know' should be 'knows' to agree with the singular subject 'he'. 'It's doing' should be 'he's doing' to refer to the teacher. 'Dedicated to learn students' is incorrect; it should be 'dedicated to teaching students'. The phrase 'he also a is' is corrected to 'he is also' for proper word order.

× I'm a liberal person and I don't think anyone can have any rules but, umm, for students because they are, uh, in young ages, uh, we should have some rules, some, uh, general rules, umm, yes.

✓ I'm a liberal person, and I don't think anyone should have many rules, but for students, because they are young, we should have some general rules, yes.

The phrase 'in young ages' is incorrect; it should be 'young'. Also, 'any rules but for students' is awkward; 'many rules' fits better. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, when I was a teenager my mathematical teacher was very strict and harsh in learning in learning mathematics and he probably punished us when we didn't do homework.

✓ Yes, when I was a teenager, my mathematics teacher was very strict and harsh in teaching mathematics, and he probably punished us when we didn't do our homework.

'Mathematical teacher' is better as 'mathematics teacher'. The phrase 'in learning in learning' is repetitive and corrected to 'in teaching'. 'Do homework' should be 'do our homework' to specify possession.

× I prefer not because when they are kids or teenagers and we should have some rules and maybe some strict rules for them to contain them and change them to do what we want.

✓ I prefer not, because when they are kids or teenagers, we should have some rules, maybe some strict rules, to guide them and help them do what we want.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. 'Contain them and change them' is incorrect usage; 'guide them and help them' is more appropriate. Also, commas are added for clarity.