Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles, and avoid hesitations. Aim for 2–4 sentences with clear nouns (e.g., uniform, hairstyle requirement, attendance).

例: Yes. There are many rules at my school. For example, all students must wear the same uniform and girls are required to wear two braids or ponytails. In addition, attendance is compulsory, which helps maintain discipline.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence then support it with a clear reason using linking words. Use natural expressions (e.g., “structure,” “discipline”) and avoid repetitive or unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. More rules can benefit students because they provide structure and discipline. As a result, students are more focused and form better study habits.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of what made the teacher dedicated. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler sounds. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher who taught me from first to fifth grade. He spent extra time after class to explain difficult topics, and his encouragement helped build a strong foundation for my education.

提案: State your preference clearly (e.g., “I prefer a moderate number of rules”), then give two brief reasons using linking words (e.g., “because… and because…”). Avoid vague phrases and hesitations.

例: I prefer a moderate number of rules. Too many rules can be restrictive and stressful, while too few can lead to chaos; a balanced approach keeps order without stifling students.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and then explain specifically what made the teacher strict and how that affected you. Use correct grammar (past tense) and avoid repeating words. Provide one concrete result.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who often disciplined students for lateness and poor homework. Although she was harsh, her standards made me more responsible and improved my study habits.

提案: Give a direct opinion and one or two clear reasons. Avoid contradictory or unclear statements. Use natural phrases like “I wouldn’t prefer” or “I prefer schools with rules” and explain why (discipline, safety).

例: I wouldn’t want to teach at a rule-free school. I prefer schools with clear rules because they create a safe, orderly environment and help students focus on learning.

× Yeah, in my school there are lots of rules for students like we have to wear school dresses the same dress of all the students.

✓ Yeah, in my school there are lots of rules for students, for example we all have to wear the same school uniform.

The original mixes singular and plural incorrectly ('school dresses the same dress of all the students'). Use 'the same school uniform' to express one uniform shared by all. Also clarified word order and natural collocation ('wear the same school uniform').

× We have to do a 2 ponytail or two braids and we, I have to attend the every class.

✓ We have to wear two ponytails or two braids, and I have to attend every class.

'Do a 2 ponytail' is incorrect; use 'wear two ponytails'. Also 'the every class' incorrectly uses the definite article; use 'every class' instead. Removed extra pronoun 'we, I'.

× Uh, also there are other rules like their, their.

✓ Uh, also there are other rules like that.

'Their' is a possessive pronoun and is incorrectly used here. Replace with demonstrative 'that' or 'those' to refer to other rules. Kept it singular 'that' for unspecified examples.

× Yeah, I agree with that. Because when we live our life in a specific role or maintain our rules or regulation, then our life or life cycle or lifestyle give a, uh, shape in a circle shape in a good way.

✓ Yes, I agree because when we live our lives with specific rules and regulations, our lifestyle takes a better, more organized shape.

Run-on and redundant phrases ('life or life cycle or lifestyle', 'shape in a circle shape') create awkward structure. 'Live our life' should be 'live our lives'. 'Rules or regulation' should be plural 'rules and regulations'. 'Give a shape' corrected to 'takes a ... shape'. Simplified to be natural and clear.

× That's why I think it's benefited the students.

✓ That's why I think it benefits the students.

'It's benefited' is incorrect passive/perfect construction here. Use simple present 'it benefits' to express a general truth. This fixes subject-verb agreement and tense choice.

× Yeah, I have a dedicated teacher who taught me from class one to five and he taught me about different things.

✓ Yes, I had a dedicated teacher who taught me from class one to five and who taught me many things.

When referring to a past, use past tense consistently: 'have' should be 'had' if the teacher is no longer currently teaching the student. 'About different things' is awkward; use 'many things'.

× And my base of education is, uh was grow was developed by him.

✓ And the basis of my education was developed by him.

Original contains incorrect verb forms 'was grow was developed'. Use 'was developed' (past passive) and correct noun 'basis' for 'base of education'.

× Uh, I don't prefer more or fewer. I prefer in between them because if we do more strictly, then there are certain circumstances that can cause, uh, different things.

✓ I don't prefer more or fewer rules; I prefer something in between, because if we are too strict it can cause problems.

'More or fewer' needs 'rules' after it. 'Prefer in between them' is unnatural; use 'something in between'. 'Do more strictly' incorrect verb and adverb usage; change to 'are too strict'. 'Different things' is vague; 'problems' is clearer.

× Or if we do fewer rules then that also cause harmful things.

✓ If we have too few rules, that can also cause harmful effects.

'Do fewer rules' is incorrect; use 'have too few rules'. 'Cause harmful things' awkward; use 'cause harmful effects' or 'cause problems'. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'that can also cause'.

× Yeah, I have a strict teacher who is called me all the time and nowadays when I think about her, I think that was the right thing she do.

✓ Yes, I had a strict teacher who used to call me frequently, and nowadays when I think about her, I think what she did was right.

'Is called me' mixes present with past; use 'used to call' or 'called'. 'That was the right thing she do' is ungrammatical; change to 'what she did was right' and use past tense 'did'.

× Because of that, I always caution, I always be cautious about my work or study.

✓ Because of that, I am always careful about my work and studies.

'I always caution' is incorrect verb usage; use adjective 'careful' with 'am'. 'Be cautious' must be 'am cautious' for present state. 'Work or study' better as 'work and studies'.

× So it's a posi. It gives me a positive in positive impact.

✓ So it had a positive impact on me.

Original is fragmented and contains repetition ('positive in positive'). Combine into a single correct sentence 'had a positive impact on me' and match past tense if referring to earlier teacher.

× Uh, I don't think so. I would work in a teacher of a rule free school, but if I have to, then nothing had to do.

✓ No, I don't think so. I would not want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school, but if I had to, I would manage.

Original misuses conditional/modal forms and noun forms ('work in a teacher'). Use 'work as a teacher' and proper conditional 'if I had to, I would'. 'Nothing had to do' is ungrammatical; 'I would manage' is natural.

× But uh, I like to maintain the rules and regulation.

✓ But I like to maintain the rules and regulations.

Add plural 'regulations'. Also 'maintain the rules' is acceptable; ensure plural agreement 'rules and regulations'.

× People are more, are more curious or more cautious about the rules and regulation, so that's better.

✓ People are more cautious about rules and regulations, which is better.

'Curious or more cautious' is contradictory and repetitive. Choose 'more cautious'. Make 'regulations' plural and simplify structure. 'Which is better' expresses the speaker's evaluation.