Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether there are rules, then give one or two specific examples and a brief reason. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, our university has several rules. For example, smoking and drinking are banned on campus, and students must attend a minimum number of lectures. These rules are intended to keep the campus safe and healthy.

提案: Clarify your position (yes or no) and give clear reasons. Use linking words (however, because, therefore) and correct word choice (limit, harm). Avoid contradicting yourself in the first sentence.

例: No, I don't think more rules would help. While some rules protect students, too many restrictions can limit personal responsibility and creativity because students may rely on rules instead of learning to make safe choices.

提案: Give a direct answer and describe specific behaviours that showed dedication (extra office hours, clear explanations, helpful feedback). Use simple, correct grammar and avoid unclear phrases like 'feared the best emotional humanity.'

例: Yes. Last semester my consumer behavior professor was very dedicated. She held extra review sessions, answered emails quickly, and gave detailed feedback on assignments, which helped me understand difficult topics.

提案: State your preference clearly (fewer or looser rules) and give two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct collocations (looser rules, be beneficial for).

例: I prefer fewer, looser rules at university because students need freedom to learn independently, and reasonable regulations should only exist to prevent dangerous behaviour, such as lab safety rules.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief example of what a strict teacher does (high standards, harsh grading) or how you heard about them. Use correct tense and word order.

例: No, I haven't had a very strict teacher. However, I have heard about one who gives very detailed grading and expects homework to be perfect, which makes students work much harder.

提案: Make a clear, relevant response. State yes or no and explain simply why, using concrete reasons. Avoid unrelated or confusing references and strange metaphors.

例: No, I would not. A rule-free school would be chaotic and make it hard to keep students safe and focused. I would prefer to work in a school with clear but fair rules that support learning.

× Yes, there is some limitation for our university.

✓ Yes, there are some limitations at our university.

The original uses 'there is' with a plural noun 'limitation' and the quantifier 'some', causing number mismatch. Use 'there are' for plural and pluralize 'limitation' to 'limitations'. Also change preposition 'for' to 'at' which is more natural for institutions. Suggestion: Use 'there is' for singular and 'there are' for plural; choose appropriate preposition (at/about/for) by context.

× I think it's such a kind of banning of drop or smoke in institution.

✓ I think it's a kind of ban on dropping litter or smoking in the institution.

Several issues: 'such a kind of' is wordy and awkward; 'banning of' should be 'ban on'; verbs 'drop' and 'smoke' should be nouns or gerunds in this structure, so use 'dropping litter' and 'smoking'; 'in institution' needs an article 'the' or 'the institution' and 'at the institution' can also work. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'a kind of' or simply 'a ban on' and convert verbs to gerunds when used as nouns.

× Yes, I guess you don't get benefit from more rules because the rules not only limits their action, but also others action harming to themselves.

✓ Yes, I guess students don't benefit from more rules because the rules not only limit their actions but also harm others or harm themselves.

Multiple errors: 'you don't get benefit' is unnatural; 'students don't benefit' fits the question. 'the rules not only limits' is subject-verb disagreement: 'rules' is plural so verb should be 'limit'. 'their action' should be plural 'their actions'. Phrase 'others action harming to themselves' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'harm others or harm themselves'. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number and use parallel structure after 'not only... but also'.

× Yes, last semester I heard I studied UH consumer behavior lecture and the teacher or professor was really dedicated to our class so I feared the best emotional humanity.

✓ Yes, last semester I attended a UH consumer behavior lecture and the professor was really dedicated to our class, so I felt very inspired.

Errors include wrong verb 'heard I studied' (use 'attended' or 'took'); 'UH consumer behavior lecture' needs an article 'a' and 'the professor' is preferable; 'feared the best emotional humanity' is nonsensical and likely intended to mean 'felt inspired' or 'was very moved'. Use simple past 'attended' and 'was' consistently. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for academic activities (attended, took, studied) and choose appropriate adjectives for emotions (inspired, moved).

× I prefer to have more loose at my university because not only the limitation but the beneficial for limiting harmful or dangerous action in university.

✓ I prefer fewer rules at my university because, besides some necessary limits, they are beneficial for limiting harmful or dangerous actions on campus.

'More loose' is incorrect; 'fewer' is used with countable nouns like 'rules'. 'not only the limitation but the beneficial' is ungrammatical—use 'besides some necessary limits' or 'although limits can be beneficial'. Also 'action' should be plural 'actions' and 'in university' is better as 'on campus' or 'at the university'. Suggestion: Use 'fewer' for countable items, 'less' for uncountable; keep noun number consistent.

× No, I don't have meet stricter professor teacher in my last semester, but I have heard about the strict teacher that have very crucial credit or criticize for students.

✓ No, I did not meet a very strict professor last semester, but I have heard about strict teachers who are very critical of students.

'I don't have meet' is incorrect—use simple past 'I did not meet'. 'stricter professor teacher' is redundant and awkward; use 'a very strict professor'. 'in my last semester' -> 'last semester'. 'that have very crucial credit or criticize for students' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'who are very critical of students'. Use 'who are' for people and 'critical of' for criticizing. Suggestion: Use past simple for events in past time, avoid redundant nouns, and use 'critical of' to describe a strict teacher's attitude.

× It's such a fascinating and interesting words to hearing for Illuminati if IA teacher if such a difficult and dangerous work to work on a ruthless group.

✓ It's an interesting idea to teach in a rule-free school, but it would be a difficult and risky job to work with a completely unregulated group.

The original sentence is incoherent: plural 'words' conflicts with singular 'it is'; 'to hearing' should be 'to hear' or 'to teach'; 'Illuminati if IA teacher' is unclear and likely irrelevant. Restructure to convey the intended meaning about working as a teacher in a rule-free school being interesting but difficult and risky. Use 'would be' for hypothetical situations. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and logical; for hypotheticals use conditional/modal ('would be', 'could be') and choose vocabulary that matches the context.