Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more fluent, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with a linking word. Avoid fillers (uh, umm) and grammar errors (subject-verb agreement).

例: Yes. There are several rules at my school that students must follow. For example, they are required to wear a school uniform every day, which helps create a sense of unity and discipline.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (use 'make students more disciplined').

例: No, I don't think adding more rules would help. While some rules are useful because they make students more disciplined, too many restrictions can limit freedom and creativity.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence, give specific details (subject she taught, what she did), and use correct tense and phrasing. Remove filler words and finish the sentence logically.

例: Yes. When I was in fifth grade I had a very dedicated English teacher who explained every part of the lesson clearly and used lots of examples, which made the topics easy to understand.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give a specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (use 'fewer rules' and avoid repetition).

例: I prefer fewer rules because some are too strict and difficult for younger students to follow, which can make school life stressful rather than helpful.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, specify when and what subject, and give one concrete example of her strictness. Remove informal phrases like 'I wanna' and filler words.

例: Yes, in seventh grade I had a very strict math teacher who expected complete silence during class and punished any mistakes harshly, which made lessons quite tense.

提案: Clarify the idea: do you mean a rule-free school? Explain why with specific examples of your classroom approach. Fix vocabulary ('rule-free' not 'roof for') and grammar ('avoid distractions').

例: Yes, I would consider teaching in a rule-free school because I believe I can manage my class through mutual respect and engaging lessons, for example by using interactive activities that keep students focused without strict rules.

× In our school, uh, there are many kind of rules which is umm, necessary to follow for children.

✓ In our school, there are many kinds of rules which are necessary to follow for children.

The noun 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when modified by 'many'. Also 'rules' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Suggestion: Use 'many kinds of rules' and match plural noun with plural verb 'are'.

× And one of them are, uh, they have to wear, for example, school, umm, clothes, uh, and they have to have them.

✓ And one of them is that they have to wear, for example, school clothes, and they must have them.

'One of them' is singular so the verb should be 'is' (subject-verb agreement). The clause needs 'that' to introduce the rule. 'Have to' is fine but using 'must' is more natural; also remove extra commas and filler words. Suggestion: Use 'one of them is that...' and keep verb agreement consistent.

× I don't think so that it's a benefit to give them a more, more and more rules.

✓ I don't think it is beneficial to give them more and more rules.

The original uses awkward word order 'I don't think so that' and mixes 'benefit' noun with incorrect structure. Replace with adjective 'beneficial' and simplify 'more and more rules'. Suggestion: Say 'I don't think it is beneficial to give them more and more rules.'

× Uh, but umm, rules are things which makes umm, students firm become become more disciplined people.

✓ But rules are things that make students become more disciplined people.

'Rules' is plural so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Remove duplicated words and fillers. Use 'that' or 'which' appropriately; 'make students become more disciplined' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep subject and verb number consistent and avoid repetition.

× Uh, yes, I have had, uh, when I was maybe 5th or 6th grade, I had one teacher and uh, she was explained almost every part of this uh, lesson very clearly and understandable.

✓ Yes, when I was in 5th or 6th grade, I had one teacher who explained almost every part of the lesson very clearly and understandably.

Use simple past 'explained' to describe a past action; 'she explained' not 'she was explained'. Also include 'in' before grade level and change 'understandable' to adverb 'understandably' to modify 'explained'. Suggestion: Use active voice 'teacher who explained' and correct adverb form.

× I prefer to have less rules than there is uh, because some kind of rules are very strict, strict and it's hard to follow for, it's hard to follow uh for younger students.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules than there are, because some kinds of rules are very strict and are hard for younger students to follow.

Use 'fewer' with countable nouns (rules) not 'less'. 'There are' matches plural 'rules'. 'Some kinds of rules' plural. Also improve word order: 'hard for younger students to follow'. Suggestion: Use 'fewer' for countable items and proper subject-verb agreement.

× I wanna was about 7th grade umm as she was my mathematic math teacher and I mean she was extremely strict for everyone.

✓ I was in about 7th grade when she was my math teacher, and she was extremely strict with everyone.

Replace informal 'wanna' with 'was in'; use 'in 7th grade'. 'Math' is correct noun form; 'strict with everyone' is natural. Maintain simple past tense 'was'. Suggestion: Use standard forms and correct preposition 'in' and 'with'.

× Yes, I would like to be a teacher in a roof for school uh, because I think that I have ability to control students clearly and not umm, being dis distracted.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a teacher in a school without strict rules, because I think that I have the ability to control students clearly and not be distracted.

'In a roof for school' is incorrect; likely intended 'in a school without strict rules' or 'in a rule-free school'. Add 'the' before 'ability'. Use infinitive 'to be distracted' or 'not be distracted' rather than 'being dis distracted'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions, include articles where needed, and use proper infinitive forms.