Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct grammar, and organize answer with a clear topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words to make it coherent and be specific about rules (what, when, who). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes. My school has many uniform rules: female students must wear skirts while male students wear shorts, and on sports day everyone must wear the exact team color. Also, jewelry and makeup are restricted to keep a uniform appearance.

提案: Start with a direct opinion, then give two clear reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and be specific about how rules affect students (motivation, creativity, responsibility). Avoid vague phrases.

例: No, I don't think more rules would help. Firstly, too many rules can limit students' creativity and make them less motivated. Secondly, reasonable guidance and trust often encourage responsibility better than stricter regulations.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and correct pronouns. Provide 1–2 specific examples of what made them dedicated (methods, projects, extra help). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid confusion.

例: Yes. My middle school computer teacher was very dedicated; he created hands-on projects and stayed after class to help students. Because of him, I learned programming basics and worked on a short film project with classmates.

提案: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then give two precise reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary (strict, specific) and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer fewer rules but strict rules for important issues. Fewer rules promote independence, while strict policies about safety and bullying protect students.

提案: Answer directly, then describe specific strict behaviors with examples and a brief comment on effects. Use linking words to keep it coherent and correct grammar.

例: Yes, I once had a strict student-council adviser who enforced uniform, shoe, and hairstyle rules. Because of her rules, students always looked neat but some felt it limited personal expression.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then give 2–3 concise reasons with linking words (personal preferences, teaching style). Fix grammar and avoid unclear phrases. Be specific about what kind of environment you prefer.

例: No, I wouldn't. I prefer a structured environment because I like clear routines and quiet workspaces, and I'm not comfortable with constant public speaking or managing chaotic classrooms.

× Yes, there are countless rules in my school.

✓ Yes, there are countless rules at my school.

Use of article with location: 'in my school' is acceptable but 'at my school' is more natural when referring to rules that apply within the school community. Change improves naturalness.

× For example, to uniform need to be like for women and for men they're separate.

✓ For example, the uniform requirements are different for women and for men.

Original sentence has incorrect singular/plural and article use. 'Uniform' should be plural or treated as 'the uniform requirements' and require plural verb 'are'. Also 'to uniform need to be like' is ungrammatical. Use clear noun phrase and agreement.

× Women have to wear a skirt, why man have to wear shorts or their school sport day.

✓ Women have to wear a skirt, while men have to wear shorts for their school sports day.

Subject-verb agreement: 'man have' should be 'men have'. Also conjunction 'why' is incorrect; 'while' or 'whereas' fits. 'sport day' should be 'sports day'.

× So you have to wear exactly the color that you're in the team.

✓ So you have to wear exactly the color of the team you are in.

Preposition and word order: use 'the color of the team you are in' rather than 'the color that you're in the team'. This corrects preposition placement and makes word order natural.

× No, as a high school student in Thailand, which have many roles in my country or my school is not that beneficial to us.

✓ No. As a high school student in Thailand, I think many rules in my country or at my school are not that beneficial to us.

Tense and clause problems: 'which have' is incorrect relative clause; replace with explicit subject 'I think' and correct subject-verb agreement 'rules ... are'. Also 'roles' should be 'rules'.

× It can be strengthened for our strength to do something.

✓ They can be intended to strengthen our ability to do things.

Awkward and unclear structure: 'It can be strengthened for our strength to do something' is unclear. Rephrase to 'They can be intended to strengthen our ability to do things' to convey meaning.

× Why we are can do things a lot better than the rules.

✓ We can do things much better than the rules allow.

Incorrect word order and auxiliary use: 'Why we are can' is wrong. Use 'We can do things much better than the rules allow' to correctly express contrast.

× Yes, I have is my middle school teacher.

✓ Yes, I have. It was my middle school teacher.

Tense and structure: 'I have is' is ungrammatical. Use 'I have' alone or 'It was my middle school teacher' to answer the question about having a dedicated teacher.

× He's very kind, very creative, very dedicated to teach me a lot of new skills.

✓ He was very kind, very creative, and very dedicated to teaching me a lot of new skills.

Verb form: 'dedicated to teach' should be 'dedicated to teaching' (gerund after 'dedicated to'). Also tense consistency: if referring to past teacher, use past tense 'was'.

× Why his role as a computer teachers, but he can do a lot of things.

✓ His role was as a computer teacher, but he could do a lot of things.

Preposition and number: use 'role was as a computer teacher' and singular 'teacher'. Also make tense consistent: 'could' fits past context.

× She's she's a school scared which we have to perform some things for the movies or maybe.

✓ He was also in charge of the school's drama club, where we had to perform scenes for plays or school events.

Pronoun confusion and word choice: 'She's she's' is wrong pronoun and repetition; 'school scared' is likely 'school's drama' or 'scared' is incorrect. Rephrase to clear noun 'drama club' and correct pronouns and tense.

× I prefer fewer rules but keep it as a stricken rules for the specific things because many many school have more and more rules in the school and this doesn't help to prevent student from doing something bad.

✓ I prefer fewer rules but strict rules for specific things because many schools have more and more rules and this doesn't help prevent students from doing bad things.

Article, plural, and word choice: 'a stricken rules' is incorrect — use 'strict rules' (no article) and 'schools' plural. Also 'prevent student' should be 'prevent students'. Simplify phrasing for clarity.

× Yes, I have days one teacher that controls in like student council and she's very strict for the uniform, the shoes or maybe the hair need to be like in in the hairstyle.

✓ Yes, I had one teacher who was in charge of the student council and was very strict about the uniform, the shoes, and even hairstyles.

Poor structure and tense: 'have days one teacher that controls in like student council' is ungrammatical. Use 'had one teacher who was in charge of the student council' and 'strict about' for correct preposition.

× Maybe you cannot put the hair down if you have a long hair, something like that.

✓ For example, you could not let your hair down if you had long hair, something like that.

Preposition and article use: 'put the hair down' is understandable but 'let your hair down' is idiomatic. Use 'long hair' without article and past tense for consistency.

× I will say no because through I love Ruthie school but have to work as a teacher in the school.

✓ I would say no because, though I love quiet schools, I would not want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.

Modal and conditional: 'I will say no' is awkward; 'I would say no' fits hypothetical. 'Through' should be 'though' and 'Ruthie' likely 'quiet' or intended adjective—clarified to 'quiet schools'. Ensure conditional mood.

× I wouldn't say I love that because I love in I love being work in my space, not to talk a lot to other people and keep it neat and kind and throughout, I'm not as public speaker and kind of.

✓ I wouldn't say I like that because I prefer working in my own space; I don't like talking a lot to people, and I like to keep things neat. I'm not much of a public speaker.

Run-on and unclear phrasing: Original contains repetition and fragments. Break into clear sentences, correct verb forms ('like' not 'love in'), use 'prefer working' and 'I'm not much of a public speaker' for natural expression.