Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific rules with brief consequences. Avoid repetition and self-interruption. Use linking words (for example, also) and correct verb forms.

例: Yes. We have several clear rules. For example, students must hand in their mobile phones at the start of the day, and punctuality is enforced — if you are late, you must report to the office. Also, there are dress-code guidelines that everyone must follow.

提案: Give a direct opinion followed by two specific reasons, using linking words (because, moreover) and avoid filler words. End with a short conclusion sentence.

例: No, I don't. Because we already have many rules that some students ignore, adding more would be ineffective. Moreover, extra rules could reduce students' independence and motivation. Therefore, I think improving enforcement is better than increasing rules.

提案: Begin with a topic sentence confirming the experience, then give concrete examples of the teacher's dedication and explain the impact on you. Use past tense consistently and avoid trailing off.

例: Yes. My middle school English teacher, Mr Salim, was very dedicated. He often gave me extra assignments because he noticed my interest in English, and he spent extra time explaining difficult topics. As a result, my speaking and confidence improved significantly.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give two specific reasons with linking words (because, so) and finish with a brief concluding sentence. Avoid metaphors that may sound extreme and finish your thoughts.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because strict regulations make me feel restricted and reduce my motivation. For instance, constant supervision limits chances for creativity, and strict penalties for small mistakes cause stress. So overall, fewer reasonable rules would improve the learning atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly, then describe specific strict rules and one consequence, using correct grammar and linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I had a very strict German teacher. For example, she insisted that hair be tied in a ponytail, and if a student was late she reported them to the school manager. Her strictness made the class very disciplined but also a little stressful.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, avoid exaggerated language and slang (e.g., 'monsters'), and provide two calm, specific reasons with linking words (because, therefore). End with a concluding sentence.

例: No, I would not. Teaching without any rules would be very difficult because students might lack respect and classroom order, which would hinder learning. Therefore, I would prefer a school with fair rules and consistent boundaries.

× we put them into a box and also it's forbidden to be late to school if you get if you late for school, you have to go to. To.

✓ we put them into a box and also it's forbidden to be late for school; if you are late for school, you have to go to the office.

Incorrect verb form and sentence structure: 'if you get if you late' is ungrammatical. Use the present simple 'are late' to describe a general rule/condition. Also complete the clause by specifying 'the office'. Improve by removing repetition and joining clauses with a semicolon or conjunction.

× No, I think umm, even now we have so many rules and it doesn't work for some students.

✓ No, I think even now we have so many rules and they don't work for some students.

Pronoun reference and tense agreement: 'it doesn't work' refers to 'rules' (plural), so use 'they don't work'. Maintain present tense for general statements.

× And if we get more rules, it can be have like a negative aspect, negative effect to us and.

✓ And if we have more rules, it can have a negative effect on us.

Incorrect verb combination 'can be have' is ungrammatical. Use 'can have' to express possibility. Also use the preposition 'on' with 'effect' and remove redundant words.

× he used to give me more homework because he saw the spark inside of me and, umm, he really think.

✓ he used to give me more homework because he saw the spark inside me and he really believed in me.

Tense and verb choice error: 'he really think' is present tense/incomplete. Use past tense 'believed' to match 'used to' and 'saw'. Also 'inside of me' is acceptable but 'inside me' is more natural.

× I prefer having less rules at school because I feel like I'm prisoner when I want, when I'm at school and I think it is a negative effect.

✓ I prefer having fewer rules at school because I feel like I'm a prisoner when I'm at school and I think it has a negative effect.

Use 'fewer' for countable nouns ('rules') not 'less'. Add the article 'a' before 'prisoner'. Use 'has' for 'it has a negative effect' to be grammatical.

× It's I don't like to be restricted by my teachers and when I'm at school I want to be free and do.

✓ I don't like being restricted by my teachers, and when I'm at school I want to be free to do what I want.

Fragment and awkward structure: 'It's I don't like' is incorrect. Use gerund 'being restricted' or 'to be restricted'. Complete the idea after 'do' by adding 'what I want'.

× Yeah, my German teachers, Hoja was so strict, Strict.

✓ Yeah, my German teacher Hoja was very strict.

Plural 'teachers' conflicts with singular name; use singular 'teacher'. Remove repeated adjective 'Strict' and use 'very' for emphasis.

× And you your hair needs to be a ponytail when you're studying with her.

✓ And your hair needs to be in a ponytail when you're studying with her.

Missing preposition 'in' to form the expression 'in a ponytail'. Also remove stray 'you' at start.

× And if you're late, you're her class. She is going to talk with the school manager.

✓ And if you're late for her class, she will talk to the school manager.

Incorrect phrase 'you're her class' should be 'you're late for her class'. Use future 'will talk' or present simple depending on habitual rule; 'will talk' expresses consequence. Use 'talk to' not 'talk with' for reporting to manager (both possible but 'talk to' is common here).

× Of course no, because even now it's so hard to be a teacher and umm, teenagers are like monsters and if there are no rules it means there are no umm, respects and I really wouldn't enjoy being a teacher in a school like this.

✓ Of course not, because even now it's so hard to be a teacher and teenagers can be like monsters, and if there are no rules it means there is no respect, so I really wouldn't enjoy being a teacher in a school like that.

Use 'of course not' (not 'no') to negate. 'Teenagers are like monsters' is acceptable but 'can be' is softer. 'Respects' is uncountable here; use 'respect' singular. Use consistent conditional/modal 'wouldn't enjoy' is fine. Replace 'this' with 'that' to refer to a hypothetical school.