Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, there were several basic rules.”), correct grammar (I’m not a student anymore → I’m not a student anymore), and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific examples and finish the sentence (e.g., arrive on time). Use linking words like “for example” to introduce details.

例: Yes, there were several basic rules at my school. For example, students had to arrive on time and wear a uniform. In addition, we were expected to be respectful to teachers, which helped keep the school orderly.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar and clear reasoning. Begin with a clear view (e.g., “I don’t think more rules would help much.”), then give 2–3 concise reasons with linking words (because, however, therefore). Use specific examples of rules and their effects instead of vague statements.

例: I don’t think more rules would help much because too many rules can make students feel controlled and stressed. However, a reasonable number of rules, such as punctuality and respect, can help maintain discipline and a good learning environment.

提案: Clarify the question briefly if needed, then give a direct answer. Use correct grammar (doesn't → don’t; teach → teaches) and precise vocabulary (dedicated means hardworking and committed). Provide specific examples of what made the teacher dedicated (extra help, enthusiasm, explanations). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I wasn’t sure at first what “dedicated” meant, but yes — I had a very dedicated biology teacher. She stayed after class to answer questions and used hands-on experiments, which made the subject much more interesting for me.

提案: State your preference clearly and give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (fewer rule → fewer rules; being to do → being able to do). Avoid vague claims about feeling “powerful” and instead explain effects on learning or behavior.

例: I would prefer fewer rules at school because students feel more trusted and motivated. However, I think essential rules about attendance and respect should remain to ensure a safe and productive environment.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar (I never really have → I’ve never had; they don't this week → unclear). If contrasting teachers, be specific about behaviors that make a teacher strict (punishments, strict deadlines). Keep to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: I’ve never had a very strict teacher; most of mine were fairly balanced. They set clear expectations and deadlines but were also supportive, so classroom discipline was maintained without being harsh.

提案: Be concise and precise. Correct vocabulary (rural preschool → a rule-free school; discipline creature → undisciplined). Give a clear reason and one example of a rule you would keep. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “come with surprise.”

例: No, I wouldn’t want to teach in a rule-free school because young students need structure to learn. For example, simple rules about listening and taking turns help children develop good habits while still allowing play and creativity.

× I'm not student anymore so I only can tell you from my experience when I was still a student.

✓ I'm not a student anymore, so I can only tell you from my experience when I was a student.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'student' and word order: 'can only' is more natural than 'only can'. Use past simple 'was a student' or 'when I was still a student'—removed 'still' duplication. Improve by placing 'a' before singular countable nouns and using natural auxiliary placement: 'I can only'.

× At my school there are not many numerous role.

✓ At my school there are not many rules.

Plural noun 'rules' required; original used singular 'role' incorrectly and 'numerous' redundant with 'many'. Subject-verb structure 'there are' is correct for plural. Use 'many rules' or 'numerous rules', not both. Keep noun plural to agree with 'are'.

× Uh, the rule are pretty basic and simple.

✓ Uh, the rules are pretty basic and simple.

Subject 'rules' is plural so verb should be 'are' (already 'are' present) but original had singular 'rule' with plural verb; change noun to plural 'rules'. Also 'basic and simple' is redundant—consider one adjective. Ensure noun and verb agree in number.

× For example, you need to arrive at school on.

✓ For example, you need to arrive at school on time.

Sentence is incomplete: preposition 'on' requires a complement. The correct phrase is 'on time' to indicate punctuality. Complete the phrasal prepositional phrase to convey full meaning.

× In my opinion student would not gain any benefit from a rule.

✓ In my opinion, students would not gain any benefit from rules.

Pluralize 'student' to 'students' to refer generally and use plural 'rules' to match generality. Also use plural verb agreement 'would' with plural subject—'students would'. Use commas after introductory phrase for clarity.

× I think more rule make people think that they are in the present while too a few would make them think they are in free country.

✓ I think more rules make people feel constrained, while too few would make them feel they are in a free country.

Use plural 'rules' and plural verb agreement 'make'. 'Make people think that they are in the present' is unclear—changed to 'feel constrained' to reflect intended meaning. Use 'too few' (not 'too a few') and 'a free country' needs indefinite article. Ensure plural consistency and appropriate articles.

× So I think the world need to be enough to keep student disciplined.

✓ So I think the world needs to be regulated enough to keep students disciplined.

Subject-verb agreement: 'world' singular takes 'needs'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' when speaking generally. 'Need to be enough' is awkward; replace with 'needs to be regulated enough' or 'rules need to be sufficient' to convey intended meaning. Ensure verbs agree and quantifiers are used correctly.

× I actually doesn't understand what dedicated teacher mean.

✓ I actually don't understand what a dedicated teacher means.

'I' with present tense requires 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Add article 'a' before 'dedicated teacher' and verb 'means' agrees with singular noun 'teacher'. Use subject-verb agreement and include article for singular countable noun.

× Is the teacher that teach you privately?

✓ Is the teacher the one who teaches you privately?

Relative clause needs 'who' for people and verb must be 'teaches' to agree with singular 'teacher'. Use 'the one who' for clarification. Ensure correct relative pronoun and verb agreement.

× Because is that what you mean?

✓ Is that what you mean?

Unnecessary 'Because' at sentence start makes structure incorrect. Simply ask 'Is that what you mean?' for clarification. Avoid starting with 'Because' unless giving a reason.

× Then no, I don't have educated teacher, but I have teacher that I really like.

✓ Then no, I don't have an educated teacher, but I have a teacher that I really like.

Singular countable nouns require an article: 'an educated teacher' and 'a teacher'. Add articles to make nouns grammatically correct and natural.

× Uh, she teach biology in my class and I really like biology.

✓ Uh, she teaches biology in my class, and I really like biology.

Third-person singular 'she' requires verb form 'teaches'. Add comma for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement for third-person singular.

× See, now I was at the time a student.

✓ Well, when I was a student,

Original is awkward and redundant. Use 'when I was a student' as a clear temporal clause. If completing the sentence, follow with main clause; as is, restructure to fit context. Maintain correct tense and clear phrasing.

× Of course I would prefer fewer rule at my school because people like freedom and being to do whatever you want and make you feel powerful and like you don't abide by any.

✓ Of course I would prefer fewer rules at my school because people like freedom and being able to do whatever they want, which makes them feel powerful and as if they don't have to abide by any rules.

Use plural 'rules' with 'fewer'. 'Being to do' is incorrect; use 'being able to do'. Maintain consistent pronouns: change 'you' to 'they' when speaking generally. Finish idea 'abide by any rules' for clarity. Ensure pluralization and appropriate verb phrases.

× No, I never really have a strict teacher.

✓ No, I never really had a strict teacher.

Past reference 'had' is appropriate when speaking about school experience. 'Never really have' mixes present with past context. Use past simple 'had' to match timeframe.

× I think my teacher is kind of regular kind of teacher.

✓ I think my teacher is a kind of regular teacher.

Reduce redundancy: 'kind of' repeated is unnecessary. Use article 'a' before 'kind'. Alternatively: 'my teachers were fairly ordinary.' Ensure article usage and avoid repetition.

× They don't, uh, they don't this week and uh, they are not too strict and they are not less strict either, but I have a really strict boss.

✓ They weren't, uh, too strict, and they were not very strict either, but I have a really strict boss.

Confusing tense and missing verb after 'they don't... this week'. Context refers to past schooling so use past tense 'weren't' or 'were not'. Remove duplicated fragment and correct comparative 'not very strict' rather than 'not less strict'. Clarify meaning and keep tense consistent.

× Of course not. I would not like to work as a teacher in rural preschool because I was a student and I know student, uh, uh, not really discipline creature.

✓ Of course not. I would not like to work as a teacher in a rural preschool because when I was a student I knew students were not really disciplined.

Add articles 'a rural preschool'. Use past reference 'when I was a student'. Pluralize 'students' and use adjective 'disciplined' instead of noun 'discipline creature'. Ensure appropriate article usage and correct adjective form.

× That's why the rural axis to make them discipline, to make them that their freedom will come with surprise.

✓ That's why rules are needed to discipline them, so that their freedom comes with responsibilities.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear ('rural axis' unclear). Replace with clear structure: 'rules are needed to discipline them' and 'so that their freedom comes with responsibilities' conveys intended meaning. Use passive/active appropriately and correct noun forms. Ensure clarity and logical connectors.