Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần tập trung vào ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ/động từ), phát âm rõ ràng và dùng từ vựng chính xác. Trả lời nên trực tiếp với câu chủ đề: nêu các quy định cụ thể (mặc đồng phục, mang giày, cấm dép xỏ ngón). Tránh dùng từ sai (roof → rule; student back → school bag) và loại bỏ tiếng ồn (uh, MMM). Giữ độ dài 1–3 câu rõ ràng.

例: Yes. In my secondary school there were several rules: we had to wear a school uniform, bring a school bag, and wear shoes instead of sandals.

提案: Cần tổ chức câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes/No and reason). Sửa ngữ pháp (it can bring many risks/problems) và dùng từ chính xác. Nên cung cấp một hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: less freedom, less creativity) và một liên từ để liên kết ý.

例: No, I don't. I think more rules could cause problems for students, such as reduced creativity and less freedom to make decisions.

提案: Trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn: mô tả hành vi tận tâm của giáo viên với câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Sửa cấu trúc (she always reviewed old lessons and checked our understanding). Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (review, encourage, patient) và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I have. In high school I had a very dedicated teacher who always reviewed previous lessons and made sure we understood them by asking questions and explaining difficult points.

提案: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer fewer rules) và giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể. Sửa từ sai (roof → rules) và ngữ pháp (because it can provide many benefits). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể và dùng liên từ (for example, because, so) để mạch lạc.

例: I prefer fewer rules because they give students more freedom. For example, students could choose their clothes and personal items, which can increase comfort and self-expression.

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng hành vi nghiêm khắc: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, rồi mô tả hành vi cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp (she used to punish us, make us copy notes many times) và loại bỏ tiếng ồn. Cung cấp một ví dụ rõ ràng về hậu quả của tính nghiêm khắc.

例: Yes. I had a strict teacher in high school who often made students copy the lesson many times if they couldn't remember it, which was quite stressful.

提案: Trả lời cần rõ lập trường (Yes/No) và giải thích lý do ngắn gọn. Sửa cấu trúc để nêu quan điểm về trách nhiệm (teachers and parents should set some rules to protect students and ensure learning). Tránh từ lặp và tiếng ồn, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

例: No, I wouldn't. I think schools still need some rules; teachers and parents should set clear guidelines to protect students and maintain a good learning environment.

× When I was a secondary school there was many roof.

✓ When I was in secondary school there were many roofs.

'Secondary school' requires the preposition in; 'there' + plural noun needs plural verb 'were'; 'roof' should be plural 'roofs' to match 'many'. Suggestion: use 'in secondary school' and match subject-verb number (there were many roofs).

× They require me to use the student back and uh, bring shoes, not MMM sandal.

✓ They required me to use the student bag and bring shoes, not sandals.

The context is past, so use past tense 'required' (past participle used in passive contexts). 'Student back' is likely 'student bag'; 'sandal' should be plural 'sandals' to match 'shoes'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and past tense for past events.

× No I don't because I think it is can bring many Russia for student is.

✓ No, I don't because I think it can bring many problems for students.

Remove unnecessary 'is' and use modal 'can' directly with verb 'bring'. 'Russia' is incorrect word; context likely 'problems'. Use plural 'students' to match general meaning. Suggestion: Place modal 'can' before main verb and use correct noun.

× When I was in high school I had a teacher say always. Ask about the old old learning and if we don't remember.

✓ When I was in high school I had a teacher who always asked about our previous lessons and what we didn't remember.

Need a relative pronoun 'who' and past tense 'asked'. 'Old old learning' is unclear; use 'previous lessons'. Use past tense 'didn't remember'. Suggestion: use relative clause and consistent past tense.

× I think it should be fewer roof ascore because can provide many benefits for student.

✓ I think there should be fewer rules at school because they can provide many benefits for students.

Use plural 'rules' not 'roof'; 'fewer' correctly with countable noun 'rules'. Add 'there should be' structure. Use plural 'students'. Suggestion: correct noun choice and ensure subject-verb structure 'there should be'.

× They can choose one what they want to wear and what they want to bring at school.

✓ They can choose what they want to wear and what they want to bring to school.

Remove extraneous 'one'. Use 'to school' as correct preposition. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary pronouns and use correct prepositions.

× Yes I have a teacher when I was in high school she always umm reveal a lesson and if uh they weigh the uh and if I don't don't remember I has to copy that at around 50.

✓ Yes, I had a teacher in high school who always reviewed lessons, and if we didn't remember, I had to copy them about fifty times.

Use past tense consistently: 'had', 'reviewed', 'didn't remember', 'had to'. 'Reveal a lesson' is incorrect; 'review lessons' fits. 'They weigh the uh' is unclear and removed. 'I has' should be 'I had to'. 'Copy that at around 50' clarified to 'copy them about fifty times'. Suggestion: use clear verbs and consistent past tense, and express repetition with 'about fifty times'.

× Anything, no anything it is should uh should be parents and control uh, to uh protect uh student or teacher uh for mainly test in the school.

✓ No, it should be decided by parents and school authorities to protect students and teachers, especially during exams at school.

Replace vague 'anything' with clear 'No'. Use 'should be decided by parents and school authorities' (passive with modal). Use plural 'students and teachers'. Clarify 'mainly test' to 'especially during exams'. Suggestion: structure sentence clearly, use passive where appropriate, and choose correct nouns.