Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has several problems: grammar errors, unclear word choice, and some repetition. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two specific details, correct grammar, and natural vocabulary. Use linking words for coherence (for example, "for example" or "also"). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. At my school we had to wear a uniform every day, and talking during lessons was not allowed. For example, students who chatted quietly were sent out of the classroom, which helped keep lessons focused and the school organized.

提案: Good idea and relevant points, but work on fluency and grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove hesitations). Make a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a brief explanation using linking words like "because" or "for instance." Avoid repetitions.

例: I think it depends on the rules. Reasonable rules—such as respecting teachers and remaining quiet during lessons—can be beneficial because they help students develop discipline and create a better learning environment.

提案: You give good, relevant details and personal feeling. Improve fluency by removing fillers (uh, you know) and correct tense consistency. Use one clear topic sentence and 2 supporting details with linking words like "for example" or "because."

例: Yes. One of my history teachers was very dedicated and hardworking. For example, she spent extra time after school helping students with essays and she genuinely cared about our progress, which made her classes enjoyable and motivating.

提案: You answered directly but have problems with grammar, repetition, and clarity. State a clear preference and then give concise reasons with linking words (e.g., "however" or "but"). Avoid vague phrases like "two straight rules." Use specific examples of rules and explain their effects briefly.

例: It depends on the rules. I prefer moderate rules—such as respecting teachers and staying quiet during lessons—because they improve learning. However, overly strict rules, like constant surveillance or excessive punishments, can make students stressed and less creative.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammar and word-choice errors and some repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example of strict behavior and its effect on you or the class. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "punctuality") and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher. For instance, she insisted on punctuality and would mark students absent if they were even a few minutes late, which made the class very disciplined but also a bit tense.

提案: Your idea is understandable but unclear and ungrammatical. Give a direct answer (yes/no/maybe), then give one or two clear reasons with examples. Avoid hedging phrases like "if I probably say" and use correct nouns ("rules" plural) and adjectives ("free").

例: I would probably say yes. In a rule-free school I would feel freer to express my ideas and encourage open discussion, which could help students be more creative and confident.

× Yeah, temptedly.

✓ Yeah, I'm tempted.

'Temptedly' is not a correct adverb here. The student likely intended to say they feel tempted or hesitant; use a verb phrase 'I'm tempted' or 'I feel tempted'. Use a contraction for spoken register. Suggestion: say 'I'm tempted' or 'I feel tempted.'

× I still remember at my school we have to wear a uniform every day and not allowed to talk in the class.

✓ I still remember that at my school we had to wear a uniform every day and were not allowed to talk in class.

The sentence mixes present tense with past recollection. Because the speaker is recalling past school rules, use past tense 'had to' and passive 'were not allowed'. Also add 'that' after 'remember' for clarity and remove 'the' before 'class' which is unnecessary in this context.

× I think this roads help school organized.

✓ I think these rules help schools stay organized.

Multiple errors: 'this roads' mixes singular and plural; use 'these rules'. 'School' should be plural 'schools' or 'the school' depending on meaning. 'Help school organized' is incorrect verb pattern — use 'help schools stay organized' or 'help the school stay organized.'

× Oh, it's a it's a hard question, but I think it's really depends on the types of rules.

✓ Oh, it's a hard question, but I think it really depends on the type of rule.

Remove repeated filler. 'It's really depends' is incorrect: drop 'is' and use 'it depends'. Use singular 'type' or change to 'the types of rules' and keep plural agreement; here 'type of rule' is clearer. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it depends.'

× If the rules are reasonable, such as respecting teachers and staying quiet during lessons, of course they can helps.

✓ If the rules are reasonable, such as respecting teachers and staying quiet during lessons, of course they can help.

'Can' is a modal verb and must be followed by the base form 'help', not 'helps'. Remove extra comma before 'of course'.

× They can help students develop self develop discipline.

✓ They can help students develop self-discipline.

Redundant phrase 'self develop discipline' is incorrect. Use the compound noun 'self-discipline'. Keep verb 'develop' only once: 'develop self-discipline.'

× Uh, yes I do.

✓ Uh, yes I have.

Question asked 'Have you ever had...' requires present perfect 'I have' as short answer, not 'I do.' Use 'Yes, I have.' in spoken form 'Uh, yes I have.'

× One of my history teachers is really dedicated and, uh, hardworking.

✓ One of my history teachers was really dedicated and hardworking.

If referring to a past teacher (context 'have you ever had'), use past tense 'was'. If still teaching, 'is' could be correct; but given the question's 'have you ever had', use past.

× She's very knowledgeable and, uh, really cares about her students.

✓ She was very knowledgeable and really cared about her students.

Maintain past tense to match 'have you ever had' context. Change 'cares' to 'cared'.

× So sometimes she treated us like, uh, her own child, you know, which makes her class very enjoyable.

✓ So sometimes she treated us like her own children, which made her classes very enjoyable.

Pronoun/number agreement: 'her own child' should be 'her own children' when referring to a class. Keep past tense 'treated' and 'made' to match narrative. Use plural 'classes' if referring generally.

× Like I said before, it really depends on the type of rules.

✓ Like I said before, it really depends on the type of rule.

'Type of rules' is less natural than 'type of rule' or change to 'types of rules' with plural. For clarity, use 'type of rule' when speaking about rule category. Ensure agreement between 'type' (singular) and following noun.

× If the rules like uh, respecting, respecting teachers are still quiet during the lessons, so I think it's better.

✓ If the rules, like respecting teachers and being quiet during lessons, are in place, then I think that's better.

Sentence fragments and repetition: remove duplicate 'respecting'. Use 'being quiet' for correct gerund phrase. Add 'in place' to clarify rules exist and use 'then' to connect clauses. Avoid starting a clause with 'so' after 'if'.

× But you know, two straight rules can make students feel stressful.

✓ But you know, too many strict rules can make students feel stressed.

'Two straight rules' is incorrect: likely meant 'too many strict rules'. 'Feel stressful' is wrong; people feel 'stressed'. Adjust adjectives and quantifier.

× Yes, of course I had I one of my mathematic teachers.

✓ Yes, of course I had one of my math teachers.

Extraneous 'I' causes ungrammatical sentence. Use 'I had one of my math teachers' or simply 'Yes, of course. I had one of my math teachers.' Also 'mathematic' should be 'math' or 'mathematics.'

× She's super strict and she enforced classroom rules and expected a punctual punctuality.

✓ She was super strict; she enforced classroom rules and expected punctuality.

Past tense 'was' fits 'have you ever had' question. Remove duplicated 'punctual'. 'Expected a punctual punctuality' is ungrammatical — use 'expected punctuality' or 'expected students to be punctual.'

× Uh, if I probably say yes because I think this rule makes me feel freely and I can express my thoughts, express myself better, yeah.

✓ Uh, I'd probably say yes because I think such a rule would make me feel free and allow me to express my thoughts better.

Several modal/tense issues: 'if I probably say yes' is incorrect — use 'I'd probably say yes'. 'This rule makes me feel freely' wrong word choice: 'feel free'. Use conditional 'would make' to indicate hypothetical. Use 'allow me to' instead of repeated 'express' for smoother English.