Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and accurate: give a clear topic sentence, then briefly list specific rules using correct grammar and concise wording. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers.

例: Yes. My school has several rules. For example, students must wear a uniform, arrive on time, and respect teachers and classmates. These rules help maintain discipline and a good learning environment.

提案: Be precise about the benefits and use correct vocabulary. State a clear opinion, then give two specific positive outcomes linked with linking words (because/so). Avoid contradictory or incorrect words (e.g. 'inefficiency').

例: Yes, to some extent. More well-designed rules could improve safety and punctuality because they set clear expectations. However, they should be simple and enforced fairly so they don't become restrictive.

提案: Give a concise, grammatically correct response: name one teacher, describe one or two specific actions that showed dedication, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes. My head teacher was very dedicated. For example, he stayed after school to tutor struggling students and regularly prepared extra materials, which showed he cared about our progress.

提案: Express preference clearly with proper grammar and give a reason and an example. Use linking words (because/so) and avoid vague phrases like 'quality rules' without explanation—explain what you mean by 'quality'.

例: I prefer fewer but clearer rules because simple, well-explained rules are easier to follow. For instance, a punctuality rule with clear consequences is better than many confusing regulations.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific example of strictness and its effect on students. Use past or present tense consistently and avoid awkward phrasing like 'he never shows us his nervous moments'.

例: Yes. My math teacher was very strict; he enforced homework deadlines and disciplined noisy students. Although he seemed stern, this helped the class stay focused and improved our results.

提案: State your opinion briefly and give 1–2 clear reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repeating 'because' and be concise about why you would not choose teaching.

例: No, I wouldn't. I don't plan to be a teacher because the salary is relatively low and the job can be stressful. Even in a rule-free school, the workload and responsibility would still be high.

× My school offers varied range of rules for students such as the main rules are be don't be late and wear a uniform.

✓ My school offers a varied range of rules for students; the main rules are: don't be late and wear a uniform.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'varied range' and has unclear structure. 'Varied range' should be 'a varied range'. Also the list of main rules needs punctuation and parallel structure. Use a colon to introduce the rules and ensure each rule is in the correct imperative form (don't be late; wear a uniform).

× There are they are the main rule.

✓ They are the main rules.

The original repeats subjects and uses incorrect word order. Use the pronoun 'they' followed by the verb 'are' and the plural noun 'rules' to match meaning. Remove the redundant 'There are'.

× I think students could benefit more from more rules because rules provides inefficiency, effectiveness, and other positive things.

✓ I think students could benefit from more rules because rules provide efficiency, effectiveness, and other positive things.

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide' not 'provides' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'benefit more from more rules' is redundant; 'benefit from more rules' is clearer. 'Inefficiency' contradicts 'positive things' so likely 'efficiency' was intended; replace 'inefficiency' with 'efficiency'.

× I have more that teachers and one of them is my head teacher in the school.

✓ I have had several teachers and one of them was my head teacher at the school.

'More that teachers' is ungrammatical. Use 'several teachers' or 'many teachers'. The tense should match the question about past experience: 'have had' or simply 'had' is better; 'head teacher in the school' is more naturally 'head teacher at the school'.

× He's really, really love his jobs and he dedicated himself for us.

✓ He really, really loves his job and he is dedicated to us.

'He's really, really love' mixes present continuous contraction with base verb; use third person singular 'loves'. 'Jobs' should be singular 'job' or 'his work'. 'Dedicated himself for us' is incorrect preposition and tense; use 'is dedicated to us' or 'dedicated himself to us' for clarity.

× Actually I prefer school should have a few but quality rules because more and not quality rules don't affect.

✓ Actually, I prefer that the school should have a few high-quality rules because many low-quality rules are ineffective.

'A few but quality rules' is ungrammatical; use 'a few high-quality rules'. 'More and not quality rules don't affect' is unclear; rephrase as 'many low-quality rules are ineffective'. Also add 'that' after 'prefer' for clarity and use articles appropriately.

× Yes, I have also more strict teachers and one of them is my math teacher.

✓ Yes, I also have several strict teachers, and one of them is my math teacher.

'I have also more strict teachers' is awkward; 'I also have several strict teachers' or 'I have more strict teachers' is better. Place 'also' before 'have' and use 'several' to indicate quantity. Use commas to separate clauses.

× He is very strict and sometimes he will be nervous but he never shows us his nervous moments.

✓ He is very strict and sometimes he gets nervous, but he never shows us when he is nervous.

Using 'will be nervous' to describe habitual behavior is incorrect; use present simple 'gets nervous'. 'Shows us his nervous moments' is awkward; rephrase as 'shows us when he is nervous'. This keeps tense consistent and uses natural English expressions.

× No, actually I never think that being a teacher because I don't like teacher job as a future job because teacher salaries are less and more stressful even though in Rule free school.

✓ No, actually I never thought of being a teacher because I don't like the teaching profession as a future job: salaries are low and it is very stressful, even in a rule-free school.

'I never think that being a teacher' is incorrect; use 'I never thought of being a teacher' for past consideration or 'I don't want to be a teacher' for current preference. 'Teacher job' should be 'the teaching profession' or 'a teaching job'. 'Salaries are less' should be 'salaries are low'. 'More stressful' lacks comparison; use 'very stressful'. Capitalization: 'Rule free school' should be 'rule-free school' with hyphen and lowercase. Modal use 'would' not needed; adjust wording for clarity.