Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific examples. Use correct tense and simpler sentence structures to avoid hesitation. Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: I am not studying at school right now, but when I attended primary school there were many rules. For example, students had to wear uniforms and keep their hair neatly tied. These rules were meant to promote discipline and a sense of equality among pupils.

提案: Answer directly and use linking words to structure contrasting ideas (e.g., 'on the one hand... on the other hand'). Be specific about which rules help and which hinder, and correct grammar and word choice (students, appearance, development).

例: On the one hand, some rules are beneficial; for example, wearing a uniform helps students focus on study rather than fashion. On the other hand, too many strict rules can limit creativity and personal development, so a balance is necessary.

提案: Be specific about the teacher's actions and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence and then give concrete examples of how the teacher supported you, using linking words like 'for example' or 'as a result'.

例: Yes. I had a very dedicated English teacher when I first started learning the language. For example, she organized creative activities and daily conversation practice, which helped me improve my speaking and confidence quickly.

提案: Answer clearly and avoid repetition. Use a topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two concise reasons with correct vocabulary (policies, backgrounds). Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas.

例: I prefer fewer rules, but they should be practical and enforced consistently. For example, a uniform policy is useful because it prevents students from worrying about fashion and reduces visible differences in backgrounds.

提案: Use correct tense and more precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain what made the teacher strict and whether that was positive or negative, using linking words like 'however' or 'because'. Avoid calling teachers 'rude' if you mean strict but caring.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in Year 11. She insisted we completed our homework before class and disciplined us firmly; however, her strictness motivated us to improve and achieve better results.

提案: Give a direct answer then support it with two clear, specific reasons. Use correct article usage and plural/singular agreement, and keep sentences concise. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: No, I would not want to work at a school with no rules because policies help maintain discipline and promote good hygiene. For example, rules about classroom behavior and cleanliness make it easier for teachers to teach and for students to learn.

× Well, I'm not going to school at the moment, but I remember when I what a choice are you to go to the primary school in my country where the there's a many, uh, rules and policies with all the student need to follow.

✓ Well, I'm not going to school at the moment, but I remember when I had a choice to go to primary school in my country, where there were many rules and policies that all the students needed to follow.

This sentence has multiple structure and agreement problems: incorrect verb forms ('what a choice are you' → 'had a choice'), incorrect use of 'there's' with plural noun (should be 'there were many'), singular/plural mismatch ('all the student' → 'all the students'), and missing relative pronoun and correct verb tense ('need' → 'needed'). Suggestion: simplify the clause order, use past tense consistently for past memories, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'that' or 'which' to introduce the relative clause.

× For instance, like uniform and hair tie had to be uh, neat.

✓ For instance, uniforms and hair ties had to be neat.

The nouns refer to general items and should be plural ('uniforms', 'hair ties') when speaking about students collectively. Also use plural to match 'had to be'. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally about rules applying to many people.

× Wow, I think she depends uh some rules are very beneficial for student.

✓ Well, I think it depends; some rules are very beneficial for students.

Original mixes pronouns and incorrect structure. Use impersonal 'it depends' to express uncertainty and plural 'students'. Place the clause markers correctly and avoid extraneous words. Suggestion: use 'it depends' for conditional opinions and keep subject-verb agreement.

× For instance like wearing uniform to school who have student practice their UMM, having their apparent tidy and up to standard.

✓ For instance, wearing a uniform to school helps students practice discipline, keeps their appearance tidy, and ensures standards are met.

Pronoun 'who' is incorrectly used; 'students' is the subject. 'UMM' and 'apparent' are incorrect word choices; 'appearance' and 'discipline' fit meaning. Use a verb ('helps') to link the subject to the effects. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('appearance') and clear verbs ('helps') and use plural agreement.

× However, umm some rules might affect student creativity and developments.

✓ However, some rules might affect students' creativity and development.

Use plural possessive 'students'' to show ownership, and use 'development' (uncountable) rather than plural 'developments'. Suggestion: use correct possessive and choose singular uncountable noun when referring to general growth.

× Yes, I remember when I attended to an English school, I was so new to the English back then, but luckily I met a deputy uh, teachers who helped me umm, adapt with the language quickly, with the creative activities and umm uh, conversation every day, which helped me a lot.

✓ Yes, I remember when I attended an English school; I was new to English back then, but luckily I met a deputy teacher who helped me adapt to the language quickly with creative activities and daily conversations, which helped me a lot.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'attended' ('attended an English school'). Use singular 'teacher' to match 'deputy teacher' and correct verb 'adapt to' not 'adapt with'. 'Conversation' should be plural and adjective order adjusted. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns ('adapt to'), match noun number, and simplify phrases for clarity.

× Well, I will say I will prefer a fewer policies, but these had to be practical and strict enough for students to follow.

✓ Well, I would say I prefer fewer policies, but they have to be practical and strict enough for students to follow.

Use 'fewer' without 'a' (quantifier 'fewer' already implies countable reduction). Use conditional/modal 'would' for preference and 'prefer' present form. Replace 'these had to be' with 'they have to be' for present requirement. Suggestion: drop unnecessary articles, use correct modal and tense consistency.

× For instance, like wearing uniform is really necessary in school so that they don't have to worry about the fashion or the other each other background had everyone.

✓ For instance, wearing a uniform is really necessary in school so that students don't have to worry about fashion or each other's backgrounds.

Fix pronoun reference: replace 'they' with 'students' for clarity. 'Each other background had everyone' is garbled; correct phrase is 'each other's backgrounds'. Use singular 'a uniform' when speaking of the rule and possessive 'each other's'. Suggestion: use clear noun reference and correct possessive form for mutual relationships.

× Yes, I have a really strict teacher in my year 11. Uh, she were really strict and umm make sure that we always done our homework beforehand and uh it that being said, see a really rude teacher, she really care about our development in a way try to umm have us in improves.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher in year 11. She was very strict and made sure that we always did our homework beforehand. That said, although she seemed rude, she really cared about our development and tried to help us improve.

Use past tense 'had' for a past experience and 'was' not 'were' for singular subject. Use 'made sure' and 'did' for past actions. Fix pronoun/reference and verb forms ('care'→'cared', 'try'→'tried', 'improves'→'improve'). Also split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct past participles where needed.

× Oh, I would not work at the teacher in the school that have no policies, uh, because rules and policy are made for students to strengthen their umm, their behaviors and also umm maintain their, the cleanliness to umm, to the other, to the other teacher and friends.

✓ Oh, I would not work as a teacher in a school that has no policies, because rules and policies are made to strengthen students' behavior and to maintain cleanliness for teachers and students.

Use 'work as a teacher' not 'at the teacher'. Match singular/plural and agreement: 'school that has', 'rules and policies' (plural). Use possessive 'students'' and correct noun forms. Remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns ('work as'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and simplify to avoid repetition.