Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้กระชับและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ พยายามลดคำเติมเสียง (fillers) และใช้คำที่ถูกต้องเช่น "restrictions" กับ "no" ควรเป็น "there are no restrictions" ให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงขึ้น เช่น กฎสำคัญสองสามข้อ และเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม (e.g. "for example", "also").

例: There are few formal rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to paint on desks or steal school property. Also, we are required to wear the school uniform during class hours.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดเจนโดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ แล้วให้เหตุผลที่ชัดเจน ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" หรือ "however" และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำหรือเติมเสียง เช่น "uh" รวมทั้งใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "helps you to be socially accepted" และหลีกเลี่ยงความไม่แน่นอนเช่น "it is would"

例: Yes, to some extent I think more rules can be beneficial because they help students understand acceptable behaviour. However, too many strict rules might limit students' creativity and independence.

提案: เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วให้ตัวอย่างหรือเหตุผลที่ชัดเจน หลีกเลี่ยงการกล่าวหาว่าเป็น "no reason" หากต้องการวิจารณ์ให้ยกเหตุผลหรือผลลัพธ์ ใช้ไวยากรณ์อดีตกาลที่สอดคล้องกัน เช่น "I met" และเชื่อมสองประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมอย่าง "as a result"

例: Yes, I met several dedicated teachers in high school. For example, one teacher often assigned extra homework to reinforce lessons, and as a result I sometimes struggled to finish all the work on time.

提案: ต้องตอบชัดว่าเลือกมากหรือน้อย และให้เหตุผลเป็นข้อๆ ใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "rules" not "roles" และหลีกเลี่ยง fillers และความไม่แน่นอนสุดโต่ง พยายามให้ตัวอย่างผลกระทบที่เจาะจง เช่น ผลต่อกิจกรรมพักผ่อน หรือพัฒนาการของนักเรียน

例: I prefer fewer rules because strict regulations can limit students' relaxation and creativity. For instance, excessive uniform or activity restrictions may prevent students from expressing themselves and taking part in extracurricular clubs.

提案: ตอบให้กระชับและใช้ตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจง อธิบายว่าทำไมการเคร่งครัดนั้นมีผลอย่างไร และใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "I encountered" และคำที่เหมาะสมเช่น "enforce" แทน "want you to"

例: Yes, I encountered several strict teachers regarding the dress code. For example, they strictly enforced proper uniforms and punctual appearance, which sometimes made students feel pressured but maintained a professional atmosphere.

提案: ตอบตรงคำถามและอธิบายเหตุผลชัดเจน เริ่มด้วย "No" หรือ "Yes" ตามที่ต้องการ แล้วให้เหตุผลเป็นประโยครอง ใช้คำศัพท์ถูกต้อง เช่น "overwhelming" แทน "to overwhelm" และอธิบายหน้าที่ของครูอย่างเป็นระบบ (teaching, planning, paperwork) ไม่ต้องใช้ fillers

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school. It would be overwhelming because teachers must prepare lessons, manage classrooms, and handle a lot of paperwork and administrative duties.

× No, at my school there is no restrictions or rules that prevent us from doing something that is considered, uh, forbidden.

✓ No, at my school there are no restrictions or rules that prevent us from doing something that is considered forbidden.

The subject 'no restrictions or rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Use plural agreement when talking about multiple items. Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural nouns; remove filler 'uh' and redundant commas.

× But on a regular basis it is known that we are not allowed to paint on table or steal schools property.

✓ But on a regular basis it is known that we are not allowed to paint on tables or steal school property.

Use 'on tables' (plural) if referring to tables in general and the preposition 'on' is fine for 'paint on tables'. 'Schools property' lacks the possessive form or should be 'school property' as a compound noun. Suggestion: Make nouns plural when generalizing and use correct compound noun 'school property'.

× To some extent, I think it's yes.

✓ To some extent, I think so.

'It's yes' is unnatural; use the adverbial response 'so' to agree. Modal verbs are not the issue here but this sentence is an inappropriate fixed expression. Suggestion: Use 'I think so' for agreement.

× So as we know, when we set up, uh, limitations on some things or roles, it simply means that the uh, uh, things that is forbidden.

✓ So, as we know, when we set up limitations on some things or rules, it simply means that the things that are forbidden are clearly defined.

'Roles' should be 'rules' (word choice). 'Things that is' is incorrect: 'things' is plural so use 'are'. Also sentence clarity improved by adding 'clearly defined.' Suggestion: Ensure noun choice and subject-verb agreement ('things that are'). Remove fillers.

× Therefore, it is would definitely helps you to be socially accept accepted.

✓ Therefore, it would definitely help you to be socially accepted.

Multiple issues: 'it is would' is redundant; choose 'would'. 'Helps' should be base form 'help' after modal 'would'. 'Socially accept accepted' duplicates and misuses forms; correct adjective is 'accepted'. Suggestion: After modal verbs use base verb; use correct adjective forms.

× Back when I was in high school, I have met several dedicated teachers that always give extra homework for no reason.

✓ Back when I was in high school, I met several dedicated teachers who always gave extra homework for no reason.

Mixing past time marker 'Back when I was' with present perfect 'have met' is incorrect; use simple past 'met'. Also use past 'gave' to match timeframe. Use 'who' for people instead of 'that'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense throughout the sentence.

× Therefore, it's so hard for me to finish all of the work at once.

✓ Therefore, it was very hard for me to finish all of the work at once.

Tense should match previous past context ('was' not 'is/it's'). 'So hard' is informal; 'very hard' is clearer. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense and tone appropriate for speaking test.

× I would say how they favor roles at school is not good for student recreation, but having too much roles will have like a uh, detrimental impacts on a student.

✓ I would say how they enforce rules at school is not good for student recreation, but having too many rules will have detrimental impacts on a student.

'Favor roles' is incorrect; likely 'enforce rules'. 'Too much roles' should be 'too many rules' (countable noun). Remove filler 'like a uh,'. 'A detrimental impacts' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'detrimental impacts' or 'a detrimental impact'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs and pluralization for countable nouns.

× Therefore I think we have to make UH a row.

✓ Therefore I think we have to make a rule.

'Make UH a row' is nonsensical, likely speaker meant 'make a rule'. Correct phrase is 'make a rule' or 'establish a rule'. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary and avoid fillers.

× Yes, I had encountered several strict teachers, especially when it comes to dress code.

✓ Yes, I encountered several strict teachers, especially when it came to the dress code.

Past perfect 'had encountered' is unnecessary without a reference point; use simple past 'encountered'. 'When it comes to' should be past 'when it came to' to match past tense. Suggestion: Use simple past for past experiences unless describing sequence of events.

× They are so strict that they want you to dress umm appropriately and wear a good uniform of a school.

✓ They were so strict that they wanted you to dress appropriately and wear the school uniform.

Match past tense 'were/wanted' to previous sentence. 'A good uniform of a school' is awkward; use 'the school uniform'. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: Use concise expressions and correct article usage for institutions' uniforms.

× I don't want to be a teacher.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher.

This sentence is correct. No change needed.

× Honestly, I think it is to overwhelm work or it's a big duty for me.

✓ Honestly, I think it is overwhelming work and a big responsibility for me.

'To overwhelm work' is incorrect; use adjective 'overwhelming' to describe work. 'Big duty' better expressed as 'big responsibility'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms and collocations.

× We have to, I have to like take care a lot of things such as teaching and a big like document from a school.

✓ I would have to take care of many things such as teaching and a lot of school paperwork.

Sentence fragments and filler 'have to, I have to like' are awkward. Use 'take care of' with 'many things'. 'A big like document from a school' is unclear; likely 'a lot of school paperwork' or 'administrative documents'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use correct phrasal verbs and clearer nouns.