Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more fluent and concise by combining short sentences, use a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail to support your point. Avoid unnecessary hesitations like 'back in high school.'

例: Yes. At my high school there were several rules: we had to wear a uniform every day and use of mobile phones was restricted during lessons to avoid distractions.

提案: Start directly with your opinion, then give a clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to make the logic explicit and avoid vague phrases like 'thinking on their own makes it their decision.'

例: I don't think more rules would help because they can limit students' ability to develop independent thinking. For example, when students make choices about projects or class conduct, they learn responsibility and problem-solving.

提案: Give a single concise answer and then provide a specific detail about why the teacher was dedicated. Correct grammar errors and avoid fragmentary repetition. Mention one concrete action the teacher took to show dedication.

例: Yes. My high-school world history teacher was very dedicated — he stayed after class to explain topics, prepared extra materials, and organized museum visits to make lessons more engaging.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons using linking words. Avoid unnatural pauses and broken sentences; keep it within three sentences max.

例: I prefer fewer rules because I want the freedom to make my own choices and learn from my mistakes. For instance, deciding how to manage my study time helps me become more responsible.

提案: Provide a fluent answer: state briefly that you had a strict teacher and then give a clear example of how they were strict and its effect on you. Avoid filler interjections and fragmented sentences.

例: Yes — my water-polo coach in high school was very strict; he enforced a rigorous training schedule and strict discipline, which actually improved my stamina and teamwork.

提案: Give a clear opinion and explain it with a coherent reason. Fix grammatical errors ('rule-free' not 'roof free') and complete your thought: explain who holds responsibility and how students' behavior matters. Use one linking word like 'because' followed by a full clause.

例: Yes, I would consider working in a rule-free school because responsibility would shift more onto students — they would need to manage their own behaviour and learning, while teachers would act more as facilitators.

× Yes, back in high school. There are several rules for students. For example, we must wear a uniform every day and mobile phone use is restricted.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, there were several rules for students. For example, we had to wear a uniform every day and mobile phone use was restricted.

The response mixes present tense with a past reference 'back in high school'. Tense should be past to match the time frame. Change 'There are' to 'There were', 'we must wear' to 'we had to wear', and 'is restricted' to 'was restricted' to maintain consistent past tense. Suggestion: Identify the time frame first (past) and make all verbs match that time frame.

× It's a tricky question, but basically I don't think so because I think thinking on their own makes it their decision.

✓ It's a tricky question, but basically I don't think so because I think thinking on their own allows them to make their own decisions.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb use: 'thinking on their own makes it their decision' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'allows them to make their own decisions' which uses present tense appropriately and a correct verb structure. Suggestion: Use 'allow(s) someone to do something' when describing enabling actions, and keep pronouns consistent.

× Yes, I have. I have had a really dedicated teacher in high school. He's he was a world history teacher in.

✓ Yes, I have. I had a really dedicated teacher in high school. He was a world history teacher.

The speaker mixes present perfect 'I have had' with a past time reference 'in high school' and includes a broken phrase 'He's he was'. Use simple past 'I had' and 'He was' for a finished past period. Also remove extraneous words. Suggestion: For experiences tied to a specific past time, use simple past rather than present perfect.

× I prefer to have fewer rules at school because. I would like to decide. What is important on my own?

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I would like to decide what is important on my own.

The original contains unnecessary sentence breaks and a question mark that doesn't fit. Combine into one coherent sentence using present tense 'prefer' and modal 'would like' for preference. Remove the question mark. Suggestion: Keep related clauses together and use punctuation appropriately to reflect sentence meaning.

× Yes, I have had a really strict teacher. He was a coach. Oh, my water polo team in high school especially.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher. He was my water polo coach in high school.

Mixing present perfect 'have had' with past time and fragmented clauses makes the sentence unclear. Use simple past 'I had' and combine fragments into 'He was my water polo coach' to be grammatical. Suggestion: When mentioning a specific past role, use simple past and keep the noun phrase together ('my water polo coach').

× Yes, I don't mind working in a roof free school because. I think the responsibility is not. On teachers if students doesn't.

✓ Yes, I don't mind working in a rule-free school because I think the responsibility is not only on teachers if students don't follow rules.

Multiple errors: 'roof free' is a wrong word; correct is 'rule-free'. Sentence fragments and punctuation errors break meaning. 'On teachers' needs a preposition phrase 'only on teachers', and 'if students doesn't' has subject-verb agreement error and wrong auxiliary; use 'students don't'. Reassemble into one sentence conveying the intended idea. Suggestion: Use hyphenation for compound adjectives like 'rule-free', ensure subject-verb agreement ('students don't'), and avoid sentence fragments by connecting clauses logically.