Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to add one supporting detail. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., "technology" → "technologies" or "a technology").

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it lets me share updates about my life. For example, I often text them short messages about work or plans, which helps us stay close despite being busy.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two specific examples. Fix word order and redundancy, and use linking words like "for example" or "usually" to organize ideas.

例: I usually text my close friends to ask what they are doing and to share my plans. For example, if I can't call, I’ll message them about work updates or ask if they want to meet at the weekend.

提案: Give a clear preference sentence and one reason supported by a specific example. Improve grammar ("per s one" → "person", "can't really interact with them know about" → clarify). Use linking words like "because" and "for example".

例: I prefer texting one person rather than being in a group chat because one-to-one messages are more focused. For example, when I text a single friend I can have a deeper conversation about personal matters without going off-topic.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a concise reason and one supporting example. Correct repetition and phrasing ("interact people with face" → "interact with people face-to-face").

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because you can read someone's emotions and respond immediately. For instance, when discussing a sensitive issue in person I can see their body language and clarify misunderstandings quickly.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a concise explanation of how you handle disagreements. Avoid contradictory phrasing and improve grammar ("when there's nothing I love to communicate about it" is unclear). Use linking words like "instead" or "rather than".

例: I don't usually argue with friends; instead, I prefer to discuss problems calmly. For example, if a disagreement arises I would talk privately to understand their point of view and find a compromise.

× I love texting my friends so I can update them what's going in my life and I'll talk about their thanks.

✓ I love texting my friends so I can update them about what is going on in my life and thank them.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and phrasing. 'what's going in my life' is incorrect: use 'what is going on in my life' (present continuous). 'I'll talk about their thanks' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is likely 'thank them' (simple present or infinitive after 'to'). Also use 'about' after 'update' when specifying the topic. Suggestion: use 'update them about' + 'what is going on' and 'thank them.'

× I think that's one of the best technology that we could ever have.

✓ I think that's one of the best technologies that we could ever have.

'Technology' is a countable/uncountable noun depending on context; here 'one of the best' requires a plural noun 'technologies.' Use 'technologies' to match 'one of the.'

× You can update your friends, update your family, what's going in your life.

✓ You can update your friends and family about what is going on in your life.

Repeating 'update' is unnecessary and 'what's going in your life' should be 'what is going on in your life' (present continuous). Also include 'about' to introduce the topic.

× With my close ones, I usually text about what what are they doing, where are they are like if I'm not able to call them, I text them.

✓ With my close ones, I usually text them about what they are doing and where they are; if I'm not able to call, I text them.

Problems: word order in indirect question 'what they are doing' (not 'what are they doing'), duplicate words 'what what' and 'are they are'. Also 'where they are' is the correct order. Rearrange clauses for clarity and remove redundancy.

× So what's going in your life and talk about everything?

✓ So I ask them what's going on in their life and we talk about everything.

Original fragment lacks clear subject and verb agreement for the context. 'What's going in your life' should be 'what's going on in their life' to match perspective, and add 'I ask them' and 'we talk' to form a complete sentence.

× I think I will prefer texting pers one person personally rather than on a group chat as I feel like in Group chat you need to go with the flow and like you can go off topic because everybody is texting everything but with your friend you can't really interact with them know about.

✓ I think I prefer texting one person personally rather than using a group chat because in a group chat you have to go with the flow and conversations can go off topic; with a friend you can interact with them and get to know them better.

Multiple issues: 'I will prefer' is awkward — use simple present 'I prefer' for habits. 'pers one person' is incorrect; use 'one person.' 'on a group chat' -> 'using a group chat.' 'you need to go with the flow and like you can go off topic' should be 'you have to go with the flow and conversations can go off topic.' 'you can't really interact with them know about' is ungrammatical; intended meaning 'get to know them' or 'interact with them and get to know them better.' Reformulated for clarity and correct tenses.

× I prefer to interact people with face, face to face and I feel like you can get the emotions there and you can you can respond on time where on social media you need to wait for them and like, I don't prefer it.

✓ I prefer to interact with people face to face because you can see emotions and respond immediately, whereas on social media you often have to wait; I don't prefer that.

Errors: word order 'interact people with face' should be 'interact with people face to face.' 'Get the emotions' -> 'see emotions.' 'respond on time' -> 'respond immediately.' 'where on social media' should be 'whereas on social media.' Replace 'it' with 'that' to refer to the situation.

× I'm not the kind of person who usually argue with friends, but I think when there's nothing I love to communicate about it, but rather than having a argument about it, I'd rather talk to them about it.

✓ I'm not the kind of person who usually argues with friends, but when there is something I want to discuss, rather than having an argument about it, I'd rather talk to them about it.

Subject-verb agreement: 'who usually argue' should be 'who usually argues' because 'who' refers to 'the kind of person' (singular). 'when there's nothing I love to communicate about it' is unclear — likely 'when there is something I want to discuss.' 'a argument' should be 'an argument.' Clarified meaning and corrected agreement.