Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use natural collocations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like "as well as".

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. For example, I often tell them about challenges I faced during the day and they give me advice, and I also catch up on their news so we stay connected.

提案: Give specific, coherent topics and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Use linking words to organize ideas and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "daily life", "happy moments", "news"). Limit to 2–3 short sentences.

例: I usually talk about my daily life, such as work or study, and any interesting or happy events that happened. I also share news and ask about their family and plans.

提案: State your preference clearly and give a concise reason with clearer vocabulary. Use linking words like "because" and avoid hesitations. Replace vague phrases with specific ones (e.g., "introverted", "misunderstood").

例: I prefer talking one-on-one rather than in groups because I'm more introverted and worry that my words might be misunderstood in a group setting.

提案: Give a direct answer and explain briefly using clear language. Clarify trade-offs: why you prefer social media and any limitations. Avoid confused sentences and repetition.

例: I prefer communicating via social media because I feel uncomfortable making direct eye contact; however, I miss the emotional nuance of face-to-face chats since emojis cannot fully replace real expressions.

提案: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary like "disagree" or "debate." Explain purpose and result briefly with linking words such as "because" or "so". Avoid awkward phrasing like "quarry".

例: Yes, we sometimes disagree because it helps us clarify different viewpoints. For instance, a frank discussion often leads to a better understanding and stronger decisions.

× Yes, I love chatting with my friends because I can share my sorrows as well as my experience in the day with my friends as well as I guess I'll update from my friends as well.

✓ Yes, I love chatting with my friends because I can share my sorrows as well as my daily experiences with them, and I guess I also receive updates from my friends.

The original sentence repeats 'my friends' and uses pronouns inconsistently ('with my friends' then 'from my friends'). Replace repeated nouns with the pronoun 'them' for clarity and concision. 'Experience in the day' is unnatural; use 'daily experiences'. Also simplify 'I'll update from my friends' to 'I also receive updates from my friends' to match meaning and tense. Grammar problem type id:12

× I usually tell my friends about my daddy life, my showers or my cheerfulness or something amazing things that's pop up in my life as well as I will I I will tell her about my Friends Life or something. News, information.

✓ I usually tell my friends about my daily life, my moods or something amazing that pops up in my life, and I also tell them about their lives, news and information.

Many word choice and agreement errors: 'daddy life' is incorrect — use 'daily life'. 'my showers' is unclear; likely intended 'my moods' or 'my experiences'. 'something amazing things that's pop up' should be 'something amazing that pops up' (singular agreement and verb form). 'I will I I will tell her about my Friends Life' has pronoun and capitalization errors; use 'I also tell them about their lives'. Correct verb 'pops' for present simple third person singular. Grammar problem type id:13

× Umm, I refer chatting with my friends only umm, rather than to chatting in the group because I'm kind of interested person.

✓ Umm, I prefer chatting with one friend rather than chatting in a group because I'm a reserved person.

Wrong verb 'refer' should be 'prefer'. 'referring to' is different. 'chatting with my friends only' is awkward; context asked single friend vs group, so 'one friend' or 'one person' fits. 'interested person' is incorrect meaning; likely 'reserved' or 'introverted'. Use 'a' before singular noun. Grammar problem type id:10

× I'm not quite comfortable to test my delivered in the chat, uh, through because I think someone can misunderstand, uh, my talking.

✓ I'm not quite comfortable testing my delivery in chat because I think someone might misunderstand what I say.

Preposition and verb form errors: 'comfortable to test' should be 'comfortable testing' (gerund after 'comfortable'). 'my delivered' is wrong; use 'my delivery'. 'in the chat' -> 'in chat' or 'in a chat'. 'can' changed to 'might' for polite possibility. 'my talking' -> 'what I say' or 'my words'. Grammar problem type id:11

× I'm afraid to looking at to look at others eyes so I usually refer to chatting from the visuals from social media rather than face to face.

✓ I'm afraid to make eye contact, so I usually prefer chatting via social media visuals rather than face to face.

Pronoun and verb form issues: 'afraid to looking at to look at others eyes' is ungrammatical. Use idiom 'afraid to make eye contact' or 'afraid of looking into others' eyes' (note possessive). 'refer to chatting from the visuals from social media' should be 'prefer chatting via social media visuals' or 'prefer to chat using visual features on social media'. Grammar problem type id:12

× But I can't use the support from emotion emojis to express my feelings my emotion as well.

✓ But I can use emotional emojis to express my feelings and emotions as well.

Original used double negative 'can't' then 'as well' contradictory. Likely intended positive: 'I can use'. 'the support from emotion emojis' awkward; use 'emotional emojis'. Remove repeated 'my feelings my emotion'. Grammar problem type id:13

× So I think I'm chatting.

✓ So I think I prefer chatting this way.

Sentence 'I'm chatting' is odd as conclusion; better to express preference. Subject-verb form is okay but meaning unclear. Provide clearer phrase 'I prefer chatting this way' to match context. Grammar problem type id:27

× Yes, I think it's beside the joyful happiness we share together, we also have something we have to quarrel, to discuss something very strictly, to find there is a common ideas or do, to learn each other's opinions and learn each other's experiences.

✓ Yes, besides the joy we share, we sometimes quarrel or have strict discussions to find common ideas, learn each other's opinions and learn from each other's experiences.

Sentence is long, repetitive and ungrammatical: 'beside the joyful happiness' should be 'besides the joy'. 'we have something we have to quarrel' is incorrect; use 'we sometimes quarrel'. 'to discuss something very strictly' -> 'have strict discussions'. 'to find there is a common ideas' -> 'to find common ideas' (remove 'there is' and correct plural agreement). Simplify and parallel structure for clarity. Grammar problem type id:26

× So I think our quarry sometimes is very effective.

✓ So I think our quarrels are sometimes very productive.

'quarry' is incorrect word; should be 'quarrel(s)'. 'is very effective' is odd collocation for arguments; 'productive' fits better. Use plural 'quarrels are' for general statement. Grammar problem type id:12