Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency by removing hesitations and redundancy, and add a clear topic sentence plus one specific example. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me organize my thoughts and feel supported. For example, when I’m feeling down, I usually call my close friend Sarah and we talk for twenty minutes, which always cheers me up. So chatting is both comforting and practical for me.

提案: Be more specific and concise: start with a topic sentence then give one or two concrete examples. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: I usually chat about a mix of hobbies and daily events. For example, we often discuss books and new songs we’ve discovered, and we send memes about something funny that happened during the day to keep the mood light.

提案: Give a clear preference with a reason and a concise example. Avoid vague phrases like "a mixture of things" and explain what you like about groups versus one-to-one chats using linking words such as "because" or "however".

例: I prefer group chats because they bring lots of different opinions and make the conversation lively. For instance, in our group chat we often plan weekend activities and share jokes, which makes it more fun than a one‑to‑one conversation.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant. Improve by tightening sentences, avoiding repetition ("non facial expressions" and "non verbal cues"), and give one concise example. Keep response to 2–3 sentences for natural delivery.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it lets me read nonverbal cues like facial expressions and tone of voice, which reduces misunderstandings. For example, if a friend seems upset in person, I can notice their body language and ask about it immediately.

提案: Be more precise and avoid awkward phrasing. State when it happens, why, and how you handle it, using linking words like "because" and "usually". Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a brief resolution to show maturity.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends, usually when they criticize something I care about, like a favourite food. Because I get defensive quickly, disagreements can escalate, but I try to calm down and talk it through afterwards to resolve the issue.

× they're a good way of me just spilling my thoughts and they just turn into sentences.

✓ they're a good way for me to just spill my thoughts and for them to turn into sentences.

Use 'way for someone to do something' or 'way of doing' structures. 'way of me just spilling' is ungrammatical. Change to 'way for me to just spill' or 'way of just spilling my thoughts' to be correct and natural.

× I just like to chat with them, call them, or just text them and just see what's up.

✓ I like to chat with them, call them, or text them and see what's up.

Repeated 'just' is unnecessary but not strictly grammatical; main issue is parallelism and redundancy. Keep verb forms parallel: 'chat, call, or text' and omit extra 'just' for clarity.

× I usually chat about a mixture of things with my friends, especially about books or music or just funny moments or things that happened with me throughout my entire day.

✓ I usually chat about a mixture of things with my friends, especially books, music, or funny moments and things that happened to me throughout the day.

Use 'happened to me' rather than 'happened with me'. Also reduce redundant 'about' after 'especially' and 'throughout my entire day' is wordy; 'throughout the day' is more natural.

× and it just helps to lighten up the mood and keep the conversation really fun and going.

✓ and it helps lighten the mood and keep the conversation fun and going.

After 'helps' either use infinitive without 'to' ('help do') or 'to' with base verb; here 'helps lighten' is more natural. Remove extra 'really' if desired. Maintain parallel structure: 'help lighten... and keep...'.

× If sometimes one friend is currently unavailable, I would go and text another friend.

✓ If one friend is unavailable, I usually text another friend.

Conditional and tense mismatch: 'If sometimes... currently unavailable' is awkward. Use simple conditional: 'If one friend is unavailable' and match habitual action with 'usually text' rather than 'would', which suggests hypothetical rather than habitual.

× I prefer face to face communication compared with social media because I think it's just easier to read the non facial expressions like non verbal cues like expressions or the tone of voice which reduces misunderstandings.

✓ I prefer face-to-face communication to social media because it's easier to read nonverbal cues like facial expressions and tone of voice, which reduces misunderstandings.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'compared with'. 'face-to-face' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. 'nonverbal' is one word; 'facial expressions' not 'non facial expressions'. Also simplify 'like' repetition and add comma before 'which'.

× For example, when someone is upset, you can't immediately see their reaction and how they're responding to you.

✓ For example, when someone is upset, you can usually see their reaction and how they're responding to you more clearly than in text.

Original said 'can't immediately see' which conflicted with earlier point; clarify contrast between face-to-face and text. Adjust modal and adverb to match intended meaning: face-to-face allows clearer immediate perception.

× Yes, sometimes I do argue with friends, especially when I strongly agree with something such as a specific food that I like and then they criticize it.

✓ Yes, sometimes I argue with friends, especially when I strongly like a specific food and they criticize it.

'Strongly agree with something such as a specific food that I like' is awkward. Use 'strongly like a specific food' to express preference, and remove unnecessary 'do' unless for emphasis. Keep sentence concise.

× I usually get upset quickly and I tend to get it to disagreements and it usually escalates to a bigger argument.

✓ I usually get upset quickly, and it tends to lead to disagreements that often escalate into bigger arguments.

'get it to disagreements' is ungrammatical. Use 'lead to disagreements' or 'get into disagreements'. Also use 'escalate into' rather than 'to a bigger argument'. Ensure subject consistency: 'it tends' refers to the situation. Use plural 'arguments' for naturalness.