Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one short reason and an example. Avoid repetition and fix pronunciation/writing errors ("I I", "call more than chat"). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends, but with my best friend I prefer calling because it's faster and more personal. For example, when we need to make plans quickly, a phone call helps us decide in minutes.

提案: Be specific and organise ideas. Start with a general topic sentence, then give two clear, linked examples using linking words like 'for example' or 'also'. Avoid slang or unclear phrases (e.g., 'gapping').

例: We usually talk about school and our personal lives. For example, we discuss homework deadlines and share tips on studying, and we also talk about our friendships or romantic interests because it helps us relax.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and correct grammar (plural/singular and articles). Begin with a direct statement and then explain with a reason. Use linking words ('however', 'but', 'so') to connect ideas.

例: It depends: I enjoy group chats because they are lively, but I prefer one-on-one conversations with my best friend because I'm shy and can speak more openly.

提案: Use clearer phrasing and correct grammar. Start with a direct preference, give two reasons (one practical, one personal) and a concise example. Avoid awkward expressions like 'Internet sign' and 'make us can't talk'.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it's more natural and allows better expression through body language. For example, video calls or messages can fail when the internet is poor, but in person we can communicate smoothly.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a direct answer, then one short reason and a brief example of how you handle disagreements. Replace vague emotional language with precise expressions.

例: Not often. I avoid arguments because they damage relationships and upset me. If we disagree, I usually stay calm and talk it through to find a solution.

× Yes, I like chatting with my friends, but if it is my best friend I I would like to call more than chat.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends, but if it is my best friend I would rather call than chat.

The original uses 'would like to call more than chat' which is unnatural comparison; 'would rather' + base verb is the correct structure to express preference. Also remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'than' for comparisons.

× It is because it is more convenient to talk and chatting may lose a lot of time.

✓ It is because it is more convenient to talk and chatting may waste a lot of time.

The phrase 'lose a lot of time' is non-native; use 'waste a lot of time'. Parallelism: keep gerund 'chatting' but ensure verbs collocate correctly.

× Mostly I chat about the school's homework or like talking about friends like gapping and also chatting with my friends about the boys because it makes us feel very good.

✓ Mostly I chat about school homework, or about friends, gossiping, and I also chat with my friends about boys because it makes us feel good.

Use 'school homework' instead of 'the school's homework'. 'Gapping' is incorrect; likely 'gossiping'. Remove redundant 'the' before plural nouns. Simplify 'about the boys' to 'about boys'. Reduce repetition 'very good' to 'good' for naturalness.

× I think it depends on people if that friends or my best friend.

✓ I think it depends on who the people are, whether they are friends or my best friend.

Original mixes 'that friends' incorrectly. Use 'who the people are' and 'whether they are' to introduce alternatives. Ensure pronoun and verb agreement.

× I would like to chat in a groups but if they are not my best friend, I prefer chatting with my best friend only because I'm too shy.

✓ I would like to chat in a group, but if they are not my best friends, I prefer chatting with my best friend only because I'm too shy.

Use singular 'a group' not 'a groups'. Also maintain consistency: 'they are not my best friends' (plural) when referring to multiple people. Alternatively make both singular/plural consistent.

× I would like to communicate face to face.

✓ I would like to communicate face to face.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses 'communicate' appropriately. No change required other than confirming form fits context.

× This is because I think we can talk much more than using social media.

✓ This is because I think we can talk much more in person than using social media.

Add 'in person' to clarify contrast with social media. 'Talk much more than using social media' lacks a clear comparator; restructure for clarity.

× For example, when the Internet sign is not very good, it will make us can't talk.

✓ For example, when the internet signal is not very good, we can't talk.

'Internet sign' is incorrect; use 'internet signal'. 'It will make us can't talk' is ungrammatical: use direct negative 'we can't talk' or 'we are unable to talk'.

× Not really, because I don't really like to argue with my friends and have a bad relationship with them.

✓ Not really, because I don't like to argue with my friends or have a bad relationship with them.

Use 'or' instead of 'and' to express that arguing would cause a bad relationship. Remove redundant 'really' for conciseness; present simple 'don't like' is correct.

× It makes me feel very very annoying and it makes me feel sad, very sad, so I don't like to.

✓ It makes me feel very annoyed and very sad, so I don't like it.

'Annoying' describes something that annoys; to describe the person's feeling use 'annoyed'. Avoid repeating 'it makes me feel'. End with 'I don't like it' to complete the idea.