Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Shorten and state directly, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'chatting' and 'chatter'. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word.

例: I enjoy spending time with my friends, but I'm more of a listener than a talker. For example, in group gatherings I usually listen to others' stories rather than leading the conversation, which helps me learn more about them.

提案: Give a more specific topic and one concrete example; avoid vague phrases like 'everything and nothing' and repetition. Use a linking phrase to introduce the example.

例: We talk about a range of things, but mostly they share personal stories. For instance, last week a friend told me about a strange incident at work, and I listened and asked two follow-up questions to show interest.

提案: Start with a clear statement of preference, then give a concise reason and a brief supporting detail. Avoid long, awkward clauses and repeated ideas.

例: I prefer one-on-one conversations because I find groups overwhelming. For example, in a one-on-one I can focus on one person's story and ask questions, which feels more comfortable than trying to join multiple speakers.

提案: Avoid extreme or inappropriate expressions (e.g. 'kills me'); be natural and concise. State preference, then give a reason and mention a transition to face-to-face when comfortable. Use linking words and correct grammar.

例: I usually prefer to start communicating via social media because it's less intense and lets me get to know someone. If we get on well online, I would then arrange a face-to-face meeting once I feel more comfortable.

提案: Make a clear opening statement and avoid repeating words like 'really'. Explain briefly why arguments happen with close friends and give a short example or consequence. Keep it within a couple of sentences.

例: I rarely argue with acquaintances, but I may have more intense arguments with close friends because we trust each other and know the disagreements won't damage the relationship. For example, a close friend and I once had a heated discussion about plans, but we resolved it quickly and learned to communicate better.

× To be very honest, I am more of a listener so I like to spend time with my friends, but I am not particularly a chatter in the chatting situation.

✓ To be very honest, I am more of a listener, so I like to spend time with my friends, but I am not particularly chatty in conversations.

The word 'chatter' is a noun; the speaker needs the adjective 'chatty' to describe themselves. Also 'in the chatting situation' is awkward; 'in conversations' is a natural collocation. Add a comma before 'so' to join independent clauses correctly. Suggested improvement: replace nouns used as adjectives with appropriate adjective forms and use natural collocations (e.g., 'chatty' and 'in conversations').

× I chat about everything and nothing at the same time with my friends.

✓ I chat about everything and nothing at the same time with my friends.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present simple to describe habitual action; no change required. Keep present simple for routines. Suggested improvement: none.

× It's mostly them talking to me.

✓ Mostly, they are the ones talking to me.

'It's mostly them talking to me' uses 'it' and 'them' awkwardly. Use 'they are the ones' to match subject pronoun and make the clause clear. Also placing 'mostly' at the start improves flow. Suggested improvement: match subject pronouns and use clear structures like 'they are the ones...'.

× They tell me about their stories or something, something very peculiar that happened in their life at the moment.

✓ They tell me stories or something peculiar that happened in their lives recently.

'Their stories' is fine but 'something, something very peculiar' is repetitive and awkward. Use 'something peculiar' and 'happened in their life at the moment' is unidiomatic; 'happened in their lives recently' is clearer. Use plural 'lives' to match 'they'. Suggested improvement: avoid repetition and use appropriate time adverbs like 'recently'; ensure plural agreement with 'they'.

× I do prefer having a one-on-one conversation because I am very socially awkward so sitting in a group of friends although it helps me stay quiet and be in my corner and just listen to people, but I would prefer having a one-on-one conversation.

✓ I prefer having a one-on-one conversation because I am very socially awkward; sitting in a group of friends helps me stay quiet and listen, but I would still prefer a one-on-one conversation.

The sentence is long and repetitive. Use 'I prefer' rather than 'I do prefer' unless emphasizing. 'A one-on-one conversation' needs article 'a'. The clause structure was confused—use a semicolon or split into two sentences and remove redundant phrase. Also 'be in my corner' is idiomatic but unnecessary here. Suggested improvement: simplify and avoid repetition; include articles before singular countable nouns.

× At first I would prefer via social media because I don't know the person and I'm scared that what if that person kills me or worse is boring.

✓ At first, I would prefer to use social media because I don't know the person and I'm scared: what if that person is dangerous or, worse, boring?

Use 'prefer to use social media' rather than 'prefer via social media'. The clause 'I'm scared that what if...' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I'm scared: what if...' or 'I'm afraid that the person might be...'. 'Kills me' is hyperbolic; 'is dangerous' is more natural. Insert commas and punctuation for clarity. Suggested improvement: use 'prefer to' + verb, avoid mixing 'that' and 'what if', and choose appropriate vocabulary for formal speech.

× So I would prefer social media 1st and then pre face to face if when I get more and more comfortable with that person.

✓ So I would prefer social media at first and then face-to-face meetings once I get more comfortable with that person.

Use 'at first' rather than '1st', and 'face-to-face' as an adjective/noun phrase. Remove 'pre' and the incorrect 'if when'; use 'once' to indicate the condition/time. Maintain natural future intent with 'would prefer' and 'once I get'. Suggested improvement: avoid numerals like '1st' in speech, use correct conjunctions ('once') and hyphenated compound adjectives ('face-to-face').

× I don't argue with friends I'm not close to, but I argue really heavily if I'm really really close to them because I know they don't mind if I say something hurtful to them because they know I don't mean it and I reciprocate the same for them.

✓ I don't argue with friends I'm not close to, but I argue quite a lot with friends I'm very close to because I know they won't mind if I say something hurtful; they know I don't mean it, and I do the same for them.

'Really heavily' is unnatural; 'quite a lot' or 'a lot' is better. Repetition of 'really' should be avoided. The clause 'I reciprocate the same for them' is awkward; use 'I do the same for them.' Use contractions consistently and split long sentence with semicolon for clarity. Suggested improvement: avoid informal intensifiers 'really really', choose natural adverb phrases, and use clearer verbs like 'do the same' instead of 'reciprocate the same'.