Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 다소 간단하고 반복이 있습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 구체적인 예시나 이유를 덧붙여 답변을 확장하세요. 또한 어색한 연결어 사용을 줄이고 자연스러운 표현으로 다듬으세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유 → 구체적 예 순으로 최대 3~4문장으로 구성하세요.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, we often talk about what we cooked or interesting things that happened at work. These conversations usually make me laugh and feel closer to them.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 완성되지 않은 부분(‘and.’)이 있어 명확성이 떨어집니다. 불필요한 말(‘Umm’)을 줄이고 구체적 세부사항을 추가하세요. 연결어를 사용해 내용을 자연스럽게 잇고, 최대 3문장으로 정리하세요.

例: I usually talk about my daily routine and the activities I did that day. I also share short videos or reels we find funny or interesting. This often leads to longer conversations about hobbies and recommendations.

提案: 주제는 분명하지만 표현이 반복적이고 이유가 더 구체화되어야 합니다. ‘confused’가 두 번 사용되어 자연스럽지 않으므로 다른 어휘로 바꾸고 구체적인 상황(예: 너무 많은 메시지, 놓치는 대화 등)을 제시하세요.

例: I prefer chatting with one friend because conversations in group chats move too quickly and it is easy to miss messages. One-on-one chats let me focus on the person and have a more meaningful conversation.

提案: 좋은 이유를 제시했지만 문장이 다소 장황합니다. 한 문장으로 주제 제시 후, 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적 예로 뒷받침하세요. 또한 ‘can't’ 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand emotions better. For instance, I can tell if a friend is joking or upset much more easily in person.

提案: 문법적 오류와 불완전한 문장이 많고 의미 전달이 혼란스럽습니다(‘arguing makes white’ 등). 간단명료하게 부정문으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 한 가지 예를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복을 제거하고 정확한 어휘를 사용하세요.

例: No, I usually avoid arguing with my friends because I value our relationship more than being right. If we disagree, I prefer to discuss calmly and try to understand their point of view.

× Yes, I like to chat with my friends about my daily routine or what I eat and fun stories.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends about my daily routine, what I eat, and funny stories.

Use of 'like to chat' is acceptable but to match parallel structure after 'about' the gerund form 'chatting' and parallel noun phrases are clearer; 'fun stories' should be 'funny stories' for natural adjective use. Maintain parallel items separated by commas.

× As I said, I share my daily routine with my friends and what I did the day and. Umm, I share some reels.

✓ As I said, I share my daily routine with my friends and what I did that day. Umm, I also share some reels.

Original sentence has broken structure and incorrect phrase 'the day and.' Replace with 'that day' to indicate past reference and add 'also' to link ideas. Use a full sentence for clarity.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend because I feel confused when I'm in a group chatting room.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one friend because I feel confused when I'm in a group chat.

Use the noun 'group chat' rather than 'group chatting room.' 'Chatting' as present participle is unnecessary; 'chat' is the correct noun.

× It makes me uncomfortable and confused.

✓ It makes me uncomfortable and confused.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. Pronoun use is appropriate here.

× I prefer to communicate face to face because I can see their facial expressions and gestures, but I can't when I communicate via social media.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because I can see people's facial expressions and gestures, which I can't do when I communicate via social media.

Use 'people's' to specify whose expressions and add 'do' to complete the contrast ('can't do'). This improves clarity and grammatical completeness.

× No, I I don't argue with my friends.

✓ No, I don't argue with my friends.

Duplicate 'I' is an error; removing the extra pronoun fixes the sentence.

× I don't like to. Fight with my friends but I think arguing makes white so I just say good things to my.

✓ I don't like to fight with my friends, but I think arguing makes things worse, so I just say kind things to them.

Sentence fragmentation and incorrect words: 'I don't like to. Fight' should be 'I don't like to fight' as one sentence. 'Makes white' is incorrect; likely intended 'makes things worse'. 'Good things to my' should be 'kind things to them'—use correct adjective and pronoun. Also add commas to join clauses properly.