Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article errors, and avoid redundancy.

例: I do enjoy chatting with friends, but it depends on my energy level. As an introvert, social interactions often drain me, so I usually avoid large gatherings; however, I happily chat with people who energize me because I feel more comfortable and engaged.

提案: Use a clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Start with a topic sentence then give specific examples, using linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'. Avoid repetition.

例: We usually talk about everyday life and work. For example, we discuss career updates, relationships, and any recent dramas or events—nothing too deep, mostly casual catch-ups.

提案: Clarify the preference and fix confusing phrases. Use one clear reason with a linking phrase. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (‘children’ seems wrong) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer chatting in a group because it shares the burden of keeping the conversation going. In a group, everyone contributes, so I don’t have to lead the discussion or talk constantly.

提案: Use correct collocations and tense. Provide two clear contrasts with linking words like 'because' and 'whereas'. Replace unclear phrases (e.g. 'turn of voice', 'interrupt it by yourself') with natural expressions.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions, tone of voice, and body language. Whereas messages on social media often feel cold or ambiguous, so misunderstandings can happen more easily.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific example or reason. Fix mixed tense and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast.

例: I generally avoid arguing with friends because I value the relationship. However, if someone says something that really upsets me, I might become involved in a heated argument, though I usually try to step away to calm things down.

× It depends when I have the energy for it, I like to chat with them.

✓ It depends on when I have the energy for it; I like to chat with them.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends' and punctuation: 'depends on' is the correct collocation. Also the original had a comma splice; use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: use 'It depends on when...' or 'It depends; when I have the energy,...'. Remain in present tense.

× But overall I'm kind of introverted person and social interactions really drains my energy so most of the time I avoid them.

✓ But overall I'm kind of an introverted person, and social interactions really drain my energy, so most of the time I avoid them.

Missing article 'an' before 'introverted person' and subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'social interactions' requires verb 'drain' not 'drains'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: include 'an' and match verb to plural subject.

× I really come in contact with the person who energizes me, but in case that happen I'd like to chat with them.

✓ I usually come into contact with the people who energize me, but if that happens I'd like to chat with them.

Use 'come into contact with' not 'come in contact with' (idiomatic preference), match number: 'the people who energize me' or singular 'the person who energizes me'; verb 'happen' needs third-person singular 'happens' and conditional 'if that happens' is clearer than 'in case that happen'. Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and use correct verb form.

× Me and my friends usually chat about how our life is going, how our work is going, our relationship with people, the latest drama with people, with or with a lover and with friends as well.

✓ My friends and I usually chat about how our lives are going, how our work is going, our relationships with other people, the latest dramas with others, with lovers, and with friends as well.

Pronoun order: 'My friends and I' is correct, not 'Me and my friends'. Plural consistency: 'lives' and 'relationships' should be plural to match 'we'. Awkward repetition and unclear phrases clarified. Suggestion: use parallel structure and correct subject form.

× Just general normal chatting, nothing deep.

✓ Just general, normal chatting; nothing deep.

Fragment lacking a verb; acceptable in spoken language but written correction adds punctuation and makes it clearer as a sentence fragment intentionally. Suggestion: for formal writing, combine into a full sentence: 'It's just general, normal chatting; nothing deep.'.

× Yes, I do love to chat with a group of people because that way the way of holding and continuing the conversation is being lifted off my children and I don't have to talk or carry the conversation all the time.

✓ Yes, I do love to chat with a group of people because that way the burden of holding and continuing the conversation is lifted off me and I don't have to talk or carry the conversation all the time.

Incorrect noun 'children' likely meant 'me'; pronoun and noun error. 'The way the way' is redundant; use 'the burden of holding...'. 'Is being lifted off' can be simplified to 'is lifted off me'. Suggestion: use correct pronoun and avoid repetition.

× That way it everyone is contributing to the conversation and I don't have to contribute.

✓ That way everyone is contributing to the conversation and I don't have to contribute as much.

Extra pronoun 'it' is incorrect; remove it. Add 'as much' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure no stray pronouns and finish the comparative idea if intended.

× I do prefer to communicate face to face, that way I can sense the person's emotions, the turn of voice and also their body language.

✓ I do prefer to communicate face to face; that way I can sense the person's emotions, tone of voice, and also their body language.

Use semicolon to fix comma splice. 'Turn of voice' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'tone of voice'. Prepositions are fine. Suggestion: use 'tone of voice' and correct punctuation.

× Whereas via social media you can really read through the text or their voice notes.

✓ Whereas via social media you can only read the text or listen to their voice notes.

Verb 'read through' is acceptable but 'only' clarifies limitation; 'listen to' is needed for voice notes (not 'read'). Suggestion: match verbs to the medium: 'read' for text, 'listen' for voice notes.

× It usually came out cold and you have to interrupt it by yourself.

✓ It usually comes across as cold and you have to interpret it by yourself.

Tense mismatch: 'came out' (past) should be present 'comes' to match 'usually'. 'Interrupt' is incorrect choice; likely meant 'interpret' (understand). 'Comes across as cold' is idiomatic. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual statements and correct verb choice.

× No, I don't prefer arguing in general, let alone arguing with friends, but if they do say something that really gets on my nerves, I mostly get involved in the heated argument with them.

✓ No, I don't prefer arguing in general, let alone with friends, but if they say something that really gets on my nerves, I might get involved in a heated argument with them.

Remove redundant 'do' in 'do say' unless emphasizing; use modal 'might' to indicate possibility rather than certainty. Also remove extra 'the' before 'heated argument'. Suggestion: use modals to express likelihood and avoid redundancy.

× But most of the time I do avoid at all costs.

✓ But most of the time I avoid it at all costs.

Add object 'it' after 'avoid' and move 'at all costs' after the verb for natural word order. 'Do avoid' is unnecessary emphasis; simple present 'avoid' is better. Suggestion: include the object and prefer natural adverb placement.