Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول الإجابة بشكل أكثر مباشرة وبترتيب واضح: ابدأ بجملة موضوعية قصيرة تُجيب على السؤال، ثم أضف جزئياً تفسيرا محدداً ودون تكرار. قلل من التعبيرات العامة والكلمات المكررة وصحح الأخطاء النحوية البسيطة (مثل استخدام 'extravagant' غير مناسب هنا).

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends. I like meeting people of different ages because I’m curious about their experiences. I also enjoy talking with strangers when the conversation is interesting.

提案: اجب بجملة موضوعية واضحة ثم اذكر أمثلة محددة ومنظمة. تجنب العبارات المبهمة («daddy issues») إذا لم تكن مناسبة، واستعمل مفردات دقيقة ومرتبة. حاول استخدام روابط بسيطة مثل 'for example' أو 'such as' لربط الأمثلة.

例: I usually discuss social and psychological issues. For example, we talk about family relationships, why divorce rates are rising, and how social pressures affect mental health.

提案: ابدأ بالإجابة المباشرة («I prefer...») ثم اشرح السبب بجملة واحدة مدعومة بتفصيل بسيط. تجنب التكرار وتأكد من تركيب الجملة بشكل صحيح (مثلاً 'a large group' بدلاً من 'a massive group').

例: I prefer talking in groups because I enjoy hearing different viewpoints. In a group discussion I can compare opinions and learn new perspectives.

提案: ابدأ بإجابة واضحة ثم قدم سبباً موجزاً مدعوماً بتفصيل واقعي. حاول تقليل الترددات الصوتية («uh», «but») واستخدم تعابير دقيقة مثل 'I prefer face-to-face because...'.

例: It depends, but I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand emotions better.

提案: اجب بوضوح وبنبرة متزنة: اقبل وجود اختلاف الآراء وشرح سبب رد فعلك باقتضاب دون اعتراف سلبي مبالغ فيه («stubborn»). استخدم أمثلة قصيرة لشرح موقف واحد بدلاً من التعابير العامة.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends when our opinions differ. For example, I once had a long debate about politics because I felt strongly about my point of view, but we eventually agreed to respect each other’s opinions.

× Yes, so much because I consider myself an extravagant person for that reason.

✓ Yes, very much, because I consider myself an extravagant person.

The phrase 'so much' is informal and 'for that reason' is redundant. 'Very much' fits better. Also ensure pronoun use 'myself' is correct; simplify sentence for clarity.

× I like chatting with friends and hang out with friends.

✓ I like chatting with friends and hanging out with them.

When coordinating verbs with 'like', use the -ing form for both verbs: 'chatting' and 'hanging'. Also replace repeated 'friends' with 'them' to avoid repetition.

× It's not specifically need to be friends.

✓ They do not specifically need to be friends.

Original lacks correct subject and verb agreement. Use 'They do not need to be friends' or 'It does not specifically need to be friends' is awkward. 'They' refers to people being chatted with.

× I usually tend to uh, love knowing old people, young people, or even strangers, anything.

✓ I usually tend to like getting to know older people, younger people, or even strangers.

Use 'getting to know' instead of 'knowing', and 'older/younger' are more natural than 'old/young' in this context. 'Anything' is vague and unnecessary.

× I like deep conversation that is related to the community like daddy issues or anything related or why the percentage of the divorce increases between the spouses and everything like this because I really like to involve myself in a psychological LA topics.

✓ I like deep conversations related to the community, such as family issues or why the divorce rate is increasing between spouses, because I enjoy involving myself in psychological topics.

Pluralize 'conversation' to 'conversations'. Use 'such as' instead of 'like daddy issues'. 'Daddy issues' is informal and unclear. Use 'divorce rate is increasing' (correct noun phrase) and 'psychological topics' (remove 'LA'). Simplify and restructure the sentence for grammar and clarity.

× And since I'm a very extravagant person, I like to listen to different opinions and discuss them all.

✓ Since I'm a very outgoing person, I like to listen to different opinions and discuss them all.

'Extravagant' is incorrect in this context; 'outgoing' or 'sociable' fits better. Pronoun use is fine otherwise.

× Everyone, each of one of them.

✓ Everyone, each one of them.

Correct phrase is 'each one of them' rather than 'each of one of them'. Remove redundancy.

× For the reason I'd like to communicate with the a large or a massive group of people to get to know every opinion of each person.

✓ For that reason, I'd like to communicate with a large group of people to get to know everyone's opinion.

Remove incorrect 'the a'. Use 'a large group' not 'a massive group' (acceptable but 'large' is more natural). Use 'everyone's opinion' instead of 'every opinion of each person' for conciseness.

× Hmm, it depends. Usually there is not, uh, a difference between both of them but but I like to communicate be communicate face to face because I would love to see the expression of the person I'm talking to.

✓ Hmm, it depends. Usually there is not a difference between them, but I prefer to communicate face to face because I would love to see the expressions of the person I'm talking to.

Remove extra filler words and duplicate 'but'. 'There is not a difference between them' is correct; 'both of them' is redundant after 'them'. 'I prefer' is better than 'I like to communicate be communicate'. Use plural 'expressions' or 'the person's expression'.

× I really argue so many times with my friends, especially if uh, I didn't get along with their opinions because I'm a stubborn person and it's really hard to convince me in any type of topics.

✓ I have argued many times with my friends, especially when I do not agree with their opinions, because I'm a stubborn person and it's really hard to convince me on any topic.

Use present perfect 'have argued' for experience up to now. 'So many times' -> 'many times'. 'Didn't get along with their opinions' is incorrect; use 'do not agree with their opinions'. Use 'on any topic' not 'in any type of topics'.