Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. I prefer texting sometimes because it lets me think and express things carefully, and my friends can respond when they are free, which avoids awkward interruptions.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with a clear, specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish the thought completely.

例: We usually share short videos and memes on Instagram. For example, yesterday I sent a funny reel about student life that made my friend laugh and sparked a conversation about our exams.

提案: Be more polished and use polite phrasing. Give one clear preference with reasons and a brief example. Replace informal phrasings like "spit out" with more appropriate expressions.

例: It depends on the situation: I prefer one-on-one chats when I want to talk about personal matters because it's private, but I enjoy group chats for planning events or joking around with many friends.

提案: State your preference clearly and support it with a concise, coherent reason and a specific example. Avoid unclear expressions like "a little more conscious."

例: I prefer social media for casual conversations because it reduces awkwardness and lets you craft your words. For instance, I once messaged a friend to apologize, which was easier to express in writing than in person.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and vocabulary. Give a brief reason and a short example or consequence to support your answer.

例: I rarely argue with my friends because we usually talk things through calmly. For example, when we disagree about plans, we discuss the reasons and find a compromise instead of getting into a fight.

× I obviously like chatting with my friends because the thoughts you can't express on a phone call or directly.

✓ I obviously like chatting with my friends because there are thoughts you can't express on a phone call or in person.

The original sentence lacks a main verb for the clause 'the thoughts you can't express...' and omits the existential 'there are' needed for natural English; also 'directly' is better expressed as 'in person' here. Suggestion: include 'there are' to introduce the idea and use 'in person' for clarity.

× You can just text them and let them know that you feel certain way or that you think certain way.

✓ You can just text them and let them know that you feel a certain way or that you think a certain way.

The phrase 'certain way' requires an article 'a' when modified by 'a certain'; without it the noun phrase is incorrect. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'certain way' to form the correct noun phrase.

× It makes it easier for them to understand and text back.

✓ It makes it easier for them to understand and to text back.

The parallel structure is awkward: 'to understand and text back' mixes a verb with an omitted 'to'. Adding 'to' before 'text back' keeps parallel infinitives and improves clarity. Suggestion: use parallel infinitives: 'to understand and to text back.'

× Mostly I'd say we would share each other the reels which appear on Instagram, which we find relatable because reels have been a part of everyone's life today and sharing the reels and making the other person laugh makes it.

✓ Mostly I'd say we share reels with each other that appear on Instagram because we find them relatable; reels are a part of everyone's life today, and sharing them to make the other person laugh is enjoyable.

Multiple problems: 'share each other the reels' misuses pronouns and word order — use 'share reels with each other'; 'which' clauses are overused and unclear; 'makes it' is incomplete. Suggestion: reorder to 'share reels with each other', replace redundant 'which' clauses, and finish the thought with 'is enjoyable.'

× I actually prefer both, it just depends on the situation and on the person.

✓ I actually prefer both; it just depends on the situation and the person.

Comma splice connecting two independent clauses should be corrected (use semicolon or period). Also 'on the person' can be simplified to 'the person' for parallelism with 'the situation.' Suggestion: use a semicolon and make coordinated phrases parallel.

× While chatting with only one person you can just spit out everything you have on your mind without any problematic situations.

✓ When chatting with only one person, you can just say everything on your mind without any awkwardness.

'Spit out' is informal and 'problematic situations' is vague; 'without any awkwardness' is clearer. Also add comma after introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'When' for clarity and simpler phrasing.

× And in the group it varies.

✓ In a group, it varies.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary; article 'a' before 'group' and comma after introductory phrase improve grammar. Suggestion: combine with previous sentence or start 'In a group, it varies.'

× I would probably say it's social media because you can communicate your thoughts without any awkwardness or any other situations.

✓ I'd probably say social media, because you can communicate your thoughts without awkwardness or other complications.

'It's social media' is acceptable but wordy; 'any other situations' is vague — 'other complications' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify and replace vague noun with 'complications.'

× For example, when you are ready to confess something to a friend or another person, face to face might make it a little more conscious.

✓ For example, when you are ready to confess something to a friend or someone else, face-to-face might make you a little more self-conscious.

'Face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used adjectivally; 'make it a little more conscious' is ungrammatical — correct is 'make you a little more self-conscious.' Suggestion: use 'face-to-face' and 'self-conscious' with the correct pronoun 'you.'

× It obviously depends upon a person or a situation because without any point someone cannot argue with another one.

✓ It obviously depends on the person or the situation, because without a reason someone will not argue with another person.

'Depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural; 'without any point' is not idiomatic — use 'without a reason'; 'cannot argue with another one' is awkward — 'will not argue with another person' fits better. Suggestion: use idiomatic phrases: 'depends on,' 'without a reason,' 'another person.'

× In my case I don't think I argued with my friends and made them feel bad or any.

✓ In my case, I don't think I have argued with my friends and made them feel bad.

Tense and aspect: mixing 'don't think' (present) with simple past 'argued' is awkward; present perfect 'have argued' matches 'I don't think' to imply experience up to now. Also 'or any' is ungrammatical and should be omitted. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have argued' and remove 'or any.'