Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Control length to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. I like sharing what I did that day and talking about our feelings because it helps me relax and feel supported. For example, last week we chatted about a movie we all watched and it made me feel closer to them.

提案: Avoid hesitation and repetition; give a fuller, more specific answer. Use linking words to expand briefly on topic with an example or consequence.

例: Mostly we talk about other people's lives and relationship news. For instance, we recently discussed a friend’s new relationship and shared opinions about how they got together, which led to a longer conversation about relationships in general.

提案: Provide a clear reason and add one supporting detail. Reduce hesitations and finish the thought. Use linking words like because or since.

例: I prefer chatting in a group because it feels livelier and we can hear different opinions. For example, when we plan trips together, having several people involved makes decision-making faster and more fun.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity, avoid filler words, and give a specific example of why face-to-face is better. Use linking words such as because or so.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand people better. For example, during an important conversation about a friend’s problem, seeing their expression made me more empathetic and responsive.

提案: Give a direct yes/no topic sentence, then explain with one clear example. Use correct verb forms and reduce vague phrases. Link the idea with words like sometimes, because or however.

例: Sometimes I argue with friends, especially about career choices or relationship views, because we have different perspectives. For example, we once disagreed about whether to accept a risky job offer, and we discussed the pros and cons until we reached a better understanding.

× I would love to chatting with my friend, it's just fun to share what what I did or share feelings, opinion with my friends and it's very relaxing and pleasurable and comfortable time.

✓ I would love to chat with my friends; it's fun to share what I did, share feelings and opinions with them, and it's very relaxing and pleasurable.

The verb after 'would love to' should be in base form, not the -ing form (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also corrected plural agreement ('friends' and 'opinions') and removed redundancy. Suggestion: use 'would love to' + base verb, ensure nouns match plurality, and avoid repeated words. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Umm, we'll say it's, uh, mostly, uh, like a gossip. Gossip, chatting with, uh, about other people's, uh, things or rumors or. Relationship gossip.

✓ Umm, I'd say it's mostly gossip — chatting about other people's matters or rumors, especially relationship gossip.

Using 'a gossip' is incorrect; 'gossip' as an uncountable noun does not take 'a' in this context (Grammar Problem Type 14). Also rephrased for clarity and removed filler words. Suggestion: use 'gossip' without 'a' when referring to the activity. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× I prefer chatting in Group of people. I think it's more umm umm. Uh.

✓ I prefer chatting in groups of people. I think it's more enjoyable.

'Group of people' should be pluralized to 'groups of people' to match general preference (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also completed the sentence for clarity and replaced hesitations. Suggestion: pluralize general nouns when speaking about habitual preferences. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Definitely face to face because I want to see, uh, the facial expression or I feel a stronger connection to the people who I talk to when I, uh, did it, our own site conversation.

✓ Definitely face to face because I want to see facial expressions and I feel a stronger connection to the people I talk to in a face-to-face conversation.

The phrase 'did it' is incorrect past tense and unnecessary; 'talk to' should be present tense to match 'want' and habitual preference (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also corrected 'the facial expression' to plural 'facial expressions' and rephrased 'our own site conversation' to 'face-to-face conversation'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use the correct noun forms and idiomatic expressions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Umm, sometimes I went about the way of thinking about our career or our relationship, things that's, uh, controversial and it's perspective, perfect perspective could be depending on the people. So I would argue that much.

✓ Umm, sometimes we disagree about our career or relationship choices; those topics can be controversial and people's perspectives differ. So I don't argue that much.

The original uses 'went about' incorrectly and mixes tenses and pronouns; 'went about the way of thinking' is awkward and likely intended as 'we disagree' (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'Things that's' should be 'things that are' (subject-verb agreement and relative clause), and 'I would argue that much' is incorrect meaning; corrected to 'I don't argue that much' to match context. Suggestion: use simple present to describe habitual occurrences and choose clear verbs like 'disagree'. Grammar problem type ID: 5