Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, or), correct word order and phrases, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and natural collocations (e.g., “talking slowly” instead of “by slow talking”).

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me relieve stress. For example, when I talk with my close friends about my day, I feel calmer and we get to know each other better.

提案: Use correct grammar and be specific: begin with a direct topic sentence, use present continuous correctly (e.g., “I usually chat about what I am doing”), and give a clear example with a linking word. Avoid repetitive or unclear fragments.

例: I usually chat about what I am doing at the moment and recent events. For example, I might tell them I’m studying for an exam or ask about their plans for the weekend.

提案: Provide a clear preference sentence and explain why with one or two supporting reasons using linking words (because, so, however). Avoid unclear numbers and repetition. Use correct phrasing like “one-to-one” and complete your sentence.

例: I prefer talking one-to-one because I can express my feelings more easily and have deeper conversations. For example, when I speak with a single friend I feel less rushed and can explain my thoughts in detail.

提案: Answer clearly and expand with a specific reason using linking words. Reduce repetition and finish the thought (e.g., “understand their emotions”). Keep it to 2–3 natural sentences and use appropriate vocabulary like “face-to-face” or “in person.”

例: I prefer to communicate face-to-face because I can express my feelings more clearly and read their body language. For instance, in person I can notice facial expressions and tone, which helps me understand them better.

提案: Be concise and coherent: state your position directly, explain why with a clear reason, and avoid vague phrases like “avoid conflicts” without explanation. Also correct odd wording (“strengthen our agency” is unclear) — say “maintain good relationships” instead.

例: I rarely argue with friends because I prefer to avoid conflicts and keep our relationship strong. If disagreements arise, I try to discuss the issue calmly to find a solution and preserve our friendship.

× I usually chatting with my friends about what uh am I doing right now or the current situation.

✓ I usually chat with my friends about what I am doing right now or the current situation.

The verb 'chatting' is incorrect after the adverb 'usually'; the base form 'chat' should be used for simple present habitual actions. Also the clause 'what uh am I doing' uses question word order in a statement; it should be 'what I am doing.' Suggestion: use simple present 'usually chat' and statement word order 'what I am doing.'

× Yes, I really love chatting with friends because by slow talking to other people I can uh, sometimes relieve stress or uh. Knowing each other deeper and deeper or.

✓ Yes, I really love chatting with friends because by talking slowly to other people I can sometimes relieve stress and get to know each other more deeply.

The phrase 'by slow talking' uses incorrect word order and adjective form; use the adverb 'talking slowly.' 'Knowing each other deeper and deeper' mixes verb forms and awkward repetition; use 'get to know each other more deeply.' Also replace 'or uh.' with a coordinating conjunction 'and' for clarity. Suggestions: use adverbs after verb ('talking slowly'), avoid redundant repetition, and use parallel structure.

× I would say talk. I would say I like talking with people 121 because I can express feeling more when when I what I'm talking 1 by 1 to 1. I tend to.

✓ I would say I like talking with people one-on-one because I can express my feelings more when I talk to them individually.

This sentence has fragmented and unclear phrases: '121' seems to mean 'one-on-one'; 'express feeling' needs plural 'feelings'; 'when when I what I'm talking 1 by 1 to 1' is ungrammatical. Reconstruct using clear noun phrases and correct verb forms: 'talking with people one-on-one' and 'when I talk to them individually.' Also complete the sentence rather than leaving 'I tend to.' Suggestion: avoid filler numbers and ensure subject, verb, object are present.

× I like to communicate with people directly. Directly because I can express my feelings or I can understand understand their.

✓ I like to communicate with people directly because I can express my feelings and understand theirs.

The fragment 'Directly because...' incorrectly separates clauses; combine into one sentence. 'Understand their' lacks a noun; use possessive pronoun 'theirs.' Also remove duplicated 'understand.' Suggestion: use 'and' to connect coordinated verbs and use possessive pronoun after 'understand.'

× I rarely argue with friends because I don't like those kind of conflicts.

✓ I rarely argue with my friends because I don't like that kind of conflict.

'Those kind of conflicts' mixes plural demonstrative 'those' with singular 'kind'; use 'that kind of conflict' or 'those kinds of conflicts.' Also include possessive article 'my friends' to specify. Suggestion: match demonstrative and noun number and use appropriate article.

× I, well, I think, uh, a avoiding conflicts or something like that.

✓ Well, I think avoiding conflicts is important or something like that.

The phrase 'a avoiding' is incorrect; 'avoiding' can be a gerund but shouldn't be preceded by the article 'a.' Also the original lacks a clear main verb; add 'is' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: use gerund without 'a' and include a linking verb for clarity.

× It's so important to strengthen our agency.

✓ It's very important to strengthen our ability to act independently.

The original phrase 'strengthen our agency' is unusual in conversational English and may be unclear. 'Agency' is correct in formal contexts but here 'ability to act independently' or 'sense of agency' is clearer. Suggestion: choose vocabulary that fits spoken register and clarify meaning.