Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically natural and concise. Use present simple for habits, avoid filler words and unnecessary tense errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. Usually we catch up about our work and share funny memes online, which makes our conversations light and entertaining.

提案: Improve cohesion and clarity by using linking words and correct noun forms. Avoid vague phrases like "different subject matters"; be specific and keep sentences compact.

例: It depends on the friend: with my sports teammates I talk about upcoming matches and training plans, while with colleagues I discuss projects and work-related issues.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and then explain briefly. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Use linking words to contrast group vs one-to-one and provide a brief reason for your preference or neutrality.

例: I don't have a strong preference. Sometimes I enjoy group chats because they're lively, but I also like one-to-one conversations when I want a deeper, more personal talk.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and correct awkward phrasing. Start with a direct preference and then give specific reasons. Replace fillers and unclear terms like "RE situation" with precise language.

例: For casual conversations I prefer social media because it's convenient, but for important or sensitive matters I prefer face-to-face meetings, since that reduces the chance of miscommunication.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Define what you mean by "argue" and give a specific example of a constructive disagreement. Use linking words to show purpose or result.

例: Yes, we often have arguments, but they are constructive discussions rather than fights; for example, we give each other feedback on projects so everyone can improve.

× Yes, I really enjoyed chatting with friends. I wish I do most of the time.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy chatting with friends. I do it most of the time.

The student mixed past tense 'enjoyed' with present habits. The question asks about a general preference, so present simple is appropriate. 'I wish I do most of the time' is incorrect: 'wish' requires a different structure and doesn't fit here. Use 'I do it most of the time' to express habitual action.

× Uh, we will just update our work and share some memes online which makes it fun.

✓ We usually update our work and share some memes online, which makes it fun.

Using 'will' implies a future action but the student describes a habitual activity. Use simple present 'update' and 'share' for routines. Also change 'which makes it fun' to refer clearly to the habitual action.

× I do check on different subject matters with different friends, for example my sport partner friends we chat about playing games or next events of game and with my colleagues I will chat about work related stuff.

✓ I check different subject matters with different friends. For example, with my sports partners we chat about playing games or upcoming events, and with my colleagues I chat about work-related stuff.

The original uses unnecessary 'do' and inconsistent tenses. For habits use simple present 'check' and 'chat'. 'Sport partner friends' is awkward; 'sports partners' is natural. 'Next events of game' should be 'upcoming events'. 'Work related' needs a hyphen in compound adjective: 'work-related'.

× Yeah, there is not much of A preference on this.

✓ There is not much of a preference for this.

Capitalizing 'A' is wrong; article placement needs adjustment. 'Preference on this' is less natural than 'preference for this'. Keep 'a' lowercase.

× We have a lot of online group and yeah, sometimes I only chat with few friends too.

✓ We have a lot of online groups, and sometimes I only chat with a few friends too.

'Group' should be plural 'groups' to match 'a lot of'. 'Few' needs the article 'a few' when intended positively. Add comma for clarity.

× Yeah, unless it's no it's just general talk. I prefer social media but if it is about some RE situation or a real explain as needed then I prefer face to face.

✓ Generally I prefer social media for casual talk, but if it is about a real situation or requires a detailed explanation, I prefer face-to-face communication.

The original is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'RE situation' and 'a real explain'. Rephrase to 'real situation' and 'requires a detailed explanation'. Use hyphens in 'face-to-face' and restructure sentence for clarity.

× Talking face to face with friends is more effective than online 'cause we might get some miscommunication.

✓ Talking face-to-face with friends is more effective than online communication because we might have miscommunication online.

Avoid informal ''cause' in formal responses; use 'because'. Make the comparison explicit: 'more effective than online communication'. Use 'have miscommunication' or 'experience miscommunication'.

× Uh, yes, most of the time, and not in a bad way, but in a good terms like we, we argue or we discuss on certain topics.

✓ Yes, most of the time, and not in a bad way but in positive terms; we argue or discuss certain topics.

Use 'in positive terms' instead of 'in a good terms' (singular/plural mismatch and article error). Remove unnecessary filler 'we, we'. Do not use 'discuss on'; the correct collocation is 'discuss certain topics'.

× Uh, most of the time where we, we, we know, we give, uh, constructive criticism to each other that way will help each other.

✓ Most of the time we give each other constructive criticism, which helps us improve.

Remove filler words and repetitive 'we'. Use 'give each other' (reciprocal) and 'which helps us improve' to show result. The original had a wrong clause 'that way will help each other' lacking subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.