Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid redundancy and fix tense/number errors (e.g., 'it makes me relaxed' -> 'it helps me relax').

例: Yes — I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me relax and catch up on each other's news. For example, we often share updates about work or funny personal stories, which always lightens my mood.

提案: Give a focused, coherent response: state the main topics you discuss, then add a specific example. Use linking words (for example, for instance) and complete sentences. Avoid unclear fragments and pronoun confusion.

例: We usually talk about our relationships and travel experiences. For instance, when I went on a trip without internet, my friend and I spent hours discussing past relationships and memorable moments, which kept us entertained.

提案: Answer directly and explain reasons with clear linking phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer talking with one friend because I know what she likes') and finish your sentence. Mention feelings concisely.

例: I prefer talking with one close friend because we understand each other's tastes and can have deeper conversations. In contrast, talking to strangers makes me a bit anxious, so I feel more comfortable in one-on-one chats.

提案: Give a clear preference and two concise reasons using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I can see their facial expressions').

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can see the other person's facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand them better. Also, face-to-face talks feel more personal than messages on social media.

提案: Be concise: state frequency and typical reasons with a simple example. Avoid informal or unclear phrases ('freak it out') and finish thoughts. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'usually'.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends, usually about small decisions like what to eat for lunch. For example, during breaks we often disagree on restaurants, so we discuss options until most people agree.

× Yes I definitely love chatting with my friends because it make me relax really much and like we can update any news to each other it's more right I gossip I know but is is the funniest thing we can do even we don't.

✓ Yes, I definitely love chatting with my friends because it makes me relax a lot and we can update each other on news. I know I gossip, but it's the funniest thing we can do even if we do not always see each other.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes' because singular subject 'it' requires the third-person singular verb form. Word choice and grammar: 'really much' is unnatural; use 'a lot'. Preposition and word order: 'update any news to each other' should be 'update each other on news'. Punctuation and run-on sentences: original is multiple clauses run together; separate into clearer sentences. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with their subjects, use natural adverb phrases ('a lot'), use correct prepositions ('update each other on'), and break long thoughts into shorter sentences.

× The most interesting thing she had about with your friend is another story of love story of other peoples.

✓ The most interesting thing my friends talk about is other people's love stories.

Pronoun and possessive errors: 'she had about with your friend' is unclear and incorrect. Use appropriate possessive 'my friends' or 'your friend' consistently. Redundancy: 'another story of love story' repeats 'story'. Plural and possessive: 'other peoples' should be 'other people's'. Suggestion: Use clear subjects ('my friends'), remove redundant words, and use correct possessive forms.

× You can definitely tell me about that.

✓ You can definitely tell me about that.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as-is. No correction needed. Note: Keep polite modal 'can' for ability/permission.

× Like someone harm.

✓ For example, someone getting hurt.

Fragment and noun/verb form errors: 'Like someone harm' is a fragment and uses incorrect verb form. Use a full phrase such as 'for example, someone getting hurt' or 'for example, someone who was harmed'. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; provide a subject and proper verb form.

× I go travel with my friend and there was no Internet there and I just keep talking about 1.

✓ I went travelling with my friend and there was no Internet there, so we just kept talking about things.

Past tense needed: The activity is described in the past, so use past forms 'went' and 'kept' rather than 'go' and 'keep'. Word form: 'travel' as a verb in past continuous becomes 'went travelling' (or 'traveled'). 'Talking about 1' is unclear; replace with 'talking about things'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame, and use clear nouns instead of placeholders.

× I would prefer talking with my one friend because I know what she like, I know she know what I like and we can like know how to please each other with our talking.

✓ I would prefer talking with one friend because I know what she likes, she knows what I like, and we know how to please each other when we talk.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun clarity: 'she like' and 'she know' need third-person singular 'likes' and 'knows'. 'My one friend' is awkward; use 'one friend' or 'my friend'. Redundant filler 'like' should be removed. Word choice: 'with our talking' is awkward; use 'when we talk'. Suggestion: Use correct third-person verb endings and clearer, concise phrasing.

× Talking to another strangers made me kind of anxiety and I.

✓ Talking to strangers makes me feel kind of anxious.

Tense and number: Use present tense 'makes' to express a general truth. 'Another strangers' mixes singular and plural; use 'strangers'. Word class: 'anxiety' (noun) should be 'anxious' (adjective) after 'feel'. Remove fragment 'and I.' Suggestion: Use correct noun/adj forms and consistent number, and complete the sentence.

× I would rather communicate face to face because I can see the other side's interaction, like how they, uh, have facial expression communicate, uh, through the cell phone, for example.

✓ I would rather communicate face to face because I can see the other person's reactions, such as their facial expressions, which you cannot fully see through a cell phone.

Pronoun and possessive: 'other side's interaction' is awkward; use 'other person's reactions'. Agreement: 'they... have facial expression' should be 'their facial expressions'. Clarity: 'communicate through the cell phone' is wordy and misplaced; clarify that facial expressions are harder to see on phone. Suggestion: Use singular or plural consistently, choose precise nouns ('reactions', 'facial expressions') and structure the comparison clearly.

× Make me don't know what that look like.

✓ It makes me not know what they look like.

Grammar and word order: 'Make me don't know' is ungrammatical. Use 'It makes me not know' or better 'I don't know what they look like'. Subject-verb agreement: 'that look like' should match plural/neutral 'they look like'. Suggestion: Use natural English patterns: 'I don't know what they look like' or 'It makes me unsure what someone looks like.'

× I sometimes argue with my friends about what we need to eat or during the lunch break.

✓ I sometimes argue with my friends about what we should eat, especially during lunch break.

Modal verb and phrasing: 'need to eat' is acceptable but 'should eat' sounds more natural for choices. 'During the lunch break' can be simplified to 'during lunch break' or 'at lunchtime'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'at lunchtime' or 'during lunch break' and choose modals that fit intention ('should').

× It is quite a really important thing that we can say in one day because everybody don't know what to eat and I still need to freak it out.

✓ It is actually an important decision we make each day because everyone does not know what to eat and I still need to figure it out.

Word choice and grammar: 'a really important thing' can be 'actually an important decision'. Subject-verb agreement: 'everybody don't' should be 'everybody does not' or 'everyone doesn't'. 'Freak it out' is informal and incorrect; likely intended 'figure it out'. Suggestion: Use correct idioms ('figure it out'), proper subject-verb agreement, and clearer nouns ('decision').

× What do the majority of.

✓ What does the majority want?

Incomplete sentence/verb missing: 'What do the majority of.' is incomplete. Use full question form: 'What does the majority want?' or 'What do the majority of people want?' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'majority' as a collective noun takes singular verb 'does' or rephrase with 'people'. Suggestion: Complete the clause by including the object ('people') or adjust verb to match collective noun.