Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise, correct grammar, and expand slightly with a linking phrase and a specific detail. Avoid redundancy. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have a few hobbies, including painting, drawing and cooking. They help me relax after a busy day, and I especially enjoy experimenting with new recipes at the weekend. For instance, last week I tried making a Thai curry, which was both fun and rewarding.

提案: Answer directly in one clear sentence, fix tense and vocabulary (probably meant 'blocks' or 'toys'), and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I enjoyed playing with building blocks and riding my bicycle around the neighborhood, and I often spent hours building towers with my friends.

提案: Correct grammar (verb forms and articles), use one or two coherent sentences, and give a specific example of how you continue the hobby now. Use a linking word such as 'so' or 'therefore'.

例: Yes, drawing has been my favorite hobby since childhood. Therefore, I still draw in my free time—recently I have been sketching portraits and practicing shading techniques to improve my skills.

提案: Speak more confidently and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and articles). Provide a clear contrast with a linking word and a specific example of a family member's hobby.

例: No, not really. My family members have different interests, so I’m the only one who enjoys artistic hobbies. For example, my brother prefers video games and my parents enjoy gardening.

× Yes, I have few hobbies like painting, drawing as well as cooking.

✓ Yes, I have a few hobbies like painting, drawing, and cooking.

The phrase 'few hobbies' without an article implies 'not many' and may be unintended. Use 'a few' to indicate some hobbies. Also add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a few' for countable plural nouns when meaning 'some'.

× These activities provide me some relaxation and change my mood.

✓ These activities provide me with some relaxation and change my mood.

The verb 'provide' usually takes the preposition 'with' when indicating what is provided. Use 'provide me with' rather than 'provide me'. Also 'some relaxation' is correct as a quantifier. Suggestion: use 'provide someone with something'.

× Yes, when I was a child. I have hobbies like playing with blogs, riding a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had hobbies like playing with blocks and riding a bike.

The sentence should use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Have' is present tense and inconsistent. Also 'blogs' seems to be a typo for 'blocks'. Use past tense for past time references and correct lexical choice. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past events and check word choice.

× Yes, I have. When I was a child, my favorite hobbies was drawing.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a child, my favorite hobby was drawing.

'Hobby' should be singular because it refers to one favorite activity; therefore use 'hobby' not 'hobbies'. The past tense 'was' is correct. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with description (one favorite = singular).

× Therefore, nowadays I also prefer drawing in my free time and that was my that is my hobby is continue continuing from.

✓ Therefore, nowadays I also prefer drawing in my free time; that hobby has continued since childhood.

Original sentence has multiple tense and structure errors. Use present preference 'prefer drawing' and present perfect 'has continued' to show an action that began in the past and continues now. Remove redundant fragments. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions that started in the past and continue to present and keep sentence concise.

× MMM actually no, my siblings and parents have different interest.

✓ Actually, no. My siblings and parents have different interests.

'Interest' should be plural 'interests' because it refers to multiple people having different interests. Also remove filler 'MMM' and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to more than one person.

× I'm I'm on the only one who interest in such kind of hobbies whereas my brother like games such as car and many more.

✓ I'm the only one who is interested in these kinds of hobbies, whereas my brother likes games such as car racing and many others.

Multiple pronoun and verb form issues: 'on the only one' should be 'the only one'; 'interest' should be 'is interested' (adjective plus verb) or 'interests' depending on structure; 'such kind of hobbies' should be 'these kinds of hobbies' or 'such hobbies'; 'my brother like' needs third-person singular 'likes'. Also 'car' likely needs 'car racing' or 'car games'. Suggestion: ensure correct articles ('the'), subject-verb agreement, adjective form ('interested'), and appropriate noun phrases.