Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and organize supporting details with linking words. Be specific about what you read and why. Limit to up to 5 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I have a few hobbies, and reading is my main one. I enjoy comics because they are entertaining, history books because they teach me about the past, and humorous novels because they help me relax. In my free time I usually read for about 30–45 minutes every evening. This habit helps me improve my vocabulary and unwind after a busy day.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and provide concise supporting details with linking words. Mention specific ages, frequency, and who taught you to make it concrete.

例: Yes, when I was a child I wanted to be a swimmer, and my uncle taught me how to improve. I used to practise in our village pond almost every day for about an hour. Because I practised regularly, my confidence and technique improved quickly.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence using present perfect or present tense to show continuity, and give specific details (duration, frequency, benefits). Avoid hesitations and repetition; keep answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I have continued swimming since childhood and still swim regularly. Nowadays I swim for about 10–20 minutes most days in a nearby pool. Swimming keeps me fit and is a relaxing way to start the day.

提案: Answer directly then give a brief contrast with a linking phrase. Use correct possessives and verb forms, and provide one specific example of a family member's hobby to illustrate difference.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family members'. For example, I like swimming, whereas my father enjoys cooking in his free time. We respect each other's interests and sometimes share skills, such as him teaching me a few recipes.

× I have a hobbies.

✓ I have a hobby.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural but the verb phrase 'I have a' requires a singular noun. Use 'a hobby' for one item or 'hobbies' without 'a' for multiple items. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and match article accordingly.

× These are reading books.

✓ My hobbies are reading books.

The sentence lacks a clear subject and verb linking the phrase. Adding 'My hobbies are' makes the sentence complete and indicates that reading books is a hobby. Also 'reading books' is a gerund phrase describing the hobby.

× Those books are comics, history, funny books.

✓ Those books are comics, history books, and funny books.

List items need parallel structure and clarity. 'History' should be 'history books' to match the pattern 'comics' and 'funny books'. Use commas and 'and' before the last item.

× I like doing my free time.

✓ I like what I do in my free time.

The original phrase uses 'doing' incorrectly with 'my free time'. Change to 'what I do in my free time' or 'I like to read in my free time' to use the preposition 'in' correctly.

× I like to read these books.

✓ I like to read these books.

This sentence is already correct. 'Like to read' is an acceptable infinitive construction. No change needed.

× in my childhood, I want to be a swimmer at this moment my uncle learn how I can improve my swimming.

✓ In my childhood, I wanted to be a swimmer; at that time my uncle taught me how I could improve my swimming.

The context is past, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'want' -> 'wanted', 'learn' -> 'taught', and modal 'can' -> past form 'could'. Also split into two clauses with punctuation for clarity.

× Then in our pond I in every day I almost one hours practice.

✓ Then, in our pond, I practiced almost one hour every day.

The original has word order and quantity errors. Place time expressions at end or beginning appropriately: 'practiced almost one hour every day' or 'practiced for almost one hour every day'. Use past tense 'practiced' to match past context and 'one hour' singular.

× I like to swimming every day in childhood to adulthood, uh, every day I almost 10 minutes or 20 minutes swim in our pond.

✓ I liked swimming every day from childhood to adulthood; usually I swam for about 10 to 20 minutes in our pond each day.

The timeframe 'from childhood to adulthood' refers to past habitual action, so use past tense 'liked' and 'swam'. 'Like to swimming' is incorrect: use 'liked swimming' or 'liked to swim'. Also express duration with 'for' and a more natural range 'about 10 to 20 minutes'.

× I like to swimming.

✓ I like swimming.

After 'like' you can use either the gerund 'swimming' or the infinitive 'to swim'. 'To swimming' is ungrammatical. Use 'I like swimming' or 'I like to swim'.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question is correct and needs no change. The article usage is appropriate.

× Actually, no. Different people, their different hobbies.

✓ Actually, no. Different people have different hobbies.

The original uses 'their different hobbies' without a verb. Use 'have' to link subject and object: 'Different people have different hobbies.' Also 'their' is redundant when 'different people' is subject.

× Example, I like to swimming.

✓ For example, I like swimming.

As above, 'to swimming' is incorrect. Use 'like swimming' or 'like to swim'. Also add 'For' to make the introductory phrase natural.

× My father's, uh, in his free time, he loves cooking.

✓ My father, in his free time, loves cooking.

Use 'My father' not 'My father's'. The clause is fine otherwise; 'he loves' can be reduced to 'loves' after the subject for conciseness.

× Different people, they loves doing different kinds of work.

✓ Different people love doing different kinds of work.

Subject-verb agreement: 'people' is plural, so use 'love' not 'loves'. Avoid redundant pronoun 'they' after 'Different people'.