Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating similar adjectives (e.g., relaxed and comfortable).

例: I enjoy dancing with friends and reading novels in my free time. For example, I take a weekly salsa class with friends, which helps me stay fit, and I usually read historical novels in the evenings because they help me relax after a busy day.

提案: Use full words and provide a little more specific detail to make the answer sound natural. Keep it direct, then add one specific example and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoyed outdoor activities as a child. For instance, I often played football with my brother in the neighborhood and, on weekends, my friends and I would go to the park to ride bikes.

提案: Correct grammar and fluency issues (article use and verb forms). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and use a linking word to explain why it continued.

例: Yes, I have read regularly since childhood. Because my father bought me many books when I was young, I developed a habit of reading; for example, I still own a small collection of children's novels that I reread for comfort.

提案: Make the sentence more natural and provide one clear example of a shared hobby. Use a linking word to connect the idea of shared interests and how they influenced you.

例: Yes, I shared several hobbies with my family when I was young. For example, I often copied my brother by drawing pictures together after school, which encouraged me to practice art regularly.

× Yes, if I have some free time, I'd like to practice dancing with my friends and I like to read books, especially novels. Dancing and reading novels makes me feel relaxed and feel comfortable.

✓ Yes, if I have some free time, I'd like to practice dancing with my friends and I like to read books, especially novels. Dancing and reading novels make me feel relaxed and comfortable.

The subject 'Dancing and reading novels' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Use plural verb to agree with a compound subject. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree by identifying whether the subject is singular or plural and choosing the correct verb form.

× When I was a child, I was more of an outdoor person, so I liked to play outside with my brother or with my fam. With my friends, I used to go to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I was more of an outdoor person, so I liked to play outside with my brother or with my family. With my friends, I used to go to the park.

This sentence uses appropriate past tense forms ('was', 'liked', 'used to'). The main issue is informal abbreviation 'fam'. Replace with 'family' for correct and clear usage. Suggestion: Avoid slang or abbreviations in formal speech; use full words like 'family'.

× Yes, reading a books is a kind of hobby. From my childhood my father always bought me lots of books that I have was interested in. So there are lots of books in my house.

✓ Yes, reading books is a kind of hobby. From my childhood my father always bought me lots of books that I was interested in. So there are lots of books in my house.

Multiple article and verb errors: 'a books' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' to correct to 'reading books'. 'I have was interested in' incorrectly combines present perfect and past; use simple past 'I was interested in' to match 'From my childhood' (past period). Suggestion: Match articles to noun number (a/an for singular countable nouns); keep tense consistent—use past when describing habitual past actions.

× Yes, when I was a child I always followed my brother's hobby like reading books, studying and drawing pictures.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always followed my brother's hobbies like reading books, studying, and drawing pictures.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because multiple activities are listed. Also add commas in a list for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural form when referring to multiple activities and separate list items with commas.