Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변은 자연스럽고 관련 세부사항을 포함하고 있으나 다소 중복과 문법 실수가 보입니다. 문장을 3~4문장으로 간결히 구성하고, linking words(예: also, such as, which helps)를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하세요. 또한 'paint some paintings'처럼 중복되는 표현을 피하고 적절한 단어(예: paint, draw)로 대체하세요. 발음과 문장 구조를 더 정확히 하기 위해 현재완료나 시제 일치에도 신경 쓰세요.

例: Yes, I have several art-related hobbies. For example, I often go out to take street photographs to document my day, and I also use my iPad to paint when I want to relax. These activities help me unwind and stay creative.

提案: 시제 일치와 문법을 개선해야 합니다. 'love'와 'since I was a child'를 사용할 때는 과거 또는 현재완료 시제를 사용하세요. 문장을 두 부분으로 나누어 주제문과 구체적 예시를 분명히 하고, 'note and pencil' 대신 'notebook and pencils' 같은 정확한 어휘를 사용하세요.

例: Yes, I loved drawing when I was a child, and I always carried a notebook and pencils in my bag. That way, I could sketch anything that caught my eye wherever I was.

提案: 답변이 반복적이고 어휘 선택이 부자연스럽습니다('new kind of florist'는 의미가 모호함). 같은 내용을 반복하기보다 한두 문장으로 요약하고, 구체적인 예시(어떤 장면을 찍는지, 어떤 기분인지)를 덧붙이세요. 또한 시제와 관사 사용을 확인하세요.

例: Yes, photography has been my hobby since childhood. I enjoy taking candid shots of everyday scenes, and recently I've been photographing different flower shops I discover around the city because I like their colors and arrangements.

提案: 문법과 어순을 다듬고 반복을 줄이세요. 'have same hobby with' 대신 'share the same hobby as'를 사용하고, 연결어를 넣어 이유나 빈도 등을 설명하면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다. 예: 언제 산책하는지, 함께 하는 활동 등이 있을 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I share the same hobby with my parents. We often go for a walk together after meals, which is a nice way for us to relax and talk about our day.

× Yes, I love to paint or draw since I was a child so I always had note and pencil in my bag so that I can draw anywhere I want.

✓ Yes, I have loved to paint and draw since I was a child, so I always had a notebook and a pencil in my bag so that I could draw anywhere I wanted.

The sentence mixes present simple 'love' with 'since I was a child', which requires present perfect ('have loved') to show an action continuing from the past to the present. Also 'note' should be 'notebook' (count noun) and 'can/want' should match past narrative 'had' so use 'could' and 'wanted'. Use 'and' instead of 'or' to indicate both activities. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions starting in the past and continuing now, use correct countable noun forms, and keep tense consistency.'

× Yes, I have a hobby that I've had since my childhood. I love to take photos in my daily life since I was a child. So I love to take photos of the new kind of florist that I have explored.

✓ Yes, I have had this hobby since my childhood. I have loved taking photos of my daily life since I was a child. I especially enjoy photographing new kinds of flowers and florists that I discover.

Use present perfect 'have had' to express a hobby continuing from childhood. 'Love to take photos ... since I was a child' should be present perfect continuous/ perfect: 'have loved taking photos since I was a child'. 'New kind of florist' is awkward; likely meant 'new kinds of flowers' or 'new florists'; clarified to 'new kinds of flowers and florists' and used 'discover' instead of 'have explored'. Also use gerund 'taking/photographing' after 'love'. Keep tense consistent.'

× Yes, I have same hobby with my mom and dad. My mom and dad always love to walk, take a walk after they have a meal and so was I.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my mom and dad. My parents always like to take a walk after a meal, and so do I.

Use the set phrase 'have the same hobby as' (not 'with'). 'Mom and dad' can be replaced by 'my parents' for concision. 'Love to walk, take a walk' is repetitive; use 'like to take a walk'. 'After they have a meal' is wordy; 'after a meal' is natural. 'So was I' is incorrect in this context; use the auxiliary 'do' in 'so do I' to agree with present tense. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct idiomatic expressions.'

× For example, I love to go out on the street and take some photos to record my day or just use my iPad to paint some paintings to get relaxed.

✓ For example, I love going out onto the street to take photos to record my day, or I use my iPad to paint pictures to relax.

After 'love', the gerund form 'going' is natural though 'love to go' is also acceptable; using gerunds makes the sentence smoother. 'On the street' -> 'onto the street' or simply 'out' is more natural. 'Take some photos' -> 'take photos' (omit 'some'). 'Paint some paintings' is redundant; use 'paint pictures' or simply 'paint'. 'To get relaxed' is unidiomatic; use 'to relax' or 'to feel relaxed'. Prefer gerunds for activities and simplify redundant phrases.'