Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and small grammatical errors (e.g., "I'm having hobbies" → "I have a few hobbies"). Mention specific book genres or painting subjects and explain briefly why they interest you.

例: I have a few hobbies, mainly reading and painting. For example, I enjoy reading novels and biographies because they give me new perspectives, and I like painting landscapes because it helps me relax and express my creativity.

提案: Give a direct answer, use smoother linking words, and correct small mistakes. Replace fillers like "yes, yes, of course" with a single clear phrase. Use specific examples and a reason in one or two sentences, and fix vocabulary errors ("peas" → "peace").

例: Yes. As a child I enjoyed reading novels and biographies and painting nature scenes. For instance, I often painted forests and gardens because working with natural subjects relaxed me and encouraged my creativity.

提案: Answer directly and avoid tense confusion. Use present perfect or simple present to show continuity (e.g., "I've had... since childhood" or "I have liked... since childhood"). Reduce repetition and give one specific supporting detail and a reason.

例: I've had two hobbies since childhood: reading and painting. I still read biographies and novels, and I mostly paint landscapes because they help me relax and improve my observation skills.

提案: Be concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two or three specific examples using linking words like "for example" or "for instance." Correct small phrasing problems ("are having" → "have"). You can add a brief comparison to show contrast with your hobbies.

例: No, we have different interests. For example, my mother enjoys cooking and my father collects traditional coins and utensils, while my brother likes playing video games. In contrast, I prefer reading and painting, which are more creative pursuits.

× Yes, I'm having hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies.

'Have' as a stative verb is normally used in the simple present to indicate possession or states. Using the present continuous 'I'm having' is unnatural here. Use 'I have' to express a permanent or regular state.

× I love to read books, love to paint as well.

✓ I love to read books and paint as well.

The sentence needs a coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two verbs. Also avoid repeating 'love' for conciseness. This fixes sentence structure and flow.

× Since childhood and even nowadays I love to read books.

✓ Since childhood and even now I have loved reading books.

When an action started in the past and continues to the present, the present perfect ('have loved') or present perfect continuous is appropriate. 'Since childhood' requires perfect tense to show continuation. Also 'nowadays' is better replaced with 'now' in this structure.

× That's all for my hobbies because they provide me relaxation, peace and then creative thinking.

✓ That's all for my hobbies because they provide me with relaxation, peace, and creativity.

Use 'provide me with' for correct verb-preposition combination. 'Creative thinking' can be replaced by the noun 'creativity' to match parallel structure. Remove 'then' as unnecessary.

× That's why I like that.

✓ That's why I like them.

'That' is vague and singular; refer to plural 'hobbies' with 'them'. This corrects pronoun agreement.

× I used to have a hobby of painting and then reading books, mainly the novels and biographies.

✓ I used to have hobbies of painting and reading books, mainly novels and biographies.

When listing multiple hobbies, use the plural 'hobbies' and parallel gerund forms 'painting and reading'. Remove 'the' before 'novels and biographies' as it is unnecessary.

× I for the painting I usually love to paint the nature things, for example the forest, the garden.

✓ For painting, I usually like to paint natural scenes, for example forests and gardens.

The original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use 'For painting' to introduce the topic, 'like to paint' is more natural than 'love to paint' repeated, 'natural scenes' is better than 'nature things', and pluralize examples ('forests and gardens').

× It gives me relaxation, peas and the chance of creativity.

✓ It gives me relaxation, peace, and a chance to be creative.

'Peas' is a misspelling of 'peace'. Use 'a chance to be creative' for natural English instead of 'the chance of creativity'. Ensure commas for list clarity.

× Yes I had a hobby of reading and painting since childhood even till now as well.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby of reading and painting since childhood and still do.

When an action began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'have had' and add 'still do' to clearly indicate continuation. Add commas for natural pauses.

× I'm reading the books of biographies and novels and then painting as well the paint.

✓ I read biographies and novels, and I also paint.

'I'm reading the books of biographies' is awkward; use simple present 'I read' or 'I enjoy reading' for habitual actions. Remove redundant 'the' and 'the paint'. Use parallel structure: 'I also paint.'

× Most of the time I'm I used to paint and then even now as well for landscapes, gardens.

✓ Most of the time I used to paint landscapes and gardens, and I still do now.

Mixing 'I'm' and 'I used to' is incorrect. Use 'I used to' for past habit and 'I still do' to indicate continuation. Make the objects plural and concise: 'paint landscapes and gardens.'

× Not at all. All of my family members are having different hobbies.

✓ Not at all. All of my family members have different hobbies.

Use simple present 'have' with stative possession instead of present continuous 'are having'. This is the normal way to describe regular facts.

× For example, my mother loves to cook, that's her hobby.

✓ For example, my mother loves to cook; that's her hobby.

Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid a comma splice. The original creates a run-on with a comma joining two independent clauses.

× And then my father loves to collect the traditional coins or traditional utensils that are having really high value in this market.

✓ My father loves to collect traditional coins and utensils that have high value in the market.

Remove 'the' before general plural nouns, use 'collect traditional coins and utensils' (parallel), and replace 'are having really high value' with 'have high value' for correct verb use and concision.

× And then my brother, he loves to play games.

✓ My brother loves to play games.

Avoid the redundant subject 'my brother, he' — use one subject. Simple present 'loves to play games' is correct for habitual actions.