Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases (e.g. unclear reference to 'John' or '2000'). Use correct verb forms and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy dancing Latin dances such as salsa and bachata, which I find energetic and fun. When I lived in Japan, I often went to social dance nights to practice, and that experience inspired me to keep dancing now.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details in correct tense and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas, and avoid repetition. Mention one concrete example and describe how it made you feel or why it mattered.

例: Yes. As a child I loved baking sweets with my mother, especially cookies. I would help measure ingredients and mix the dough, and we always enjoyed eating the warm cookies together, which remains one of my favorite childhood memories.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and follow with a specific timeline and details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g. 'it became' instead of 'I it became'). Mention how often you practice the hobby now to show continuity.

例: Yes. I have continued baking sweets since childhood because my mother and I used to cook together. Now I bake occasionally on weekends to try new recipes and remember those family moments.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g. 'also', 'so') and correct verb patterns (e.g. 'used to enjoy making'). Provide a brief contrast or detail about how you share the hobby now to make the response more informative.

例: Yes. My mother and I both enjoy baking sweets, such as cookies and cakes. We still bake together sometimes, and sharing recipes is a nice way for us to spend time together.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I do.

The question 'Do you have any hobbies?' requires a short answer using the auxiliary do/does in present simple. 'Yes, I have.' is incomplete and unnatural here; use 'Yes, I do.' to agree with the question.

× My hobby is dancing Latin dance, for example, salsa or bachata are one of my favorite dances.

✓ My hobby is dancing Latin dances; for example, salsa and bachata are two of my favorite dances.

There is awkward word order and number agreement. 'dancing Latin dance' is redundant; 'Latin dances' is correct. 'salsa or bachata are one of my favorite dances' mixes singular 'one' with plural subject. Use 'and' and plural 'two of my favorite dances' or 'some of my favorite dances.'

× John and I when I was in Japan I often went 2000 and now it's a good reason to.

✓ When I was in Japan, John and I often went out to dance, and now it's a good reason to continue.

This sentence has multiple structural problems: misplaced time clause, missing verbs, and unclear phrase 'went 2000.' Reordering the time clause to the front, specifying the verb 'went out to dance,' and completing the idea with 'continue' makes it grammatical and clear.

× When I was a child, cooking some sweets are one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ When I was a child, cooking sweets was one of my favorite hobbies.

The time clause 'When I was a child' sets past tense, so the verb should be past 'was' not present 'are.' Also 'cooking some sweets' is better phrased as 'cooking sweets.'

× My when my mom makes made some cookies, I helped her to make cookies and after that we enjoy eating it.

✓ When my mom made cookies, I helped her bake them, and afterward we enjoyed eating them.

Mixed tenses and redundancy: use past tense 'made' to match 'when I was a child'; 'helped her bake them' is more natural than 'helped her to make cookies'; 'enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed'; plural pronoun 'them' matches 'cookies.'

× It's one of my favorite memories with my.

✓ It's one of my favorite memories with my mother.

The sentence is incomplete; the object after 'with my' is missing. Add 'mother' to complete the prepositional phrase.

× Yes, now I enjoy baking some sweets when I have time.

✓ Yes, now I enjoy baking sweets when I have time.

This sentence is mostly correct but 'some' is unnecessary; removing it makes the sentence more natural. Present simple 'enjoy' fits current habit.

× Since I was a child my mom and I used to cook sweets together.

✓ Since I was a child, my mom and I have cooked sweets together.

The phrase 'Since I was a child' indicates an action from past to present; use present perfect 'have cooked' rather than 'used to' to show continuation. A comma after the time clause improves clarity.

× Since then I it became my hobby as well.

✓ Since then, it became my hobby as well.

There is an extra pronoun 'I' causing ungrammatical structure. Removing 'I' fixes the sentence. Note: if meaning continued to present, better: 'Since then, it has become my hobby as well.'

× Yes, my mother and I used to enjoy baking sweets, including cookies or baked cake.

✓ Yes, my mother and I used to enjoy baking sweets, including cookies and cakes.

'Including cookies or baked cake' is awkward: use 'and' for listing and plural 'cakes' for general reference. 'Baked cake' is unnecessary; 'cakes' suffices.

× We used to enjoy to make it and now baking sweets is one of my favorite hobbies as well.

✓ We used to enjoy making them, and now baking sweets is one of my favorite hobbies as well.

After 'enjoy' the gerund form 'making' is required, not 'to make' (verb + -ing issue). The pronoun should be plural 'them' to refer to 'sweets.' Splitting into two clauses with a comma improves flow.