Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use natural collocations; avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain and give a specific example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., “stamp collection” instead of “storm collection”).

例: I don't have a regular hobby at the moment, but I plan to take up stamp collecting soon because it is relaxing and educational. For example, I want to start with modern stamps from different countries to learn about their history and culture.

提案: Answer clearly and reduce hesitation. Combine sentences to be more concise and use natural phrasing (e.g., “I used to play cricket and football, which helped me socialize with my peers”). Add a brief specific detail or memory to enrich the response.

例: When I was a child, I used to play cricket and football, which helped me make friends in my neighborhood. For example, we would play every afternoon after school and organize small matches on weekends.

提案: Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement that you have continued the hobby, then give one specific supporting detail about frequency or routine. Use linking words like “so” or “therefore” only when necessary.

例: Yes, I have continued playing cricket since childhood, and I usually play with friends in the evenings. For instance, we meet three times a week at the local ground for practice and friendly matches.

提案: Keep the answer natural and concise; reduce fillers like “uh” and “umm.” Start with a direct contrast sentence, then give specific examples of family members' hobbies and one sentence about your own. Use natural collocations such as “sports” or “sporting activities.”

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my father enjoys learning new languages and my sister loves reading novels, while I prefer participating in sports such as cricket and football.

× I have no hobby.

✓ I have no hobbies.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural when talking about not having any of them in general. Use 'hobbies' after 'no' to indicate zero items. Suggestion: say 'I have no hobbies' or 'I do not have a hobby.'

× I am planning to start any UMM habit like storm collection in the near future.

✓ I am planning to start a new hobby like stamp collecting in the near future.

Several issues: 'any' is incorrect with 'start' here; use an article 'a'. 'UMM' looks like filler—replace with appropriate word such as 'new'. 'habit' is wrong; 'hobby' fits. 'storm collection' is likely a mistake; 'stamp collecting' is a common hobby and uses the gerund form 'collecting'. Suggestion: use 'planning to start a new hobby such as stamp collecting.'

× It is beneficial for me to stay engaged and motivated myself.

✓ It is beneficial for me to stay engaged and motivated.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. After 'for me' you should not add 'myself'. Suggestion: remove 'myself' or rephrase 'It helps me stay engaged and motivated.'

× When I was a child, I used to play cricket and football.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play cricket and football.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'used to' properly expresses past habitual action. No correction needed. Included here to indicate checked sentence.

× By engaging these sports events, I could socialize myself with my peers.

✓ By engaging in these sports events, I could socialize with my peers.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'engage' when referring to activities: 'engage in these sports events.' Also 'socialize myself' is incorrect; use 'socialize with' others. Suggestion: 'By engaging in these sports events, I could socialize with my peers.'

× Since from my childhood I used to play cricket at evenings, I play cricket with my peers.

✓ Since my childhood I have played cricket in the evenings; I play cricket with my peers.

Remove 'from' after 'since' (use 'since my childhood'). For actions continuing to the present, use present perfect 'have played.' Use the prepositional phrase 'in the evenings' rather than 'at evenings.' Suggestion: 'Since my childhood I have played cricket in the evenings.'

× Umm yeah, even today I had played cricket in the even at the evening.

✓ Even today I played cricket in the evening.

Use simple past 'played' for a specific action earlier today or present perfect 'have played' if unspecified time. 'Had played' (past perfect) is not appropriate without another past reference. Also 'in the even' is a typo; use 'in the evening.' Remove redundant 'the' before evening. Suggestion: 'Even today I played cricket in the evening.'

× So since from my childhood I keep playing cricket that evenings.

✓ So, since my childhood, I have kept playing cricket on those evenings.

Remove 'from' after 'since.' Use present perfect 'have kept playing' to show continuation. 'That evenings' is ungrammatical; use 'those evenings' or 'the evenings.' Prefer: 'I have kept playing cricket in the evenings.'

× No. My family members have, uh, various hobbies.

✓ No. My family members have various hobbies.

This sentence is correct apart from filler 'uh' which can be removed for clarity. 'Have various hobbies' is grammatical. Included to show checked sentence.

× For example, my father is interested in learning new languages and my sister is interested in, umm, reading books.

✓ For example, my father is interested in learning new languages and my sister is interested in reading books.

The gerund forms 'learning' and 'reading' are correct after 'interested in.' Remove filler 'umm.' No grammatical correction needed beyond removing hesitation.

× But my interest is to actively engage in sport events.

✓ But my interest is in actively engaging in sports events.

'Interest is to actively engage' is awkward; better: 'my interest is in actively engaging in sports events.' Also use 'sports' (plural) and 'events' is fine. Alternatively: 'I am interested in actively participating in sporting events.'