Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子表达基本清晰，但存在语法错误、用词不准确和冗余。应改进动词时态和搭配（stay fitness → stay fit；families → family），避免多余连接词，使用更自然的衔接词并把信息组织成2–3句。可以增加具体细节（如画什么、打网球的级别或拍照风格）以提高内容丰富度。

例: Yes, I have a few hobbies. I enjoy drawing, especially sketching portraits, and I play tennis about twice a week to stay fit. I also like taking candid photos of my family and friends to capture special moments.

提案: 回答表达有时间和时态错误（混用现在时和过去时）、口语填充词较多，并且句子结构松散。应统一使用过去时，删去“uh/maybe”，并补充具体细节（舞蹈类型或记忆片段）。用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I did. I loved dancing as a child and started taking ballet classes when I was about five in kindergarten. I remember enjoying the music and practicing simple routines with my classmates.

提案: 答案中存在语法冗余和错误（重复主语、‘painting photos’用词不准确、部分句子不完整）。建议用一到两句直接说明从小到今的持续爱好，使用准确词汇（paint/draw portraits/animals）并给出具体原因或例子来支持观点。

例: Yes, drawing has been my main hobby since childhood. I used to draw animals and family portraits, and I still enjoy it because sketching helps me relax and focus.

提案: 回答总体清楚但有语法和表达错误（She favorite 1 is a little A Little Prince，冗余词、冠词错误和语序）。建议改成更自然的句子，说明共同爱好的原因并提供具体比较（为何喜欢各自的书），用连接词让句子通顺。

例: Yes, we do. My mother and I both enjoy novels. She loves The Little Prince, while my favorite is Pride and Prejudice because I appreciate the character development and the social details it portrays.

× I usually play tennis twice a week so that I can stay fitness.

✓ I usually play tennis twice a week so that I can stay fit.

“stay fitness” 是不正确的短语搭配，fitness 是名词，表示“健康/体能”。这里需要形容词 fit 来描述状态。建议记住常见搭配：stay fit / keep fit（保持健康）。

× And then I sometimes like taking photos of my families and my friends.

✓ And then I sometimes like taking photos of my family and my friends.

“families” 用复数不合适，因为说的是“我的家人”应为单数集合名词 family。此处问题属于名词使用，但在给定列表中最接近的是动名词形式使用的句子结构（喜欢做某事），保持动名词 taking 正确，需改为 family。建议记住 family 作集合名词时多用单数形式或用 family members。

× I like sculpting these special moments.

✓ I like capturing these special moments.

虽然“sculpting”字面上是“雕塑”，通常用于实体雕刻，不适合描述“记录瞬间”。更自然的表达是 capture/capturing。此处重点是动词选择不当，属于代替词/动词选择问题。建议使用 capture/photograph/record 来表达“记录时刻”。

× Yes, when I was a kid, I like dancing.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I liked dancing.

句子描述过去的习惯或状态，应使用过去时 liked，而不是现在时 like。建议在谈过去的事情时将动词改为过去式。

× I start taking dancing class when I was in the kindergarten about, uh, maybe five years old.

✓ I started taking dancing classes when I was in kindergarten, at about five years old.

描述过去事件要用过去式 started 而不是 start；另外 dance class 应为 dancing classes（或 a dancing class），且通常说 in kindergarten 或 at kindergarten。建议：过去发生的动作用过去式，名词单复数与冠词要注意。

× I enjoyed listening to the music and move my body.

✓ I enjoyed listening to music and moving my body.

enjoy 后应接动名词形式，因此 move 要改为 moving；另外 the music 可省去冠词更自然。建议记住 enjoy 后接 -ing 形式（enjoy doing）。

× Yes, it was the most important hobby I had as a kid was drawing.

✓ Yes, the most important hobby I had as a kid was drawing.

原句有重复主语结构（it was ... was），造成句子结构错误。应删除多余的 it was，使句子成为主系表结构。建议避免重复主语或系动词。

× I used to love painting photos, sometimes as animals and sometimes are my family members.

✓ I used to love drawing pictures, sometimes of animals and sometimes of my family members.

① painting photos 不合适，photo 是照片，通常用 draw/draw pictures 或 paint a picture；② 表示“关于/描绘”的介词应为 of，而不是 as；③ 第二部分语法错误（sometimes are）应为 sometimes of my family members。建议区分 draw 和 paint，使用正确介词 of 表示描绘对象。

× I just love drawing because it can feel.

✓ I just loved drawing because it made me feel relaxed.

原句不完整且时态混用。句子在谈过去的习惯，应保持过去时； moreover “it can feel” 不通顺，需改为 made me feel relaxed（让我感到放松）。建议保持时态一致并使用完整表达（make someone feel）。

× Yes we do. My mother and I both like reading novels. She favorite 1 is a little A Little Prince and my favorite one is the Pride and Prejudice.

✓ Yes, we do. My mother and I both like reading novels. Her favorite is The Little Prince and my favorite is Pride and Prejudice.

句子中有多个问题：① 缺少逗号分隔 Yes, we do；② “She favorite 1 is a little A Little Prince” 语序和单词错误，应为 Her favorite is The Little Prince；③ 书名不需冠词 the 在 Pride and Prejudice 前可省；这些属于冠词/词序与词形错误。建议注意物主代词 + favorite + 名词结构（Her favorite is ...）以及书名格式。

× I like it because I see the character development and some social details that's why.

✓ I like it because I can see the character development and some social details; that's why.

原句缺少连接与正确时态/情态表达。应在 because 后使用情态或时态（can see），并用分号或句号分开并用 that's why 说明原因。句尾的 that's why 不能紧跟在从句内。建议将原因句和强调句分开，并用 can see 表达能够观察到。