Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Remove filler sounds ("uh") and use a clear topic sentence followed by a brief supporting detail. Expand slightly with one specific detail (how often or why) and use a linking word if you add more than one idea.

例: Yes, I enjoy playing basketball in my free time. I usually play twice a week with friends because it helps me stay fit and relax.

提案: Correct tense and be more natural: use past tense consistently and combine sentences smoothly. Add a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I played football as a child. When I was ten my father introduced me to the sport, and I loved it because it helped me make friends and stay active.

提案: Fix grammar and structure: respond directly with a topic sentence, use past/perfect tenses correctly, and avoid listing without structure. Use linking words (for example, also) and be specific about one or two hobbies rather than many. Limit to max 5 sentences.

例: Yes. I have enjoyed origami and playing musical instruments since I was a child. For example, I started folding paper cranes at age seven, and I still practice the piano now because it helps me concentrate.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and clearer connections (e.g., "while" or "and"). Be specific about similarities or differences, and add a brief comparison or example to show how your hobbies relate to theirs.

例: Not exactly. My father is a music teacher and enjoys listening to classical music, while my mother likes singing. I share their interest in music—I also play an instrument and sometimes sing with my mother.

× Yes, uh, in my free time, I like, uh, playing basketball.

✓ Yes, uh, in my free time, I like playing basketball.

Unnecessary commas and fillers interrupt the sentence but the main grammatical issue is punctuation; 'like playing' is correct (verb + -ing). Remove extra commas and filler words for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: say 'In my free time I like playing basketball.'

× Well, I play football. When I was 10, my father got me into it.

✓ Well, I played football. When I was 10, my father got me into it.

The student answers a past-hobby question ('Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?') so past tense should be used. 'I play football' is present tense; change to 'I played football' to match the time frame. The second sentence is already correctly in past tense.

× Yes, of course I have many hobbies when I was child such as origami, listen to music and I like play instrument.

✓ Yes, of course I had many hobbies when I was a child, such as origami, listening to music, and playing musical instruments.

Multiple issues: the time frame requires past tense ('had' not 'have') — this is a tense issue. Also missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect verb forms following 'such as' and 'and' require gerunds: 'listening' and 'playing' (verb + -ing). 'Play instrument' should be 'playing musical instruments' or 'playing an instrument.' Fix word order and punctuation (commas) for clarity.

× Well my father is a music teacher so he like to listen classical music and my mother like sing a song.

✓ My father is a music teacher, so he likes to listen to classical music, and my mother likes to sing songs.

Subject-verb agreement/third person singular: with singular subjects 'he' and 'my mother' the verbs need -s: 'likes.' Also incorrect verb patterns: 'like to listen classical music' needs 'to listen to classical music' (preposition 'to'), and 'like sing a song' should be 'likes to sing songs' or 'likes singing.' Punctuation and conjunctions added for natural flow.