Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and word choice, reduce redundancy, and use linking words for clarity. Correct subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'weather is' not 'weather are'), choose the right verb for arts (e.g., 'draw' or 'do painting' instead of 'join picture'), and combine ideas with a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'otherwise'). Keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes. If the weather is good, I like to go hiking to get close to nature and breathe fresh air. However, when it is cold or rainy, I prefer to stay home and paint pictures, which helps me relax.

提案: Work on tense consistency, sentence structure and concise explanation. Use past tense for childhood activities (e.g., 'liked'), provide a clear reason with a linking word ('because' with subject-verb agreement), and avoid awkward phrasing ('attend many competitions'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences with specific details about feelings and reasons.

例: When I was in middle school, I liked long-distance running and trained a lot. However, my father encouraged me to attend many competitions, which made it stressful, so I don't do it anymore.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar, improve coherence and tense use. Use natural phrases like 'drawing' or 'painting', choose correct tool words ('markers' not 'mark marker'), fix word order and articles ('a strong sense of achievement'), and maintain present perfect/simple present to describe ongoing hobby.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since childhood. I use paints, markers and other sketching tools, and painting relaxes me; when I finish a piece I feel a strong sense of achievement.

提案: Fix pronouns and grammar, remove filler words, and make sequence and conditional phrasing natural. Use correct subject order ('my younger sister and I'), correct verb forms ('like to go hiking'), and clear conditional phrasing ('when I am in China on weekends'). Provide one concise example sentence linking family activities.

例: My younger sister and I both enjoy painting, and my whole family likes hiking. When I'm in China on weekends, we often go to a park to climb the nearby hills together.

× If the weather is good I like to go out and go hiking, just getting close to the nature and breathing fresh air.

✓ If the weather is good, I like to go out and go hiking, just getting close to nature and breathing fresh air.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'nature' is incorrect here. 'Nature' in this general sense is uncountable and does not need 'the'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: omit 'the' and punctuate the sentence correctly.

× But if the weather are not good, such as it is too cold or rainy, I would like to sit at home and join picture.

✓ But if the weather is not good, such as when it is too cold or rainy, I would like to stay at home and do some drawing.

'Weather' is singular so the verb should be 'is' not 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Such as it is' is awkward; use 'such as when it is' or rephrase. 'Join picture' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'draw a picture' or 'do some drawing'. Suggestion: use 'is', replace 'join picture' with 'stay at home and do some drawing' or 'draw pictures'.

× That made me feel really relaxed.

✓ That made me feel really relaxed.

This sentence is grammatically correct as past tense; no change required. It is included here to show the tense is appropriate after describing a past action.

× When I was young, probably in middle school, I really like to do long distance running.

✓ When I was young, probably in middle school, I really liked doing long-distance running.

The context is past ('When I was young'), so the verb should be in past tense: 'liked' not 'like'. Also 'do long distance running' is awkward; use 'doing long-distance running' and hyphenate 'long-distance' when used as a compound modifier. Suggestion: match tense to context and use gerund form.

× However, it might because my dad persuade me to take a lot of training and attend many competition.

✓ However, it might be because my dad persuaded me to take a lot of training and attend many competitions.

Missing verb 'be' after 'might' (modal + base). 'Persuade' must be past 'persuaded' to match past context. 'Competition' should be plural 'competitions' when referring to many. Suggestion: include 'be' after 'might', use past tense verbs and plural where needed.

× It made me feel stressed, so I never do that now.

✓ It made me feel stressed, so I don't do that now.

Mixing past ('made') with present usage 'never do' is inconsistent. Use present simple 'don't do' to express current habit. Suggestion: after describing a past cause, use present simple for current habits.

× Yes, that is drawing picture.

✓ Yes, that is drawing pictures.

'That is drawing picture' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'pictures' or rephrase as 'Yes, I have been drawing pictures' or 'Yes, drawing pictures.' Suggestion: use plural or a gerund phrase with pronoun subject.

× I can use paints and mark marker and any other sketching tools.

✓ I can use paints, markers and other sketching tools.

'Mark marker' is incorrect; likely meant 'markers'. Use plural and correct word order. Use commas to separate items. Suggestion: 'paints, markers and other sketching tools.'

× It made me feel really relaxed and I when I finished drawing a picture I will feel a strongly sense of achievement.

✓ It makes me feel really relaxed, and when I finish a drawing I feel a strong sense of achievement.

Tense and word form issues: keep present tense if referring to a habitual activity ('It makes... when I finish... I feel...'). 'Strongly' is an adverb but needs the adjective 'strong' to modify 'sense'. Remove extra 'I'. Suggestion: use consistent tense and correct adjective form.

× So I'm really enjoying it.

✓ So I really enjoy it.

Both forms can be acceptable, but for a habitual hobby use simple present 'I really enjoy it' rather than present continuous. Suggestion: use simple present for habits.

× Both of my younger sister and me like painting and all of my family members like go hiking.

✓ Both my younger sister and I like painting, and all of my family members like going hiking.

Use subject pronoun 'I' not 'me' in subject position. 'Like go hiking' is incorrect; use gerund 'going hiking'. Also 'Both of my younger sister and I' is awkward; 'Both my younger sister and I' is preferred. Suggestion: use correct subject pronoun and gerund form.

× So, uh, if I was in China on the weekend, we like to go to park to, umm, climb mountains together.

✓ So, uh, if I am in China on the weekend, we like to go to the park to climb mountains together.

Conditional time: for habitual present situations, use present simple 'if I am' not past 'if I was'. 'Go to park' needs the article 'the park'. Remove filler and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual situations and include 'the' before 'park'.