Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve ilgili ancak bazı tekrarlar, dilbilgisi hataları ve belirsiz ifadeler var. Cümleleri daha düzenli kurun, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve bağlaçlarla akışı iyileştirin. Ayrıca duyguyu ve nedeni daha spesifik örneklerle destekleyin. Örneğin, neden rahatladığınızı ve arkadaşlarınızla ne tür etkinlikler yaptığınızı belirtin.

例: I'm a big fan of tennis; I've played for nearly ten years, so it's an important part of my life. Playing helps me relax because it lets me focus on the game and forget daily stresses. I also enjoy socializing with my tennis friends after matches, which makes the sport even more enjoyable.

提案: Cevap kafa karıştırıcı ve dilbilgisi ile kelime kullanımı sorunları içeriyor. Geçmişteki hobilerden bahsederken zaman uyumuna dikkat edin, basit ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanın. Ayrıca anlattıklarınızı açık ve spesifik hale getirin (ne sıklıkta yaptığınız, ne kazandığınız gibi).

例: Yes. Besides tennis, I used to swim regularly when I was a child. I swam three times a week, which improved my fitness and taught me discipline and perseverance as I grew up.

提案: Cümlelerde zaman uyumu ve kelime seçimi yanlış. "Since" ve "for" kullanımını düzeltin, tekrarları kaldırın ve daha kısa, net bir yapı kullanın. Ayrıca hangi yaşta başladığınızı ve bunun hayatınıza etkisini kısa bir örnekle açıklayın.

例: Yes. I've been playing tennis for about ten years; I started when I was a child. It has become part of my daily routine and has taught me perseverance and time management.

提案: Cevap anlaşılır olmakla birlikte dilbilgisi, sayı ifadesi ve zamir hataları var. Aile üyelerinden bahsederken kim olduklarını ve davranışlarını nazikçe açıklayın; ayrıca kişisel duygu ve neden belirtin. Gereksiz telaffuz dolgu kelimelerini azaltın.

例: Yes, my older brother Ali also plays tennis. He can sometimes get anxious and competitive during matches, so I try to stay calm and support him to keep the game friendly.

× Yeah, I'm a big fan of tennis and I just like it a lot because I've been playing it for nearly ten years, so it's just part of my life.

✓ Yeah, I'm a big fan of tennis and I like it a lot because I've been playing it for nearly ten years, so it's just part of my life.

Use simple present 'I like' for a general preference. 'I just like it a lot' is informal but grammatically acceptable; removing 'just' clarifies the statement. Keep present perfect 'have been playing' to indicate an action continuing to the present.

× And while I'm playing tennis I feel kind of relaxed and I love my friends at tennis.

✓ And while I'm playing tennis I feel kind of relaxed and I love my friends from tennis.

Use 'from' to indicate origin or association with tennis; 'at tennis' is incorrect preposition. The tense 'I'm playing' is fine for simultaneous action; keep it.

× Yeah, I used to. As I told you before, I'm playing tennis, but in other hand I'm also making some.

✓ Yeah, I used to. As I told you before, I play tennis, but on the other hand I also did some.

Mixing 'used to' (past habit) with present progressive 'I'm playing' is inconsistent. For past habit use 'used to' or for present habit use 'I play'. 'On the other hand' is the correct phrase. 'I'm also making some' is ungrammatical; use 'I also did some' or better specify the activity.

× I used to make some swimming exercise when I was a child.

✓ I used to do some swimming exercises when I was a child.

'Make' is not used with 'swimming exercise'; use 'do'. Also plural 'exercises' is more natural. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit.

× So it was also helped to became a grown man often and it just, umm, have a prominent role in my mulling over capacity over years.

✓ So it also helped me become a grown man and it has had a prominent role in my thinking capacity over the years.

'Helped to became' is wrong: use 'helped me become' (base form after 'help'). 'Have a prominent role' should be 'has had' to show ongoing influence from past to present. 'Mulling over capacity' is unnatural; use 'thinking capacity' or 'ability to think'. 'Over years' should be 'over the years'.

× Yeah, I'm playing tennis since 10 years, so it's just kinda peace of my life and I'm just doing it, doing it nearly the time that I'm born.

✓ I've been playing tennis for 10 years, so it's kind of a piece of my life and I've been doing it for almost as long as I can remember.

Use present perfect continuous 'I've been playing' with 'for 10 years' (duration). 'Since' requires a specific start point. 'Peace' should be 'piece'. 'Nearly the time that I'm born' is incorrect; use 'for almost as long as I can remember'.

× So it's just kinda part of my life, not a childhood.

✓ So it's just kind of part of my life, not just my childhood.

Use 'kind of' and 'not just my childhood' to contrast lifelong habit versus limited to childhood. 'A childhood' is incorrect in this context.

× Yeah, uh, also my 7 Brother Ali playing tennis too, but he can be a little bit anxious while playing it and he can be a little bit angry.

✓ Yeah, also my brother Ali, who is 7, plays tennis too, but he can be a little anxious while playing and he can get a little angry.

Number should be placed after 'who is' to describe age. Use 'plays' for habitual action (third person singular). 'A little bit anxious' is wordy; 'a little anxious' is natural. Omit 'it' after 'playing' when context is clear.

× So I need to be careful while I'm playing with her him so he gets a little bit aggressive.

✓ So I need to be careful when I'm playing with him because he can get a little aggressive.

Use 'him' as the correct object pronoun. 'While' can be used but 'when' is more natural here. Replace 'so he gets' with 'because he can get' to explain the reason. Remove extra pronoun 'her'.