Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中应该更自然且更简洁地表达观点，避免多余的填充词（如“uh”）并使用连贯的衔接词。可以先给出主题句，然后补充一两项具体例子并说明原因或效果，控制在最多五句内。建议练习使用更地道的短语（例如“I enjoy”或“I mainly do”）并把理由和具体频率或感受结合起来。

例: I enjoy several hobbies, mainly physical activities such as swimming, jogging and weightlifting. I usually go jogging three times a week and swim once or twice, which helps me stay fit and relieve stress.

提案: 回答需要更流畅并减少断断续续和重复。应先直接回答，然后用一两句具体说明当时的经历（例如上芭蕾舞课的频率或年龄）以及为什么后来不喜欢。避免含糊或自我纠正的口语片段，使用连接词如“although”或“however”使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes. I used to take ballet classes from age seven to ten, and I enjoyed learning the moves. However, as I grew older I realized I preferred more active sports, so I stopped dancing.

提案: 回答总体明确但需更自然和精练，注意语法（时态和搭配）以及句子结尾完整。先给主题句，再用一两句说明持续时间、频率和具体好处，使用连接词如“so”或“which”来连贯信息。避免句子未完成或重复表达。

例: Yes, I've been swimming since I was a child and I still swim regularly. I usually swim twice a week, which helps me relax, stay fit and clear my mind.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意语法和搭配（时态、单复数、词序）。先直接回答，再具体比较你的爱好与家人的不同，给出简短原因或例子。使用连接词如“because”或“while”来突出对比，避免重复短语。

例: No, my hobbies are different from my parents'. While my mother enjoys basketball and my father likes playing table tennis, I prefer individual sports like swimming and weightlifting because I enjoy training at my own pace.

× Because I do believe it just uh, the physical fitness can help us to live a better life.

✓ Because I do believe that physical fitness can help us live a better life.

句中“just uh, the physical fitness”使用不当且多余口语填充词。需要用连词“that”引出宾语从句，并且不需要定冠词“the”在泛指“physical fitness”时。将“help us to live”简化为“help us live”更自然。建议去掉填充词，使用连接词，使句子更连贯。

× Yes, I had when I was a child. I love, I love to dance and I T to be honest, I do have those kind of experiences to have ballet classes.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I loved, I loved to dance and, to be honest, I did have that kind of experience taking ballet classes.

第一句作过去时询问的回答应使用助动词“did”而不是“had”。后面描述童年的喜好和经历应使用过去时“loved”及“did have”。“those kind of experiences”中的“those”与“experience”数不一致，改为“that kind of experience”。“to have ballet classes”表达不自然，改为“taking ballet classes”。建议在描述过去的习惯或经历时统一使用过去时，注意单复数一致与固定搭配。

× But when I'm recalling all those kind of thing, I just realized I don't really like it.

✓ But when I recall all those kinds of things, I realize I don't really like it.

原句时态与语法混杂：既用现在进行时“I'm recalling”又用过去时“realized”。应在描述一般事实或现在的回想时用一般现在时“recall/realize”。“those kind of thing”数不匹配，改为“those kinds of things”或“that kind of thing”。建议保持时态一致并修正数的搭配。

× Yes, it's swimming. Swimming is the only hobby I already had since I was a child and now I'm still continue to do that.

✓ Yes, it's swimming. Swimming is the only hobby I have had since I was a child and I still continue to do it now.

句中“already had since I was a child”时态混乱，应使用现在完成时“have had”表示从过去持续到现在的状态。“now I'm still continue to do that”中“continue”不应与进行时“I'm”连用，改为“I still continue to do it now”或更自然的“I still do it.” 建议使用现在完成时描述从过去持续到现在的情况，并注意动词搭配。

× When I have time I often swim twice a week and I believe this can help me to relax my mind and.

✓ When I have time, I often swim twice a week and I believe this can help me relax my mind.

句末残缺，去掉多余的“and”。“help me to relax”可简化为“help me relax”。同时在“When I have time”之后加逗号使句子更自然。建议完整表达句子并避免句尾残缺与多余短词。

× Unfortunately, no. My parents say for example, my mom, she love playing basketball and my dad, he loved to play in the table tennis.

✓ Unfortunately, no. My parents, for example, my mom loves playing basketball and my dad loves playing table tennis.

“my mom, she love”存在主语重复且动词人称不一致，应为“mom loves”。“he loved to play in the table tennis”中“in the”多余且时态不一致，应为“loves playing table tennis”。建议去掉赘余代词，保持主谓一致，并使用正确搭配“play table tennis”或“play tennis”改为“play table tennis”。

× So they all like to cooperate. Teamwork sports, it's a little bit a little bit different for them. I just like the individual exercise.

✓ So they all like cooperative, team sports; it's a bit different for them. I just like individual exercise.

原句断句和结构混乱。“like to cooperate. Teamwork sports”不是自然表达，应改为“like cooperative team sports”或“like team sports”。“it's a little bit a little bit different”重复，应删去重复词并改为“it's a bit different”。“the individual exercise”中定冠词多余，改为“individual exercise”或更自然“I prefer individual sports.” 建议合并短语为流畅表达，避免重复和多余冠词。