Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为重复且句子结构有语法和表达问题。要直接回应问题并用1句主题句概括爱好，随后用至多两句具体细节支持。注意时态和词汇搭配（例如“late exercise”应为“light exercise”或“morning exercise”），避免重复词语（如“in the morning”重复）。另外注意句子完整性，避免残句（如结尾的“where the atmosphere”不完整）。

例: I have several hobbies, including cooking, swimming and light exercise like jogging and yoga. For example, I usually get up at 7:00 and jog in the local park because the fresh air helps me feel energetic for the day.

提案: 回答中时态混用且有重复表述，句子不够流畅且最后出现残句。建议用过去时描述儿童时期的爱好，提供一到两个具体原因或例子并用连词连接，避免重复意思。

例: Yes. When I was a child I loved swimming because it made me feel happy and relaxed after long hours of studying. For example, I often went to the local pool with my friends on weekends and practiced for fun.

提案: 回答重复多个固定短语且时态不一致（混用现在完成和过去），并有残句。应先给出清晰的主题句说明持续性（例如用“since childhood”或“for years”），然后用一两句举例说明频率或好处，注意句子完整和连贯。

例: Yes, I have enjoyed jogging and yoga since I was a child because they keep me healthy and balanced. For example, I still exercise every morning in a quiet park, which helps me start the day calmly.

提案: 回答有代词和数的一致性问题（例如“we were a little child”错误），且语句结尾不完整。要用正确的主谓一致和时态，清楚表达“我们一起有相同爱好”并给出具体频率或活动细节，避免含糊的结尾。

例: Yes. My parents and I all enjoy jogging and yoga, and we've done these activities together since I was a child. For example, we usually jog together in our local park every morning and then do a short yoga stretch afterwards.

× I have so many hobbies such as cooking, swimming and doing some light exercise such as jogging and yoga.

✓ I have many hobbies such as cooking, swimming, and doing light exercise such as jogging and yoga.

句子中 “doing some light exercise such as jogging and yoga” 用法可以接受，但重复的“such as” 和多余的“some”显得啰嗦。此处属于动名词结构（Verb + -ing）的使用，建议去掉多余词使表达更简洁：将“so many”改为“many”，将“doing some light exercise such as jogging and yoga”改为“doing light exercise such as jogging and yoga”。

× For example, every morning I get up at 7:00 in the morning and do some late exercise jogging in the local park where the atmosphere.

✓ For example, every morning I get up at 7:00 and do some light jogging in the local park where the atmosphere is pleasant.

原句结构混乱：重复出现“in the morning”，且“late exercise jogging” 词序和用词错误，应为“light jogging”。短语“where the atmosphere”是不完整的定语从句，缺少谓语，需补全为“where the atmosphere is pleasant”。建议保持句子结构完整并修正形容词和副词顺序。

× When I was a little girl, I particularly enjoy swimming in the pool because it really made me feel happy and relaxed, especially after a busy study.

✓ When I was a little girl, I particularly enjoyed swimming in the pool because it really made me feel happy and relaxed, especially after busy studying.

时间状语“when I was a little girl”表明过去时间，谓语动词应使用过去时，因此“enjoy”应改为“enjoyed”。另外“after a busy study” 不地道，应改为“after busy studying” 或“after a busy study period/after studying hard”。综上需将动词时态与时间状语一致。

× I always thought that it can make my body feel happy and relaxed, made my body.

✓ I always thought that it could make my body feel happy and relaxed.

这里主句“I always thought”是过去时，宾语从句中的情态动词应使用过去形式“could”而不是“can”。末尾“made my body.” 是不完整且重复的短语，应删除。属于过去分词/情态动词时态一致问题，需使从句时态与主句一致并删去多余部分。

× I always enjoy doing some late exercise such as jogging and yoga which really made my body healthy and balanced.

✓ I always enjoy doing light exercise such as jogging and yoga, which really makes my body healthy and balanced.

句首“I always enjoy”是一般现在时，后面谓语从句“which really made” 使用了过去时，与主句时态不一致，应改为现在时“makes”。“late exercise” 用词不当，改为“light exercise”。同时在“which”引导的非限制性定语从句前应加逗号。属于动名词与从句时态一致问题。

× For example, every morning when I get up I will do some exercise in my local park where the atmosphere is quiet and pleasant which.

✓ For example, every morning when I get up I do some exercise in my local park, where the atmosphere is quiet and pleasant.

句子中“which”放在句末并且多余，且在表达习惯性动作时不需要“will”，应使用一般现在时“do”。应把定语从句用逗号与主句分开并去掉句末的“which”。属于句子结构和从句连接词使用错误。

× My family members, just my father and mother and me both enjoy jogging and practicing yoga since we were a little child because they helped me maintain our fitness and reduce stress.

✓ My family members — my father, my mother, and I — have enjoyed jogging and practicing yoga since we were little because it helps us maintain our fitness and reduce stress.

原句代词使用和人称不一致：列举人物时“me”应为主格“I”。表达自孩童起持续的动作应使用现在完成时“have enjoyed”或一般现在完成进行时。因果从句“because they helped me maintain our fitness” 中的代词指代混乱，改为“it helps us” 或“which helps us”，保持代词一致并改正时态。另“a little child” 不自然，改为“little”。

× For example, every morning we jog in our local park and do a short.

✓ For example, every morning we jog in our local park and do a short workout.

句尾“do a short.” 不完整，缺少名词，需补全为“do a short workout” 或“do a short session”。这是句子结构不完整的问题，需补全名词以完成谓语宾语结构。