Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và mạch lạc hơn; tránh từ thừa, phát âm sai và ngữ pháp lộn xộn. Nên nêu rõ một câu chủ đề, sau đó liệt kê 2-3 sở thích cụ thể với chi tiết ngắn và liên kết bằng từ nối. Chú ý dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'pokes' không phù hợp; dùng 'hiking' hoặc 'outings'), sửa cấu trúc như 'I do it in my free time' thành 'I do these in my free time' và thay 'it's very heavy to entertain' bằng 'they help me relax'.

例: To be honest, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy reading novels and playing soccer with my friends. I also like going on family outings at weekends because these activities help me relax after studying.

提案: Cần dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ và tránh tiếng ồm ồm; nói rõ sở thích cụ thể và lý do. Sửa lỗi từ (ví dụ 'trial' -> 'a child'), 'flying many things like toys' nên là 'flying toy airplanes' hoặc 'playing with toy planes'. Dùng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối lý do như 'because' và diễn đạt cảm xúc đúng: 'I felt happy' hoặc 'it made me feel relaxed'.

例: When I was a child, I had many hobbies such as playing computer games and flying toy airplanes. I often did these activities because they made me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Trả lời rõ ràng với thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc present simple cho sở thích kéo dài: 'I have played football since I was a child' hoặc 'I've played football since childhood'. Giữ câu ngắn, sửa ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement) và dùng linking word 'so' hoặc 'because' hợp lí. Nên nêu thêm tần suất hoặc hoạt động cụ thể.

例: Yes, I have played football since I was a child. I usually play football with my friends twice a week because it helps me relax and stay fit.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và chuỗi lặp từ. Dùng thì hiện tại cho thói quen: 'My father likes watching football and I do too.' Nên nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về việc cùng làm và sửa tên giải đấu ('FIFA World Cup' thay vì 'IAFF'). Nói rõ cảm xúc khi đội thắng: 'we celebrate together'.

例: Yes, I share a hobby with my father. He likes watching football and I do too, so we often watch Vietnamese national team matches together and celebrate when they win tournaments like the FIFA World Cup qualifiers.

× Wealth To be honest, I have many hobbies in my life.

✓ To be honest, I have many hobbies.

The word 'Wealth' is misplaced and unnecessary, creating a sentence structure error. Remove 'Wealth' and the redundant phrase 'in my life' to make the sentence natural and concise.

× For instance, I like reading, pokes, playing soccer with my friend or even or even go outside with my family office.

✓ For instance, I like reading, playing soccer with my friends, or going outside with my family.

The word 'pokes' is incorrect here and 'go' should be the gerund 'going' after listing hobbies; 'friend' should be plural if speaking about more than one or left singular consistently. 'office' is incorrect and likely unnecessary. Use parallel gerunds for items in a list.

× I do it in my free time, it's very heavy to entertain after study.

✓ I do these activities in my free time; they help me relax after studying.

The phrase 'very heavy to entertain' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear expression of purpose: 'they help me relax after studying.' Use plural reference 'these activities' and a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× Well, actually when I was trial, I have a lot of hobby such as playing games, umm uh, flying many things like toys or even do something that's different with other P other persons that because that make I feel heavy and comfortable.

✓ Well, actually when I was a child, I had a lot of hobbies such as playing games, flying toy planes, or doing things that were different from other people because they made me feel happy and comfortable.

Use 'child' instead of 'trial'. When referring to past habits, use past tense 'had' and 'were'. Use correct nouns ('toys' -> 'toy planes') and correct pronoun order. 'Make I feel' is incorrect; use 'made me feel'. Replace 'heavy' with 'happy' or 'comfortable' as appropriate.

× Well to be honest, I actually have a hobby that I play when I'm going to try or does football because I'm a person who are very like footballs and I always play with my friend because it led me to entertain and relax after study.

✓ Well, to be honest, I have a hobby of playing football because I like football very much, and I always play with my friends because it helps me relax after studying.

Use a clear noun phrase 'a hobby of playing football'. Maintain subject-verb agreement: 'I like', 'helps me'. Use plural 'friends' if appropriate and consistent verb forms 'helps' instead of 'led'. Also use present simple for habitual activities.

× Oh definitely yes I have the same hobbies with my father, he like to watching football and I also like that me and my father always watching Vietnamese football teams when they won a like won a lot tournament like IAFF cup or World Cup.

✓ Oh definitely yes, I have the same hobbies as my father. He likes watching football and I do too; my father and I always watch the Vietnamese national team when they participate in big tournaments like the AFC Cup or the World Cup.

Use 'as' for similarity with family members: 'the same hobbies as my father'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'He likes'. Use 'watch' in correct forms and 'do too' to express shared preference. 'When they won a like won a lot tournament' is ungrammatical—use 'when they participate in big tournaments'. Correct tournament name 'AFC Cup'.