Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and shows personality, but there are grammatical errors, an incomplete final sentence, some redundancy, and slightly long phrasing. To improve, keep sentences concise (max 5), fix subject-verb agreement (e.g., "designs that are pleasing"), finish thoughts, and add a brief linking phrase for clarity. Use one clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words like "also" or "for example."

例: I enjoy baking cakes and pastries as a hobby. It allows me to express my creativity through decorative designs that are pleasing to the eye. I usually bake for special occasions like birthdays and family gatherings, and I also enjoy experimenting with new flavors.

提案: Good content and personal detail, but there are grammatical and tense issues, and some redundancy. Make a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., "when she cooked," "I learned to cook them on my own," "it became a passion"), and use a linking word like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes. When I was young I watched my mother cook Filipino dishes, and she taught me many recipes. I learned to cook on my own, so over time it became a real passion and hobby for me.

提案: Your answer is clear in meaning but needs better sentence structure and tense consistency. Begin with a direct topic sentence ("Yes, I have cooked since childhood."), use linking words such as "for example" or "also," and correct grammar ("it helped me to enhance" or "it has helped me enhance"). Avoid repeating ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed cooking since childhood. I used to create my own recipes, which helped me improve my culinary skills. For example, I would ask my parents to taste my dishes, and their positive feedback made me happy and more confident.

提案: Answer is relevant but has grammar errors, awkward phrasing, and an incomplete ending. Use clear contrast markers ("Not really" is good), correct subject-verb agreement ("they don't"), and smoother phrasing ("we all love food" rather than "we have similarities for being a food lover"). Finish the sentence with a specific example. Keep to 3–4 sentences and add a linking word like "however" or "but."

例: Not really. I love cooking, but my siblings aren't fond of it because they think it's messy and don't want their hands dirty. However, we are similar as food lovers, and we often enjoy trying different recipes together at family meals.

× For me, baking helps me to express my creativity by making various designs that is pleasing to the eyes.

✓ For me, baking helps me to express my creativity by making various designs that are pleasing to the eyes.

Subject-verb agreement with a relative clause: 'designs' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Use plural verb form to match the plural noun. Suggestion: identify the noun before the verb in relative clauses to choose singular or plural verb. (Grammar problem type ID: 10)

× I usually bake during occasions like birthday parties or family gatherings and I make sure.

✓ I usually bake for occasions like birthday parties or family gatherings, and I make sure to prepare enough for everyone.

The original sentence ends abruptly and lacks an object/complement after 'make sure'. Complete the clause with an infinitive or a clause showing what is ensured. Suggestion: when using 'make sure', follow it with 'to' + verb or a clause (e.g., 'make sure that...'). (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Of course, when I was young, I used to watch my mom when she cooks and she taught me different recipes for Filipino dishes.

✓ Of course, when I was young, I used to watch my mom when she cooked, and she taught me different recipes for Filipino dishes.

Mixing past habitual 'used to' with present tense 'cooks' is inconsistent. The action being described is in the past, so 'cooked' should be used. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense when describing past habits or events. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× I remember I learned to cook them my own and eventually it becomes a passion and a hobby for me when I grow old.

✓ I remember I learned to cook them on my own, and eventually it became a passion and a hobby for me as I grew older.

Several tense and word-usage issues: 'my own' should be 'on my own' (correct preposition), 'becomes' should be past 'became' to match past narrative, and 'when I grow old' should be 'as I grew older' to keep past perspective. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout this recollection and use correct prepositional phrase 'on my own'. (Grammar problem type ID: 9)

× Yes, I love cooking since I was a child I remember I used to create different recipes of my own and it helps me to enhance my culinary skills.

✓ Yes, I have loved cooking since I was a child. I remember I used to create different recipes of my own, and it helped me to enhance my culinary skills.

Time reference 'since I was a child' requires present perfect 'have loved' to show a continuing state up to now; the subsequent clause describes past habitual actions so use past tense 'helped'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions/states that started in the past and continue to the present, and use past for completed past habits. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Also, I let my parents taste my cooking and I feel happy whenever they love the food and they tell me that.

✓ Also, I let my parents taste my cooking, and I feel happy whenever they like the food and tell me so.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy: 'they love the food and they tell me that' is wordy; 'like' fits better for repeated reactions, and 'tell me so' is a concise way to report feedback. Suggestion: prefer concise verbs for repeated responses and avoid unnecessary repetition of the subject. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Not really. I love cooking while my siblings are not fond of it. They think that cooking is a messy job and they doesn't want their hands to get dirty in the kitchen.

✓ Not really. I love cooking while my siblings are not fond of it. They think that cooking is a messy job and they don't want their hands to get dirty in the kitchen.

Subject-verb agreement: 'they' is plural so the auxiliary should be 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verb forms (do -> don't). (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× However, we have similarities for being a food lover, we do eat different recipes and.

✓ However, we are similar in being food lovers; we do eat different recipes together.

Unclear phrasing and an incomplete sentence: 'we have similarities for being a food lover' is awkward and 'and.' leaves the sentence unfinished. Revised: use 'similar in' and complete the second clause, for example 'eat different recipes together.' Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete and use natural prepositional phrases like 'similar in' or 'similar because'. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)