Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: tránh lỗi lặp từ, sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu. Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ, dùng từ nối để liên kết ý (ví dụ: because, so, therefore). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, tần suất) để tăng độ phong phú của câu trả lời.

例: Yes, I do. My main hobby is sleeping because my studies take up a lot of my time, so I like to relax by taking short naps in the evening. For example, I usually nap for about 30 minutes after dinner, which helps me feel refreshed for homework.

提案: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và chính xác: chỉnh tenses cho nhất quán (past simple), tránh diễn đạt mơ hồ như “being an economist”; cung cấp thêm ví dụ cụ thể về sách hoặc hoạt động để làm rõ sở thích.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I was interested in economics because my mother worked in that field. I used to read children's books about money and simple business ideas, and I even played shop with my friends to practice. That curiosity helped me understand basic finance early on.

提案: Cải thiện phát âm viết (chọn từ chính xác) và ngữ pháp: sửa lỗi đánh máy/diễn đạt như “you hold”, “seeing the the”. Trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn, dùng linking words (for example, because) và nêu tần suất hoặc loại video cụ thể để trả lời có trọng tâm hơn.

例: Yes, I do. Since childhood I have enjoyed watching short videos on YouTube and TikTok because they help me relax and teach me useful tips. For example, I often watch 5–10 minute videos about cooking or study techniques every evening.

提案: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: sửa lỗi lặp, dùng thì đúng (present simple), và cung cấp một hoặc hai hoạt động cụ thể gia đình làm cùng. Dùng từ nối như “for example” hoặc “usually” để liên kết ý và tránh liệt kê lộn xộn.

例: Yes, we do. My family usually spends weekends together doing simple activities. For example, we often cook meals together, play board games, talk about our week, or watch movies in the evening.

× Yes I do. I my hobby is sleeping because my studying takes takes me a lot of time so I always want to relax by sleeping after a tiring day.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobby is sleeping because my studying takes a lot of my time, so I always want to relax by sleeping after a tiring day.

The sentence had extra and misplaced words causing sentence structure problems (Grammar problem type 26). Remove the duplicated 'takes', delete the extraneous 'I' before 'my hobby', and reorder 'a lot of my time' for natural English. Add commas to separate clauses. Suggestions: read sentences aloud to find extra words, and use commas to join independent clauses with coordinating conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I did. I remember being an economist like my mom.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember wanting to be an economist like my mom.

The original uses 'remember being an economist' which implies past experience of actually being one. The intended meaning is a past desire, so use 'remember wanting to be' (Grammar problem type 5). Suggestion: use 'wanting to be' to express past desire. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I used to read a lot of books about finance and economy because I'm really curious about it.

✓ I used to read a lot of books about finance and the economy because I was really curious about them.

Mix of tenses: 'used to' indicates past habit so follow with past-state 'was'. Also 'economy' needs 'the economy' or 'economics'; and 'it' should agree with plural 'books' or with the field 'the economy'—here use 'them' for books or change referent. This matches Grammar problem type 8 (verb + -ing) and 6 (present tense) but main issue is tense consistency (5/6). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past habits and match pronouns to their antecedents. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I would learn better to become a businesswoman like my mother.

✓ I studied to become a businesswoman like my mother.

'I would learn better to become' is ungrammatical and unclear. For past habitual effort, use 'I studied' or 'I worked hard to become' (Grammar problem type 26). Suggestion: choose a clear past verb phrase to express past actions (studied/worked hard) rather than 'would learn better'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes I have a hobby that I have had since you hold is seeing the the short videos in Tiktok or YouTube because it make me relax and it brings a lot of information that are really benefit for me.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby that I have had since I was young: watching short videos on TikTok or YouTube because they make me relax and bring a lot of useful information for me.

Multiple issues: nonsensical phrase 'since you hold is', repeated 'the', incorrect verb forms ('make' should be 'make' agreeing with 'they'), and 'are really benefit' should be 'are really beneficial' or 'bring useful information' (Grammar problem types 26, 11, 13, 27). Fixed by rephrasing 'since I was young' and using 'watching' (verb + -ing) and correcting agreement. Suggestion: simplify the clause, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct adjective forms like 'useful' or 'beneficial'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It uses the correct preposition 'as' to compare. No grammar problem from the list applies. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes I have. My family always spend time our weekends together cooking a milk or cooking a milk or play some games or talk together or watching watch.

✓ Yes, we do. My family always spend our weekends together cooking, playing games, talking, or watching videos.

Original has wrong subject-verb agreement ('My family always spend' should be 'spends' or use 'we do'), repeated phrase 'cooking a milk', incorrect verb forms and mixing gerunds/infinitives. Rephrase to parallel gerunds: 'cooking, playing, talking, watching' (Grammar problem types 27 and 26). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('family' singular or use 'we') and use parallel structure for list items; remove nonsensical 'cooking a milk' and replace with appropriate activity. Grammar problem type ID:27