Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁并避免重复，同时保持自然。先用一句话直接回答问题，然后用1–2句具体说明原因或例子，并用连接词衔接。例如不要重复“clear my mind”两次，改用同义表达或扩展细节。还要注意语法（单复数、冠词）和流利度。

例: Yes, I enjoy exercising, especially running, jogging and swimming. I find that regular exercise helps me relieve stress and improves my concentration, for example after a 30-minute run I feel more relaxed and focused.

提案: 回答需注意时态一致与用词准确，避免无意义或错误的词汇（如“money stories”）。先用一句话说明喜欢阅读，然后提供具体细节（喜欢的书籍类型、与朋友讨论的主题或感受），使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, I loved reading when I was a child, especially adventure and fantasy novels. I often read with my friends and we would discuss our favorite characters and exciting plot twists, which made reading very fun and relaxing.

提案: 回答要完整并注意句子结尾，保持时态和语法正确。先直接回答，然后解释原因并加上具体例子（什么时候、和谁一起、如何坚持）。使用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑。

例: Yes, I have done sports since childhood because my parents often exercised and encouraged me to join them. For example, every weekend they took me to the park for a run or a swim, which helped me build a regular exercise routine.

提案: 回答要避免口语填充和重复错误（如多次出现“did”）。先肯定回答，然后具体说明与家人一起做什么、频率和感受，使用正确的动词形式和连接词，使表达自然流畅。

例: Yes, I share the same hobby with my grandparents; we often exercise together. For example, when I was young we would meet in the park every morning to walk or do light jogging, which was a nice way to spend time together and stay healthy.

× Yes sure I like exercising such as running, jogging and swimming because doing sports helps me to clear my mind and after exercising I will feel very relaxed and clear my mind. Also that is one of my favorite hobby to stay healthy.

✓ Yes, sure. I like exercising, such as running, jogging and swimming, because doing sports helps me clear my mind. After exercising I feel very relaxed and refreshed. Also, that is one of my my favorite hobbies to stay healthy.

问题类型：动词+ing形式和名词单复数。句中“helps me to clear my mind”可以简化为“helps me clear my mind”；“after exercising I will feel”在一般现在习惯性动作中应使用一般现在时“I feel”；“my favorite hobby”应为复数“my favorite hobbies”与前文泛指多种运动保持一致。建议：习惯性或常态表达用一般现在时；动词短语中“help”后面可接不带to的动词原形；注意可数名词单复数的一致性。

× Yes, when I was a child I like reading books, especially reading some novels when I was in primary school, I like reading some stories with my friends and we can talk about money stories each with each other and that make made me felt very happy and relaxing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked reading books, especially novels. When I was in primary school, I liked reading stories with my friends and we could talk about many stories with each other, and that made me feel very happy and relaxed.

问题类型：过去时错误。叙述过去的经历应使用过去时，句中多处现在时“like”应改为过去式“liked”；“make made me felt”是混用，正确为“made me feel”；“relaxing”在这里应为形容词“relaxed”。建议：回忆过去的事情时统一使用过去时，注意动词形式和形容词/分词的正确用法。

× Yes, doing sports is one of my hobbies since childhood because my parents are passionate about doing sports such as running, jogging and swimming and when they exercise they will take me together so I cultivated the habit of.

✓ Yes. Doing sports has been one of my hobbies since childhood because my parents are passionate about sports such as running, jogging and swimming. When they exercised, they took me with them, so I cultivated the habit.

问题类型：动词+ing形式与时态错误。句首描述从过去延续到现在的爱好应使用现在完成时“has been”；“when they exercise they will take me together”时间范畴为过去时，改为“when they exercised, they took me with them”；句末不完整“so I cultivated the habit of.”需要补全为“so I cultivated the habit”。建议：表示从过去延续到现在用现在完成时；注意句子完整性并调整时态一致性。

× Yes, sure, I like doing sports with my grandparents. My grandparents are passionate about doing sports too and when I was a child they often do did did sports and to commit together. So we always do did exercise in the park together.

✓ Yes, sure. I like doing sports with my grandparents. My grandparents are passionate about sports too, and when I was a child they often did sports and would take me with them. So we always exercised in the park together.

问题类型：代词和动词形式错误。原句有重复错误“do did did”，应为过去式“did”；“to commit together”用词不当，应改为“would take me with them”或“would exercise together”；最后一句应使用过去式“exercised”。建议：避免笔误或重复，保持时态一致，用恰当短语表达“带我一起”或“一起锻炼”。