Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构需要更自然、流畅并避免小错误。回答应直接开门见山，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意冠词和介词用法（例如：play basketball, at the weekend）。尽量将答案控制在最多五句内，并用连词使衔接更好。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading novels and listening to music, and I also play basketball with my friends on the weekend. We usually meet at a local court and play for an hour, which helps me relax and stay fit.

提案: 时态和流畅性需要改进。避免口头语“uh”，过去习惯用过去式表述（I liked）。第二句应更具体，说明怎么用想象力，或举例说明作品。使用连接词让句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I liked drawing and painting when I was a child. It was fun because I could use my imagination to create colorful scenes, such as animals and fantasy landscapes, which made me feel proud of my drawings.

提案: 注意时态和语法错误（应为“liked”、“sent”或“sent me to classes”）。回答要包含主题句和具体细节，说明持续时间或变与不变的原因。不要重复前面回答的内容过多，可用一两句说明维持原因。

例: Yes, I have kept drawing since childhood. When I was young my mother often sent me to art classes on weekends, which helped me improve my skills and kept me interested in drawing over the years.

提案: 总体表达清楚，但有小语法错误（it can helps → it can help）和重复“fun”。可以用一两句具体例子说明一起做这些活动的频率或具体活动，以增强内容丰富度。

例: Yes, we share some hobbies like watching movies and cooking together. For example, every Sunday we pick a film to watch and then try a new recipe together, which brings us closer and creates good family memories.

× For example, I play with basketball with my friends at weekend.

✓ For example, I play basketball with my friends at the weekend.

句中有两个介词错误：不需要使用兩次 with（“play basketball” 為固定搭配，不加 with）；此外，“at weekend” 英式英语应为“at the weekend”，或美式英语用“on weekends”。建议根据语境使用“at the weekend”或“on weekends”。

× I like uh, drawing and painting when I was a child.

✓ I liked drawing and painting when I was a child.

句子时间不一致：主句谈过去（when I was a child），谓语应使用过去时。原句使用现在时 like，与 when 引导的过去时间冲突。应将 like 改为 liked。

× It is fun and I can use my imagination to draw in some pictures.

✓ It was fun and I could use my imagination to draw some pictures.

首先，时态与“when I was a child”保持一致应为过去时（was, could）。其次，短语“draw in some pictures”不自然，正确搭配为“draw some pictures”或“paint some pictures”。因此将 draw in 改为 draw 并调整时态。

× When I was young, on weekends my mother often send sent me to the classes to join.

✓ When I was young, on weekends my mother often sent me to the classes to join.

存在两处问题：1) 动词形式错误，原文有重复并用了错误时态“send sent”，应使用过去式 sent；2) 短语“to the classes to join”不自然，可简化为“sent me to classes”或“sent me to the classes to join”改为“sent me to classes to join”。已将句子改为自然且时态一致的表达。

× I think it is fun and it can helps us get closer.

✓ I think it is fun and it can help us get closer.

情态动词 can 后接动词原形，不能加 -s。原句“can helps”违反第三人称单数规则和情态动词用法，应改为“can help”。